Falling Nine Swords

Overall, it's okay, but I still have a few things to say: 1. Don't be afraid of old routines. As long as it's well written, people will always read it, but it can't be blindly old, it must also be a little new. 2. The plot progresses too fast. Although I know you may want to get into the theme quickly, let me introduce a little bit about what happened this year. (For now, you still have to slow down a little) 3. Money is still not rigorous enough. Cultivation of immortality pays attention to the law of wealthy couples, and wealth ranks first, so you still have to be more rigorous. 4. The character creation is not deep enough. It needs to be described more, and the appearance also needs to be added (I want to see beautiful women). The psychological description is not enough. 5. There are some places that are a bit puzzling, such as apprenticeship. . . 6. When setting, you don't need to write it deliberately. You can explain it slowly and release it bit by bit when needed. Your setting is a bit abrupt. 7. Like someone else, the main plot is not clear (the protagonist still needs some goals and some motivation. You, the protagonist, have nothing, and don't want revenge, and don't want...) 8. The writing is still a bit poor, and you still need to practice slowly (it's a bit watery in many places, not capable enough). I think you can read the book of the big brother, and take some notes and records while reading. If you don't know how to describe characters, you can go to the big boss for prostitution. If you don't know how to fight, you can go to whoring. (Take this slowly, after all, it doesn't happen overnight) (PS: Reading more books by big guys will help you develop rapidly, but you can't just read, you must think and ponder, just like my Chinese teacher taught me) Come on

The writing is okay, there should be more battle scenes, Xiaomengxin, haha, come on, come on!

I am brother Kevir. Regarding the setting issue in the article, the best way to explain the setting is to bring it into the plot, so that it does not appear too hardcore (refer to the negative textbook Butterfly Blue). However, when it comes to plot description, if you are writing YY, just follow What you want is to revolve around the protagonist Ye Ming all the way to the end; but if you really want to have a twists and turns in the plot, you have to work harder. You can also refer to my "Anlishi", and you should also create more distinctive supporting characters to enrich your setting.

Come on, Ruizi is here

I hope you can support me a lot. If you write poorly, you can point it out. I also like you to give me more opinions so that I can improve. Oops, please vote for more recommendations, haha. In short, thank you for your opinions and support (*^o^*)

I am a little monk The article is good and has selling points It can also catch people's attention If you have an outline, don't deviate from the outline Before updating every day, write down a detailed outline of today's update This will not deviate or break the article When describing the protagonist, you should highlight the protagonist Each paragraph should not be too long, otherwise readers will lose patience while reading it

Ahem, actually, I hope the author writes more scenes of girls and male protagonists together... Then I think, the author's writing is getting more and more interesting, is it cool? Nice. Well, I feel like there are some places that are a bit watery.... I don't use many words, so I can excerpt good words and sentences! (PS I often copied when I was in elementary school... I often copied until I collapsed...) In addition, the actions during the battle can actually be written more richly, and then... I want to see a girl when describing the appearance! ! ! Ahem, come on, author! (Vector refill)

Not bad😤😤

Every newcomer needs support, please support~🤓🤓

Brother, I feel that the framework of the article is very good, and I hope to continue to work hard! Other book friends also support Ang! This kid will definitely become a great person,, hahaha (skin it, I'm very happy)

It feels good, I have found my old memories, come on!

Not feeling well yet? Take a good rest. Once you have rested, you will write more words in the future and update quickly. Come on, work hard! The writing is pretty good

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There are too few words, so add more and say a million more.

Come on, don't rush. I'm a newbie, so I don't know what to say. I hope you get better and better.