One Island, One World

Is that what you asked for in the group? Forget it, the results of the book are too pitiful, so I won't complain anymore.

I don't understand why there are so many trolls recently. 🤫🤫 I can't stand it anymore, why not leave quietly? I come gently, just as I walk lightly, I wave my sleeves and don't take away a single cloud. Come on, author. It's too difficult for newbies to start. You should sign up for a group to stay warm. 😏

Island... Tribe... Fantasy... It's easy to get discouraged from this beginning.

How should I put it, the beginning is a bit awkward, especially that long paragraph. But the author should be an old bookworm, and the following description is very attractive to me.

I remember you said in the group that you didn't want to sign a contract

What weapon does every man make?

It feels a bit awkward. But I don't know what. . . . It feels awkward and fun. Stop being a eunuch, I collected it.

Collected The seedlings will wait until they are fattened before slaughtering them 😁😁

I don't have the courage like you, 🙂

This book is very beautiful. The protagonist is vividly described in detail, the plot is interesting, and the sentences are coherent. Keep up the good work!

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Um. . . Let me ask for a more normal introduction. The introduction written by the author is too literary and does not reveal any key elements.

This is not 2014. If at that time, this book might still have a slight possibility of becoming popular. The score of 240,000 words is already a bit too low for a newcomer. The author's plot and descriptions are too stiff. You can tell what kind of story he wants to write, and you can also see whose writing style he is imitating. However, the plot cannot withstand scrutiny and the twists are too stiff. And what's very unacceptable is, why did the author write so many settings in the first chapter? If the beginning of a novel is right, it is half right. It is really stupid to set up the part that attracts the reader's attention. I don't want to use words like "toilet paper" or "e-waste" to describe a work, because after all, the author still put in the effort to write it, and at least there is hard work here. But to be honest, this book is a bit poorly written, and the problem is not with any one part, but with obvious problems in the characters, plot, and characterization. Before writing a work, you must first read the work. If you plan to continue writing, you should read more other people's books to see what type of works the starting point of this era prefers, and more importantly, look at the structure used by others when writing. (You should be prepared to save the manuscript before writing. If I were a reader and saw the update notification and clicked in and found this kind of thing, I would also directly comment on it)

Seeing the results of your book, I can imagine the author's helplessness. Because I was the same way at the beginning. You don't need to hold anything to make money from this book. You will gain from finishing the book? My pen name is Yeyiren, and I have been writing books for more than ten years, but have achieved nothing. I have written nearly three million words in total, and not one of them is complete. Failure! So, just work hard to finish the book, even in the beginning. If the writing is not good, it will come out after writing a million words! The plot is not good, just read more and watch more, come on