Trees, Sparse Bamboos and Outer Flowers

From the synopsis, it seems like a decent story, but the writing style and style don't match the story to be told. The tone of your speech is like a palace fight. Compared with the good story you want to write, the process of telling the story has made the pattern smaller. The mood and atmosphere of the whole book are very wrong... It's only compared to the original story

The writing can be said to be great! Worth learning! However, too much description will also bore readers. Appropriate use of gorgeous words is the icing on the cake, but excessive use is just piling up, giving people the impression of showing off literary talent. First of all, I personally like this style of writing. From the large words, you can feel the faint sadness of the ancient style and the feeling of fairy spirit. It may be my illusion! Secondly, as mentioned before, it might be better if the language is more concise! Then there are too many settings at the beginning, which can easily dissuade people, so they can be changed appropriately. Finally, the segmentation question! This is also important! Score, 80 points, keep up the good work! I will keep chasing you!

I've finished watching it. I don't dare to interrupt in terms of major plot development, but there are two aspects that need to be improved. First, the faces of the characters are mostly composed of gorgeous words. The characters are not truly distinctive. The readers can only know that she is a beauty, and the identification is weak. Second, when the characters are talking, the description can appropriately describe the character's expression, or use appropriate metaphors to capture the key points of the description, so that the character's expression when speaking is vividly displayed on the page. This will facilitate the reader to have a stronger sense of the picture. That's about it. The capitalization is generally good, and the wording is more accurate. That's about it. (Vote two recommendation votes by the way)

The overly flowery rhetoric is a bit of a show-off. The description of the environment can be appropriately used to carry out the work. If the description of the action is more detailed, the characters can be portrayed more fully. The sentence "Do you feel that I am going to hit you" is a mess - gas station 🙂

It's not a problem to keep thanking you at the end of each chapter. I have a special thank you building. If it were the author, I would recommend his book. So the authors who voted please leave a message, otherwise I won't know you are the author. (The ranking is in no particular order, according to the time of voting, I will advance if it is the author) 1. Thanks to Mi Mimi for the daily recommendation votes, a total of forty-five, recommending "Laughing White Head", the writing is super beautiful❤ 2 Thanks to Wang Zecheng for the daily recommendation votes, a total of eighteen, recommending "The Change of the Divine Realm in the Human World", a very good science fiction novel, the author can persist in more than 3,000 tomorrow, very perseverance 3 Thanks to Xiao Yuhang for the daily recommendation votes , a total of thirty-six, recommend "Defying the Heaven to Lingxun", worth watching 4 Thanks to I Am Nameless for the daily recommendation votes, a total of one hundred and twenty, thank you very much for your encouragement (wow, I didn't know it was so many) 5 Thanks to Girl Don't Be Reserved for the daily recommendation votes (it's time to move you to the front row, haha), a total of forty-eight votes 6 Thank you for my real name is MT for the daily recommendation votes, a total of forty votes 7 Thank you A total of eighty-six recommendation votes for patients with epilepsy every day 8 Thanks to z Warm Wine and Talk about the Rest of Life c A total of ten recommendation votes every day 9 Thanks to Piao Miaoyi for twenty-nine recommendation votes 10 Thanks to Y Xue Seven recommendations for a scumbag (definitely not a scumbag) 11 Thanks for the two recommendations for accidentally entering your human world (into my human world, haha) 12 Thanks for the two recommendations for him being really cute 13 Feelings Xie Benbaby hates the 16 recommendation votes for Tired of Tears 14 Thanks to the God of Six Paths Otsutsuki Hagoromo for the 10 recommendation votes 15 Thanks to the demon Tianyu for the recommendation votes 16 Thanks to the book friend 2017012721... (Sorry, I can't see it later in the system) for the two recommendation votes 17 Thanks to the small match seller Big Match for the three recommendation votes 18 Thanks to the ant Yaguro for the twenty recommendation votes 19 Thank you for the recommendation votes of Mengli Taohua (the name is so beautiful) 20 Thank you for the two recommendation votes of Yixiaoruchen 21 Thank you for the four recommendation votes of Xuan Yue Sanshengqing 22 Thank you for the nine recommendation votes of Ziye Fenglinger 23 Thank you for the two recommendation votes of lifewang123 24 Thank you for the sixteen recommendation votes of Ruyanzhenxingchen 25 Thank you for the two recommendation votes of Fu Liao 2 6 Thanks to the pesticide factory (I think you are making things difficult for me) for the two recommendation votes 27 Thanks to the three-year old bookworm for the recommendation votes 28 Thanks to Octagonal Tower for the four recommendation votes 29 Thanks to Pan Dashuai lsmpcz for the three recommendation votes 30 Thanks to Goose Is Your Sister for the three recommendation votes 31 Thanks to You Renyun for the four recommendation votes 32 Thanks to the four recommendation votes from the second chapter 33 Feelings Thanks to the Master of Dianyi for his five recommendation votes 34 Thanks to Nijiang Girl Meow for his two recommendation votes 35 Thanks to Wandao Confluence for his three recommendation votes 36 Thanks to Yu Mao for his two recommendation votes 37 Thanks to Xiao Yuzi for eating and drinking for his four recommendation votes 38 Thanks to Zhen Shebai for his recommendation votes 39 Thanks to Shi Dao for his four recommendation votes 40 Thanks to lllllllllll (right? (I really can't type it out) for the twelve recommendation votes 41 Thanks to Nie Wuming, Nie Wuxin, Nie Wuyu (probably the same person) for the seven recommendation votes 42 Thanks to Ryoma Echizen for the two recommendation votes 43 Thanks to Brown Sugar Brand Crucian Carp for the recommendation votes 44 Thanks to King Haizhi for the two recommendation votes I will write my name on it as long as I have time. This is our memory and is worth keeping. (If there is any leakage, please point it out)

The contract has been sent, and investors will immediately receive profits. As for when to update it in the future... I'll update it once during the holidays! Let this book sit at the bottom of your bookshelf during this period, and don't think anything about it 😢 such as deleting it or anything... It's really distressing. Goodbye friends, I am studying hard.

Da Da's work is great, the characters are exquisitely crafted, and the atmosphere is rich in life. It has a strong sense of scene and picture. I like to read Da Da's words word for word, like the mountain wind blowing in front of me, with a faint fragrance of flowers and the fragrance of mountains. The mountain spring gurgling on the slope, dripping heartily (where should I drip it?) Is very enjoyable, the plot is compact, although sometimes there are one or two lyrical sentences, but there is no feeling of water, this is the author's great cunning... Okay, I am waiting for the update.

The light is on. Come in and take a look. There is a stack of books on the desk. In addition to the textbooks, there is also a reference book. The title of the book seems to be "Barbecue Guide"

I feel that Dada is really awesome. This kind of seven-character title is like writing a poem. I think it is the most difficult. I must stick to it, come on!

It was carefully and meticulously carved from beginning to end, and a lot of effort was put into it. I don't even have the time to eat skewers, it's so difficult for me ٩(͡๏̯͡๏)۶

Uh-huh? Actually changed the cover? Very beautiful~

Emmm, the signing was successful, congratulations!

The writing is good, the writing style is very good, the description is delicate, the writing is flowing, and the author's writing style is solid, which is rare in female novels. From this, it can be seen that the author is probably a liberal arts major. Come on, author, I hope you won't forget to update later.