Don't You See There Are Wind Chimes in the Mountains?

Type: Fairy Fantasy Number of words read: 6w/12w 🦉Overall review: The sweet love between the domineering God of War and the little flower fairy! 🦉Plot summary: Mallow is a hard-working little flower fairy. Before the Hundred Flowers Banquet, she picked up the young Ah Huai. When the two went out for a stroll, they met barbarians. After a big battle, Ah Huai disappeared. Mallow returned to heaven to participate in the Hundred Flowers Banquet. Unexpectedly, she happened to encounter the return of the ancient war god Huaiyuan, and he took the flower away! Later, it was revealed that the reason for the two of them to form a flower was because Mallow had the remnant of Fusang. Mallow confirmed it with her own eyes and descended to earth in anger. 🦉Sweet love! The little flower fairy possesses the essence of an ancient goddess, and is inexplicably married by the ancient god of war. Some people say that the ancient god of war just misses that goddess, but this god of war is handsome, can fight, and even fans her (people who can do this can only be found in novels!). The article is full of old clichés, but the more I read, the happier I am. 🦉Cute ideas! The first few chapters were a little awkward to read, but since our little flower fairy married the God, the whole novel has gradually become better, sweet and cute. Whether it is the flower essences and grass essences watching the show or the old gentleman with a strange disease, they make the whole world lively and interesting, and also make the article relaxed and enjoyable. The interaction between the male and female protagonists is also very vivid and real. Have you ever noticed that there are wind chimes in the mountains? It really smells like the Jo Malone blue wind chimes, a clean, sweet girly scent~ 🦉Highlights: 1. Very cute writing style and worldview. The author's writing skills are still relatively immature, but it is rare that people can have a vague impression of the world in the text. A table covered with vines, a drunken child, a white ball and a green egg. Probably because the author is very cute, what he sees, hears, thinks and feels are all pleasant things. 2. Reasonable suspense and promotion. The author is very good at grasping the reader's mentality. From the inexplicable appearance of the boy in the first chapter, the surprise of the aunt in the second chapter, and the trouble caused in the third chapter. These suspense stories are not very obscure. You can make a rough guess with just a little thought, but you still want to know whether they are true or not. However, the author does not finish the story, but pushes a paragraph in each chapter to make the readers go further and want to know more. This is the emotional value I talked about in "Jingzhou Storm". It may not be a brilliant plot or suspense, but it makes readers fall into an emotional trap of expectation, guessing, suspicion and throbbing. 🦉Disadvantages: 1. The plot is broken and incomplete. As the narrator, the author has a complete grasp of the plot, but if he cannot pay attention to the way the story is told from the reader's perspective, the plot will appear jumpy and abrupt. 2. The writing power is not in place. The lack of writing skills is reflected in the character dialogue and plot foreshadowing. It can be polished to make it look better~ Another example is when Ah Huai and Mallow went to find their aunt and found them all at once. I originally expected that there would be some things I saw and heard on the way to describe the daily life of Hua Xian, to make the structured world more three-dimensional, or that there would be some small episodes to slow down the plot, but there was none. Such a narrative would make the work look like a running account, which is a pity. 3. The plot setting is too dramatic. Although there is a foreshadowing of the past, the entire plot seems to serve the main line and is full of irrationality in order to develop the main line, which is a pity. Including the quarrel between Huaiyuan and Makui later, it was the same problem. Makui was still happy when he came to earth. 4. The contrast between the characters is not supported by enough stories, and the conflicting perceptions make it difficult to establish. A little flower fairy and a god of war suddenly changed their personalities after getting married. Mallow was a little timid at first, but suddenly became carefree in the middle chapter; Huaiyuan also suddenly became sweet, and when faced with the green egg, he was asked to roll back into the box... It was really hard to accept. The suddenness makes the characters not vivid enough. 🦉Improvement suggestions: 1. Try to describe your feelings and intentions clearly so that readers can have a clearer and more intuitive emotional experience. 2. Carefully polish the plot to make it more natural. 3. Try to return the characters' speaking habits to daily conversation habits to reduce reading discomfort.

Tomorrow "Don't You See the Wind Chimes in the Mountains" will be on the shelves. 🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹[fn=2 ]🌹🌹🌹 As a junior in college, I am often busy with exams and reading, and updates are always delayed at the end because I really don't have any manuscripts saved. It's uncomfortable, but this is the first time I've written an article, the first time I've constructed such a story. I am confused and have many shortcomings, but I will try my best. Although it is a slap in the face, I still want your approval. My story may still be long, and there may be a lot to tell. I hope that after reading this, you are willing to continue reading and support me as always. I am grateful to many people along the way, including Xiao Lizi who has always been with me, the beautiful Miss Wei Dada, and the first writer I met. And Ah Yin, he is really warm and gives me a lot of care. There are also many warm little sisters I met in the author group, including Tu Niang, Xi Xi, Zhu Zhu, Pan Pan, Lao Susu, Feifei, Qi Qi, Qingyu Luomei, Qian Mo Da Da, Miao Qingyin and many other authors There is also Quail Sister who was the first to review my book, and readers who silently support me (although I don't know if there are any) And those of you who gave me recommendation votes! Thank you for your recommendation votes I have seen them all! I won't post it one by one because I'm afraid you'll find it annoying 🐷 I'm really grateful for your company during this time. Here I hope that I can persevere and finish writing, and I hope that I will not give up. I am not afraid of 0 subscriptions, I am afraid of my own laziness... Come on! Seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven seven

There is actually a very happy thing today, that is, the book review I have been thinking about for a long time, finally a kind fairy is willing to take it. But at the same time, I was very nervous because the waiting process was always painful. I have read my article over and over again dozens of times. There are too many bad things and too many shortcomings. Although it can be considered the first time I have written a book, it is my original sin to not write well. No matter how bad it is, I will try my best to finish it. Thank you for still reading my article~🌙

Night Chat I have always liked literature and those romances. I want to have a complete work of my own, and I want to stick to it despite my lack of experience.

The writing style is very beautiful and the content is good. Please support me a lot. The author is a very gentle and kind person! May your efforts be seen🌹

I like this book and will keep reading it

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As someone who loves reading this kind of ancient literature, I will definitely finish your novel, 😁

It's not easy to be a student party. I've subscribed to all of them and I'll give you rewards to encourage you. The writing is relatively unfamiliar, but I think I can write the story I imagined without fear of fatigue. It's already very good. I support you. I have only read more than forty chapters of the book, and I will read it slowly.

The writing is still good, but the characters' personalities are not particularly distinct. For example, the male protagonist's aura and some of his words match your writing style, but they cannot stand out from your writing style. The same is true for the female protagonist. Generally speaking, there are no explosive points, and the ups and downs can be strengthened. But the foundation is good, come on!

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It's great. It's not easy the first time. Improve slowly. Come on🌹

After a cursory glance, the writing style is okay, but the first-person approach is a bit immature. Similar novels are dusty. You can read and learn from them. The biggest problem is that the background is unclear. Although it is difficult to write this thing directly, the author had better write a short chapter to design a plot description. Otherwise, it will be difficult to get into it when reading the book without knowing the background. Also, the introduction is too narcissistic. If it is not a funny article, it is best to change the introduction to the third person to describe it, otherwise it will be like a pure pornographic article, which will be very discouraging. But the author should work hard. I wrote so much because the author is a student and I want to give some suggestions. Writing novels is not easy. I still need to study other people's techniques in the early stage.

It's so good to watch, I'm crazy about Huaiyuan☎️

Naughty Qiqi is very good-looking, I am following her.