Frivolous Taoist Immortal

I was completely captivated, and I didn't even want to turn off my phone.

The author's imagination is very rich, which makes the plot unexpected and whets the reader's appetite. The author's logic is clear and meticulous, so the rich plot will not seem disconnected and the readers will follow the author's thinking.

Accept it, thank you, author, for making progress together!

The plot problem in Chapter 1 is that Zhou Wen has not stepped out of the palace for ten years = he has not taken the first test. Then the author said that the third prince who entered the top ten was protected by the Immortal Academy and took the second test, so he made the protagonist take the second test? Did the author forget to explain or was he just trying to fool him? There are also details: Can the Kun hidden in the sleeves allow the people inside the sleeves to see the scenery outside the sleeves, and can the wind blow? Just say yes, how fast is the examiner flying and how strong is the wind? Can you still open your eyes? Moreover, Hidden Kun in the sleeves is a magical power used in Honghuangliu or Gaoxian to collect objects and people to trap the enemy's hidden objects. I suggest you change the way of saying it and use a special magic weapon or magic weapon. I won't go into details about the wording problem. There are also characters' inner monologues that suggest using more snacks, expression descriptions and subtle movements. People with online IQ and EQ can't be expressed by just a few dialogues. You need to add some plot descriptions to him alone. This will also make the story more complete and have causes and consequences. For example, for the role of Shenghuang, you can describe in detail what he has done in the past ten years. To target the protagonist, we can first say that we use official position, money, beauty, chronic poison, fragrance, protagonist, relatives, etc. To treat the protagonist in ten years, but how can the protagonist resolve them one by one to complement the integrity of the two characters, instead of the three decades when you were afraid of me, I realized that I was really a little scared, you actually saw through me, this kind of slightly novice style .

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Come on＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~＾0＾~

I just finished reading it, and I hope the author will make this book a hit.

The novel is very interesting, but it's not very long~ Please update it as soon as possible, it's a bit unsatisfying~.

It's not about the abundance of beauties, it's about the finesse. The only thing in my heart is true love. When I saw the front, I was anxious. Hero and hero, what are you waiting for? Take action when it's time to take action.