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Not bad, just too little

The setting of the rebirth system is quite interesting. The previous chapters are a bit dark, but they capture the readers' hearts very well. The writing is smooth and the writing skills are good. The description of the ghost village environment not only reflects the harshness of the environment, but also gives the protagonist a calm, smart and slightly evil character. I hope to keep this character. By the way, once the character in the novel is determined, please do not change it at will. The development of every story must be driven by each person's personality, and it is not only the characters that drive the development of the story, it is also important what kind of decisions everyone in the story will make after something happens. I have seen the latest chapter so far. The overall story is relatively smooth, but the foreshadowing is not good enough. For example, in the foreshadowing of the old man in the stone temple, you should let the readers know in advance that the old man has tampered with the protagonist, instead of showing it at the last moment when he is attacked by the ghost baby, which would be a bit abrupt. If you don't want to be abrupt, you need to create an atmosphere and create suspense. There are roughly the following types of suspense: One: the protagonist knows, the reader knows, and the opponent does not know. This one is basically the trump card of the protagonist in the book. Just like the trump card "Sacrifice" you left to the protagonist, but precisely because you used "Sacrifice" in the previous article but did not mention the name of "Sacrifice", it will be a bit abrupt to use it suddenly when you are attacked later. Two: The reader knows, the protagonist does not know, and the opponent does not know. The biggest function of this is to create a sense of mystery and expectation, making readers look forward to when this foreshadowing will explode. This was originally the foreshadowing that you, the old man from the ancient temple, should have done. In just a few sentences, you would describe the old man's forbidden actions on the protagonist that night, but without giving any explanation to the readers. Waiting until the moment of the attack to break out, this would have a better effect. Three: The reader doesn't know, the protagonist doesn't know, and the opponent doesn't know either. This kind of writing method of "three unknowns" is the most difficult. It requires a lot of foreshadowing in the early stage to deepen the suspense, but it cannot be known by the protagonist and cannot be guessed by the readers. It makes the readers constantly look forward to the explosive point of the foreshadowing, and when it finally breaks out, it will give the readers a feeling that it is like this. Overall, the pace of the article is good, but the competition in the fantasy category is very fierce. Don't pay too much attention to the data of your work in the early stage. Only by persisting can you succeed! Come on! The so-called authorities are obsessed with what I tell you, but I may not be able to do it myself. I hope my own work can also be reviewed by you.