Naruto: the Immortal Hanging Vendor

Okay, the writing is really not good I hope the author can give me some comments and take a look at it Although I am not literate, I have some other adjectives. In the first chapter, emmmmm, what the hell is going on in the world? Is it okay? Can I change it? Kaguya's character and the protagonist's behavior after eating the fruit give people a strange feeling of forcibly adding a wife to the protagonist. Sometimes the author will feel his own shortcomings after calming down and rereading it after finishing writing. Also, the time span is too big and the author's writing style cannot control such a large time span. The excessive paragraphs of fast forwarding were not written well, which gave people the feeling that this was some kind of fucking thing It would have been better if the Warring States Period was not written. The protagonist needs a long-term layout, but the author just took it in one stroke. I guess the author wanted to write the story when the plot officially begins, but the protagonist is indeed from ancient times. The author did not handle it well Okay, that's it

I can't stand it after reading Chapter 3. It feels so awkward and I don't know what you want to express⊙∀⊙? The writing is messy and inconsistent, and my IQ is completely off the mark.

The front one is fine. What follows becomes more and more outrageous. I want to abandon the book

The introduction is speechless. You have eaten the biggest trick and you are still afraid of death. What is the danger? Could it be Taomu in the future? , And not to mention the original work, and if you eat it, why is Kaguya still sealed, are they two fruits?

It's the same old thing again. The most awesome ones all belong to the protagonist. None of the current Naruto fandoms have been read. Anyway, the protagonists are all the kings of eyes, nothing new.

This is a very chubby story, it's awkward and the writing is poor.

I don't understand. I don't know what I'm writing. I'm in arrears with my IQ. Farewell.

Can anyone help me explain? Homeland and Other Country is an original anime, right? The plot of the manga is that Kaguya ended the war by eating the fruit of the sacred tree, and then gave birth to two rebellious sons after being blessed, right?

I'm not criticizing the author, I just want to say that your power system has completely collapsed.

Read and collected, welcome to visit again.

When the characters don't have a background, it's like saying they don't know what they're doing when setting the stage. When a lot of things pop up from the beginning, there will be people saying that where did they come from, or that the cheating is suddenly too much. Hey guys, how do you satisfy your appetite? And I started writing for only one purpose from the beginning, and that was to complete several stories that I had started to conceive many years ago. Even if I gave up on that one halfway, I might pick up the pen and continue writing someday in the future, just to prevent myself from having regrets.

I haven't read the content yet, but it's 140,000 words and 95 chapters... I still don't want to read it. I laugh and cry manually.

There are too many elements, and the integration of many memes is too abrupt, which doesn't feel right.

? , Why can't I understand what he is doing?

Just chop a few times Chopping a few times How many knives? Knife Slightly Tsk...

Is it a comic? I feel that according to the author's current progress, the plot of Naruto will be almost over after one hundred chapters.