Zhang Xiaofan, God of Peace

Yesterday I read about ten chapters sporadically, and today I read it carefully until the end of "A Journey to the Past". The story in the first chapter is indeed interesting. I thought Zhang Susu was kidnapped by a traitor, but in the end it turned out to be an "unethical love". At first I was a bit puzzled when I saw that it was two women acting together. After turning back to the previous chapters and thinking about it carefully, I realized that this should indeed be the case, and there was no other possibility. It's just that the length is a bit too long. Readers must keep the previous details in mind to understand. The pace of the second section was obviously accelerated, but the characters appearing in the middle were too complicated, and the murderer's scene was not remembered very much. I read it again and realized the reason. In general, the details are handled well. The second paragraph describes the murderer's methods in detail, and there are no flaws in the whole story. But your article focuses on fantasy and suspense. The fantasy is well written, and some local customs and customs are clearly expressed, with a strong sense of reality. But when it comes to suspense, suspense and suspense, there is both suspense and suspicion. The doubt points are well done, but so far there are almost no suspense points. The protagonist is like a noble prince in the game world. These events basically have no impact on his important things and cannot arouse the "sense of crisis" in the readers. I think this point needs to be improved. If you don't want to disturb the overall plot, it may be much better to intersperse some protagonist's disadvantages or balanced fights. Furthermore, there are too many details, which can be a deterrent for readers who are impatient. In my opinion, it is actually very interesting. Since we are going to take the online article route, the biggest purpose is to attract readers to read on. Sometimes too detailed description will have the opposite effect. This is something the author needs to consider.

Come on, your efforts will always pay off.

It feels like it's over before I finish writing it.

Judging from the writing, the author must have read a lot of historical novels! 😁

I carefully summarized my previous experiences and mistakes: In fact, there is nothing, no conflict, no suspense, and verbosity. So when I was revising the first volume, the chapters that were updated later were faster in terms of main line and linear pace, with one chapter being less than 2,000 words and two to three chapters a day. Hope to see this. Come on. Struggle.

All that's left is to worship. . .

This is a debut novel for a newcomer, so I hope book friends will give me some criticism and advice. 5,000 Words are guaranteed to be updated every day. Because it is suspense, the clues should be hidden in the article. It is not fast to write. You can collect it first and fatten it up before killing it.

In the past week, I have received many pointers from book friends and other authors. I also learned and wrote at the same time, and summarized the shortcomings: the plot is too fragmented, many parts are too complicated, the contradictions are not obvious, it is not refreshing, and it is a bit boring to watch. So let's end this volume first. The remaining chapters were later filled in with flashbacks. Previous chapters will be reorganized, each chapter will be about 1,500 words, to speed up the pace. It will be updated once a day, with two to three chapters depending on the plot. But I will never update or stop chapters. This is my promise. Also hope to get more chapters said and book reviews. If you like this book, please save it. Thank you.

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I wasted yesterday, there are many things to do, so I will hurry up and write today. You are okay, I will update normally.

You are really cheating, so many more at once