Online Game: Reborn Magister

After reading nearly a hundred chapters, I have a small suggestion for the author ——The characters' behavior during the dialogue is a little abrupt and can be polished a little more. For example, when the protagonist and Night Star formed a team, they looked at the protagonist in silence for a minute and then... Normal people would find it weird to look at each other for more than 10 seconds, not to mention for more than a minute... What kind of concept... Or for example, the protagonist and Night Star exchanged their feelings without any warning... This kind of plot is not impossible to write, but I personally think that there is not enough foreshadowing to connect the past and the future. Simply knowing such a reason before rebirth or the coincidence of the atmosphere is not enough to promote such a substantial improvement in the relationship between the two parties. For another example, the protagonist was complained by a girl - what a big deal it is after the equipment is good, it will be cool (the general idea is this). Generally speaking, when meeting for the first time, both parties have familiar friends in common. Normal people will not ridicule the other party because a request is not responded to, and it feels a little subdued... Although it is a novel, it is best to adhere to the normal logic and three views of the characters while being unrestrained. ——Another one is that the psychological activities of the protagonist can be appropriately reduced. I haven't read it later, so I don't know if the writing style has changed. For now, the character of the protagonist seems a bit contradictory in the author's writing. My intuitive feeling is that it is calm and deep, which is a bit too much. I don't feel that the reborn person's strategizing is clear to the heart. Instead, he keeps shouting to surpass the first and rewrite his life, but he is as naive as a child who is sad for spring and autumn. This is not a criticism, it is just an exposition of some unreasonable shortcomings (toxic points) in this book from a personal point of view. I hope the author can see it and refer to it carefully. I am not a fan or a fan. I have been reading articles for 14 years. In recent years, I have written nearly 200,000 words and saved manuscripts. I am deeply aware of the obscurity of creation and the difficulty of coding. Today, traditional online games are on the market. Finding a good work is like finding a needle in a haystack. It is not easy. I hope the author will not forget his original intention and move forward.

I only read the first part but I really couldn't stand it. I endured it at least five times before reaching nearly 100 chapters. For example, the protagonist's familiar, Cecilia, chose her between what was supposed to be a private barrier (it seemed to be much more powerful than the familiar anyway) and that familiar. I was a little confused, so I read the chapter reviews, and then the author explained that she was chosen because she was a very kind girl who was willing to sacrifice herself for the city, and that was it? ? ? That's it? ? You can choose her, but please give a good reason. When the protagonist chooses this girl, he has no idea what his abilities are. You must at least say that this girl can create some kind of domination scroll, which is more useful to the protagonist than some kind of personal barrier. If you tell me such a reason, I will think it is normal for the protagonist to choose her. But you choose her because you say she is a very kind girl? ? What are you doing here? Blind date? Are you a protagonist who wants to be the best in the server? ? And you already have someone you like (although that familiar is just a piece of data). Do you think you are the hero of If You Are the One? And, the emotional line also makes me scratch my head, it comes too easily, such as the night star, she looks like a very self-reliant woman, but it turns out that because the protagonist is good at playing games and has so many skills, and the skills are not clear where they are reflected, she likes it, and she has a good impression of it with just one copy? ? Hello? You are a strong woman, a strong woman who has never had feelings for anyone, right? Just, so easy? Does the protagonist have two more heads or three wings than others? ? ? If you don't know how to write the emotional line, you don't need to write it. And that purification aura is simply the strangest and most awesome aura I have ever seen in an online game. Is it immune to all controls? ? Hello? Is this invincibility too much? ? ? What do you want to say? For example, there is a 50% chance of immunity from control. I think this is acceptable (even this I think will be a little bit invincible). But you just give me a 100% immunity to all controls? ? ? ? In other works, the control can only be released by using a skill once a day. You just give me free access to all controls all year round? Help. There are also many characters in it that make me feel that they are very self-centered, very, very, very self-centered and have no brains. For example, the protagonist and the heroine (that Yunyi is probably the heroine) met the female knight when they were playing a dungeon together. The other two girls wanted to drag him into the guild, and then ran to ask the protagonist? I'm just confused? ? He is already with the female knight. Just think about it with their little brains and know that she must have been invited? Are these two girls the only ones who can tell that the protagonist is awesome? ? You want to add friends, and then say that the protagonist has no reason to refuse? No? I only played a dungeon once, and I'm not even familiar with you, so there's no reason to refuse? ? Who do you want to be friends with? ? Just a nodding acquaintance who played a copy? I am quite speechless. Finally, I wish the author better and better.

A bit borrowed from the style of Thieves in the World

Maybe it's because I'm not capable enough, but the results of this book are really average. I am really envious when I see the subscription of the big guy next door. I don't know if the situation will be better if this book is written with millions of people... Sigh. This book is still more than 100 years away from being collected into 3,000 collections. These collections are slowly accumulated over more than two hundred days of hard work. There is no collection or recommendation votes. Every one of them is very real. I just felt a little lost all of a sudden. I was happy when I got the seven recommendations, but I was also sad when I couldn't get results. When I tell you this, I am not begging for anything, I just hope that I will not be criticized. (The ones you're complaining about are all trainees, so you've got the nerve to complain after all you've done is for nothing?) Writing a book is not easy, thank you for your cooperation. Finally, thanks for having you.

Many people read books for content, but I read for life. . .

Protagonist, stop biting your lip all the time, don't you think your mother will die if you do this action man?😅😅

It's well written. Isn't the protagonist reborn? It feels like he doesn't understand anything.

Great work for the author 😁 The last time I read this book, it only had more than 50 chapters and it was a traditional online game. I felt that it would probably be finished. I just left it there and today I found that I actually persevered＾0＾~Come on

So is the heroine a wife in her previous life?😍

The writing is okay! Although it's not much refreshing, it's also less poisonous! Why is no one watching? You are good at writing about traditional online games. You should have the ability to collect 20,000 copies! I don't understand, is it really nice to pretend to be slapped in the face?

It's not easy to write about traditional online games, so I'll support it before reading it.

The author's writing is a bit too plain. It would be better if he could add some passion. I hope the author will adopt it 🙂

Is the high-level "rebirth" just about playing the game again?

I have read more than 80 chapters, and it is surprisingly similar to Snail's "Rebirth of Thieves". Could it be a similar framework?

I'm taking a day off due to personal reasons. Feel sorry.

Does the author play Honkai Impact III? 😥

Give me a monthly pass, I used to like this kind of traditional online games, come on😊

The property panel is displayed, and the ratio of gold coins to credits can be increased. Later, it can be transformed into virtual reality and magically modified.

I've been reading it for a few days, and it's okay. The author is a young artist, right? The recommended monthly vote has been voted, please add more details!

Let me ask, does this book mage have more than ten magic spells? The kind of mage who can conquer the world with three or five magics will quit.

Come on, I just started watching it and it seems okay

As the title suggests, the author is preparing a new book.

Ready to watch, be careful! 😁

The author is great, come on, I like reading books like this

In fact, rebirth in order to play games can be written as why playing games and what are the benefits of playing this game, such as improving the mental power (brain development level) in real life to adapt to the physical constitution.

I voted for the monthly vote, and I'm watching it. Can you be more precise? 😜🤭

Not bad, traditional online game, the writing is not bad

Come on! ! ! ! Come on, the next book will definitely be better.