Exile the Immortal Sword

Thank you for the invitation. I came here specifically after reading your question on Zhihu. After reading about ten chapters, I have a big problem. Your book gave me the feeling of "running account" in three words. It is too peaceful. First of all, the protagonist is not likeable and makes people feel less involved. The explanation of things is not clear. After reading a few chapters, the time, place, characters, and events are not explained clearly. How can I put it this way? After reading one chapter, I had no idea what I was reading. I see that you have written a book before, but I don't know if you read it completely after finishing it. If not, I suggest you go and take a look. This will make you clearly aware of your problem. To be honest, martial arts is in a slump, but it's not that exaggerated. Your results are really due to your own lack of professional skills. If you are willing, you can add my other social software, and I can help you analyze the specific problems (when I am in a good mood 😰) I am really too lazy to type!

I hope everyone can take care of the little author of Poujie

If you still see typos, you can mark them here or in this chapter, and I will correct them soon.

Old fierce, it is indeed a bit embarrassing. However, I still discovered my own shortcomings in your book. It is really just because I am in this mountain. I came here from Zhihu

Come on from Zhihu, come on, martial arts themes are too difficult

It's so beautiful. It has been collected. Welcome to visit again!

The cover looks like Zhang Chulan from Under One Person

Brother, I am also a new writer and have only written more than 20,000 words. I was very touched after reading your book. I think you are very perseverant. I would like to make friends with you and exchange my experiences. Is that okay? Ha ha.

The first form of Tianyuan Sword; sword drawing form, changed to |-| Lei Qie