Tokyo Ghost Story Notes

This is a book that is difficult to describe in one sentence. I feel like the author didn't write a good synopsis at all, thinking about it one at a time. A murderer committed two hundred chapters and didn't finish it. The character design of the heroine and the supporting actress is extremely retarded. A smart and changeable character was written as mentally retarded. Those who procrastinate are really bad. The author should learn how to streamline the plot. The timeline arrangement is extremely unreasonable and most of the plot is unclear. You can just mention the key plot points in one go and forget about them being ordinary or supernatural. I basically don't know what to write. When I first read it, many chapters were spent to skip the real vomiting of blood. It was difficult not to read the pirated version, and it confused the readers with a lot of stuff that said nothing. If you want to write a light novel, you can spread out the narrative, or you can write separate chapters about characters. After watching it for a long time, I couldn't feel that it was a human being of flesh and blood. I have no idea what his purpose is. The plot is not very impressive, but the shit that makes readers vomit blood is quite impressive. Moreover, there are many characters and there are no key scenes to make people remember. It looked like it was in water the whole time. The first one million words are not as informative as the 300,000 words of Thrillerland. The front looks pretty good, but the back is really vomiting blood. It feels like the author didn't do much research on writing a book and just wrote it for fun. The narrative doesn't look like a running account, but it also feels like it didn't say anything. Hey, there are still so many things I want to vomit. But I don't write books, I just read a lot and don't know what to say. At least explain the key events when you are in the water. If you write a separate chapter about the protagonist's impression of everyone or everyone's impression of the protagonist to make him plump, it won't be so watery at all. Many times, this character appears, an event occurs, and then there is no connection. Until later, we don't know why he came out and what the purpose of the event is. Wouldn't it be better to have a separate timeline for these events? When things happen, the protagonist is still going about his daily life. It feels like he is about to die and he still doesn't think of a solution. He is waiting for death and then forces the protagonist's aura.

I read more than a hundred chapters and completed a strange story? ? Wtf! What kind of murderer, subway, Yae Mountain, crow, almost none of them advanced. The whole story is full of embarrassing reasoning without nutrition. The IQ of the character in the story always seems to be wandering between genius and retard. You say this character is a brainless person. A few clues can tell you the incident from beginning to end more cruelly than Sherlock Holmes. You say she is a genius, but she did the "pencil" thing. The author seems to pay great attention to the creation of characters, but unfortunately I can barely understand the protagonist now. Really, this book is pretty good at the beginning, where you have to be a cowherd, and then, haha. I'm still working hard. If it doesn't kill me, it will only make me stronger.

Author, I just want to say, you are so bad at over 100 chapters of the second city ghost story? Is this a youth romance novel? ? ? A story about selling dog food with supernatural claims? If you want to imitate other people's horror houses, you can do it, but if you haven't completed the novice stage after so long, it's too much and you'll get tired. It's really boring for you to write it like this.

Author, please don't write too detailed emotional dramas. People who watch this are basically watching it for the supernatural plot. Even if you want to write, please be more serious. The protagonist is silent when he should be strong, but likes to attract attention when he should be calm. His originally calm and direct character is completely ruined.

Many people say that campus chapters are poisonous. In my personal opinion, it is indeed poisonous😏. There are so many chapters about "Little Bastard". It should be focused on ghost stories, but instead it has been writing a youth school drama. It is still the kind of bloody school drama where the Virgin Mary comes to unconditionally whitewash it. But after reading it, I didn't bring in the protagonist to think about it calmly, and I discovered a big secret. If it should be said, the protagonist feels less human. In many places where things are dealt with, an absolutely objective perspective is preset. That is to say, the protagonist is a bit like participating in the NPC story under the skin of a character, but he is not the character he plays, so he can be so objective and calm, and can objectively look at the people who bullied "him". Essentially, it's like playing a role-playing game, where the protagonist is the player. So aside from the perspective of the protagonist himself as a time traveler, the protagonist may have been mentally heterogeneous from the moment he came into contact with the notes. He no longer regards himself as the person "Fujimine Shiraishi", but from the bottom of his heart, he believes that the body of "Shiraishi" is just a skin, and he is role-playing. That is why he can take on the identity of his previous life so quickly, handle things calmly, and view everyone objectively. Rather than saying that the protagonist is grinding and complaining in the campus chapter, and still mentally cleaning up the people who bullied his predecessor, it is better to say that the protagonist is simply "reading" this "campus drama". So from this perspective, the campus chapter is not poisonous. Well, the conclusion is that the protagonist is no longer a human being. (In fact, after writing this review, I realized that I might be hacking at a high level...🤫) (Yes, I am hacking this plot 😁) Obviously the beginning of this novel is amazing, but when I read the later, I felt like I was suddenly served a dish called Kiwiak while eating raspberry cake. . . . Too grassy.

To be honest, this book is too watery. It is not recommended to subscribe. (I got a full subscription) It feels like it has been in the water since it was put on the shelves, and the pace is too slow. After reading dozens of chapters, I probably lost interest. The first ghost story was okay, but the second one dragged on for more than 100 chapters, giving people the feeling of a running account, and I had to write down every little problem. This is a novel, not a diary, okay? The urban supernatural theme has become a high school detective drama. So I personally suggest that you just take a look and stop reading when you see it on the shelves. Those who are patient can read slowly, just like a teacher reading a student's diary.

I haven't come back from this Japanese story, and I feel that the two books are very different. I looked at the others, and then looked at yours. I feel like I'm going to vomit, it's so disgusting, forget it, I'm quitting it.

It is recommended that the author change the campus plot in more than thirty to fifty chapters. I have been reading books for so many years, and I also know the principle that others are like fairy weeds and others are like poisonous weeds. Everyone has their own hobbies, so maybe there are people who really like this part of the plot. What I say here represents only my personal opinion. Why do I say this part is poisonous? Most people judge whether a plot is toxic or not based on three aspects: plot logic, writing style, and rhythm control. First of all, in terms of plot logic, I can understand that this part of the plot is a necessary plot for time-travelers to help clean up the mess of their original interpersonal relationships. The protagonist's plan is indeed reasonable and feasible. The plot is generally okay, but there are two biggest flaws: 1. In the plan When he was supposed to fight back, he fell asleep because of his own weirdness. The need to sleep despite being weird was all set by the author. This kind of plot is not pleasant. The protagonist's plan is well done, but he is in danger because of his pig teammates. I believe this plot is so annoying. Anyone who often plays games has experienced it, not to mention so many old bookworms at the starting point; secondly, there is no real punishment for the evil leader. This problem is more serious than the previous one. This problem can even be attributed to values and ideology. I won't go into details. Simply put , in the mainstream values of society, if you make a big mistake, you should be punished by law. Although it is not so strict in the novel, even if it does not rise to the level of calling the police, there should be punishment from the protagonist. Even if it is not good enough, there should be punishment from the author (i. E. God's will in the novel). Today's readers will no longer let the villain off just because she is good-looking. This should be the case in reality and in novels. People who do wrong can have advantages, difficulties, have no choice but to be forced to do anything, but none of these can change the facts that have happened. The victim has no advantages, no difficulties, no suffering, right? You can praise the offender for certain qualities, but only after he/she has paid the due price for his/her mistakes. Even if we don't think about values, I believe everyone knows the principle of raising a tiger to cause trouble. According to the protagonist's calm to indifferent character, he will never easily let go of a big scammer who may cause him more trouble in the future just because he finds it troublesome. This gives people a huge sense of contradiction in the plot setting, making it difficult to watch the drama in an instant. Secondly, in terms of writing style, I am not a professional wordsmith, and I don't make much evaluation in this aspect. Finally, there is really a big problem with rhythm control. It is a good technique to suppress before you want to promote, but it must be moderate. The failure of the campus chapter is here. The author did not distinguish the suppression and promotion parts very well, so there is a problem with the weight arrangement of suppression and promotion. As I said before, this part of the plot is often necessary for time travelers to help clean up the mess of their original interpersonal relationships. Obviously, when does suppression start? For the protagonist who has not dealt with this mess in the early stage, the depression has already begun as soon as the ghost story returns to reality, so the entire atmosphere is depressing from the beginning of more than 30 chapters until the head-on confrontation with the third grade. There is no relaxation in returning to daily life. In this atmosphere, the reader read more than ten chapters in a row. I had been holding back my anger for a long time, and then when I faced the third grader, the protagonist gave the third grader who came for him a hard slap and the other party explained the protagonist's plan later. All old bookworms knew that the protagonist was about to officially start to fight back. At this time, his mentality gradually relaxed and his expectations reached the highest level. What next? Then the protagonist was beaten so hard that he was deflated for several chapters. Immediately afterwards, the protagonist suddenly woke up and ended the battle. There was no accounting for the evil leader afterwards. Yang's part ended in a hurry, giving people a sense of dislocation that it was impossible to pick up and put down. Brother, this is not about suppressing the desire to promote, but suppressing and then suppressing in the middle to trick us into letting down our guard. Having said so much, I will still continue to read it. I am quite optimistic about this book. After all, the author has written so much, and maybe the later parts will be handled better. However, if the problems in the previous part are not changed, it will affect the senses of new readers. I hope the author can deal with it as appropriate if he has time. Otherwise, it would be much better to just delete it and briefly mention it using the Spring and Autumn style of writing.

What the fuck is this! I was very excited when I first read it. After all, anyone who has found a book that can be read after being out of books for such a long time is very happy. Until now, I can even endure the part where they fight. That part is really watery. I can get through it in just a few words: the protagonist was bullied, the protagonist was hooked up, the protagonist was beaten, and the protagonist defeated him. No, but you've been messing with me for 22 chapters, and I can't stand it. But that guy named Aki really disgusts me. Could you please say no thanks or just give me a brush off? Some people will definitely say that they will give you a pen and you will write. I can't say anything else about the author, but here, a primary school student who can type and read can write better than you.

How to put it this way, I personally feel that this book is okay, but it is true that the campus chapter is very poisonous. I almost died there, but after getting through it, it was okay. In terms of character description, I was really angry, Hoshikawa, and Meiko. I really hate it. Compared to them, I prefer Aki (because it is from the description of the male protagonist, so although it is said that the predecessor was bullied, it actually didn't feel much). Also, after more than 200 chapters, the second ghost story is not over yet. It feels a bit long, and I am increasingly losing the patience to read it.

Come on, author, this book is very interesting. Don't give up just because some people criticize it. I believe this book will become more and more popular.

Mentally Retarded and Poisonous is super embarrassing. I haven't seen a book like this in a long, long time 😅

Author, let me give you a clear path. If you write about supernatural beings, you might as well write about daily life

For those who want to read this novel, it is best not to read it as a supernatural novel, otherwise you will not be able to read it (just read it as a passionate campus novel)

When I saw the school, I couldn't stand it anymore. I thought it was a very good supernatural book at the beginning, but when I got to the school, I found out that it was poisoned by a bottle of dichlorvos 😓. What I wrote in the front is so good, but what I wrote in the back is just irrelevant content.

Look, this thing can't have brains, otherwise it can poison people to death.

I'm really dizzy. I'm here to see supernatural phenomena, not campus affairs? Are you obsessed with the crow ghost story and the train ghost story? There are dozens of chapters and there is no sign of starting. I feel that Aki is a character who appears purely for the sake of the word count. Now that I see it, I feel like he is a lunatic. I couldn't stand it anymore and ran away.

If nothing else, the delay makes it boring and disgusting!

It's a good book that can survive the campus chapter and then feel it's not good enough. I'll leave first 🙏🙏🙏

To be honest, I still prefer this novel, but I have also seen the comments of other book friends. I am not trying to refute these people. Everyone has their own favorite type of novel. I just want to express my opinion on this novel. First of all, most readers must be attracted by ghost stories, but the ghost stories in the title of the book should just be the main line of the storyline, a kind of boosting force. The author wrote this novel as a light novel, focusing on the strategy in the label, and I think it is thinking. Although the male protagonist's thinking is too much, it vividly depicts the character. Unlike some other novels in which the male protagonist wants to do something, the reasons are mentioned in one stroke, and the thinking is very detailed, in place, and real. There is also the procrastination mentioned. The author actually wants to make the plot perfect. It can be seen that he has thought a lot. Although the plot is too lengthy, the care and truth reflected in it and the author's emphasis on the plot are evident. In general, this is a book suitable for reading by the elderly, people who are quiet and have high requirements for the plot. This novel is delayed by the title, it highlights the weird stories too much, and the plot is delayed. The author needs to update it faster to satisfy some interested readers. That's all.

This is a magical novel. To be honest, I really don't believe the author would be so **. The opening of the novel is very well written. Although occasionally the proportions are not very harmonious in some places, there are almost no problems. If we really want to maintain the plot trend like the first paragraph, I believe there will be no problem at all in conferring the title of God in one book. It's a pity that for some reason, starting from about 51 pictures, the quality of this book suddenly began to decline. Normal people should write better and better as they write novels, but this author is like a completely different person. From the modern mature Internet literature directly pushed to the Internet junk fast food literature more than ten years ago. But I checked everything carefully and found that this author is still very powerful. There is no grand prize, the highest ranking is 1, 3200. But he was able to insist on writing it down. The maximum collection is 5000. What a pity, what a pity. What tenacious perseverance. I really died from the plot. I don't know what happens next, but 90% of readers died from 51 pictures. The author gives you a big boost. 👍👍👍

I was very angry when I saw the reviews that said this book was "not good". I have to post it. Qiafan, your writing is great. The book is very immersive and I like it very much. Come on, Qiafan, you are the best.

The plot is good, and the details are pretty good too. It's just that ** adds so much inner drama to so many little characters. It's a piece of cake.

In order to promote the plot, the author wrote a lot of things that are not consistent with common sense. The beginning is the most poisonous, but it gets better at the end. Fight poison with poison, and make a positive out of a negative. Niche taste, not a wide audience.

This book seems to be a plagiarism from my creation of urban legends in Tokyo. I created urban legends in Tokyo, which is much better than this book! Some storylines in Outline Shenzhen are plagiarized from this book.

After reading Chapter 60, I was completely shocked by the author's views. My younger sister and her classmates appear too few times at home so I won't comment on them. I only comment on these people who have appeared on campus. Kobayakawa, the character is a fool who will sacrifice his life to protect his friends, so he keeps finding fault with the protagonist. I can't stand it. Xingchuan, I don't know why he is related to Guitan Crow. The character image is not clear and I will not comment. But these next ones are really weird. That senior, a bully, almost beat the protagonist to the point of vomiting blood in the opening scene. If the puppet had not come online to fight for him, he would have overturned with so much pretense. In the end, he was cleared of his innocence, and he even recommended the protagonist to join the club with a very loyal look. Aki is a top-notch bully, isolated, and a disgusting woman who turned the protagonist's former reputation into the "number one pervert". If she disagrees with her, she will ask the protagonist to take off her underwear and throw it into the women's restroom for people to laugh at. For such a person, the author can actually write that she said confidently, "It's because you are so strong that I am afraid, so you have to take responsibility." However, the protagonist who heard this did not slap her, but said "don't care" with a cold face? Facing a shopping invitation from a sister who is really good to him, he refuses it, and he accepts the bully's unreasonable troubles without retaliation. Is this the protagonist? It's Asasi, I love it.

To briefly summarize: The protagonist subdued a monster in the previous plot. When the protagonist arrives at school, he is looked down upon and threatened by gangsters. The protagonist starts to show off. The protagonist makes a one-on-one duel with the gangster on the rooftop. The protagonist finds that he cannot defeat the gangsters, and who of the monsters he conquered falls asleep. The protagonist cannot defeat the gangster and is beaten for two consecutive chapters. The protagonist remained calm despite being beaten for a long time? ! Said "I haven't lost yet!" After the protagonist endured the beating for a long time, the monster woke up and successfully helped the protagonist defeat the gangster (so is this gangster some kind of big boss? The end of the show?). The gangster said to the protagonist, "You win." The onlookers were shocked. ? ? ? What do you want to express in this rz plot? 🙂

I really thought I could resist any poison. Author, you really persuaded me to quit the rooftop brawl This story is not about supernatural beings, it's okay, it's just off topic A date for a duel, it's okay, just a pretense to set the stage for a showdown After the fight started, I found that the subdued supernatural being was sleeping, so I just thought it was necessary to show off, and I could accept two hits before the explosion Then I'm really going to keep getting beaten? Finally, the supernatural got up to help solve the problem, and asked if it was the right time, the right time, ha, just the right time, these four words sent me away These four words alone are nothing, combined with the plot I almost vomited Maybe the plot written by you, the author, may be good, but to be honest, I didn't watch it I have the motivation to go on I wanted to leave directly, but after thinking about it for a moment, I feel really sorry for leaving without saying anything. After all, it was a new book I encountered after half a year that completely made me want to curse. If there are newcomers who want to read it, I suggest you skip this school story. I can only stick to this point.

The campus chapter is poisonous! I seem to have returned to the era of the King of Soldiers novel ten years ago.

I see so many people in the comment area saying that this book is not good and that is not good. It is undeniable that the plot is indeed toxic, but I would like to share some of my opinions on this book. Today I saw the latest update. Generally speaking, it is quite to my liking. I skipped some of the poisonous parts. The style is a bit like the new show "Fictional Mystery", which pays more attention to the dialogue and relationship between characters, and promotes the development of the plot bit by bit from the specific interactions of the characters. The style is very delicate, which is why some people say it is watery, but it is also easy to shape the character of the character and make the plot more reasonable. For example: the character Aki has been in line with her character from the time she appeared until now, and the same goes for everyone else. Many people say they hate Aki. She has both good and bad sides to this character. She can choose to bully the protagonist because she saw her being bullied. She also felt emotional and chose to donate to them because she was bullied and saw disabled children living in this world. This is the complex side of human nature. The author has successfully created this character, but I do not deny that there are indeed some poisonous points in the plot, which is very good! ! Generally speaking, the style of this novel is to develop the plot in daily life. It is very delicate, very slow-burning, and very "watery", but it is more in line with my appetite. Friends who really, really, really can't stand it, don't force it. First, you spend money to read it and get angry😅, and secondly, it's really bad for us readers who can stand it to keep watching you scolding you in the comment area. Finally, big cheers to the author! ! I have seen everything you wrote in the book. Your writing style is quite special, not the kind that caters to popular sense and fast food literature. Just follow your feelings, write a good outline, and don't let the plot collapse. There will be people like me with different tastes who will watch it. Come on, come on, come on 😃