This Name Is Given to the Future

I think the author's idea of writing the article is good, but the overall rhythm of the article is not well grasped. It took me a long time to understand the meaning of a chapter. Some places progress too slowly, and some places are fast and obscure, as if they don't want people to know. The progress of the narrative is also very strange. Sometimes it is not at all I can't react to this. I think the overall plot arrangement of the article is quite good, but the author's writing skills need to be improved, and the order of the article is not rigorous enough 😁😁😁😁😁😁

I think the author can try a multi-character main point of view narrative method for the show. I think the author's main point of view in the extra chapter is really clear, but I just don't know why. The third perspective is too confusing. I finally found out after watching the extra chapter that Ji and the heroine are boyfriend and girlfriend. It's really too confusing. The author can try a multi-character narrative method from the main point of view. I think it will be more suitable for you.

Another thing I particularly want to say is that I feel that the attitude of the characters here is a bit too casual. The heroine broke off with the athlete, and then quickly developed feelings for Ji Huaifeng. Xiao Qian also had good relations with Fu Wenze at first, and then Bai Shen hooked up. Then Fu Wenze had feelings for Ning Ye, and then Nie Shaoyan wanted to have a relationship with Ning Ye. I was confused. I personally think that although this book is not centered on the emotional line, there is no necessary love. Sections, in particular, are of no use. It's just that the plot of the novel should be described clearly to enrich the characters. Don't let readers be confused about the emotional line of this article, or even not understand it at all, because everyone's emotions are too fast and too confused. It may be true that everyone's attitudes are ambiguous in their emotions, but readers do not read novels to make themselves unclear, and they must be explained clearly when necessary, otherwise it will really affect the reading experience. 😁😁😁