Modern Martial Arts Live Broadcast Room

Systematic text. The subject matter is quite good, but the pace is too fast, fast in every sense of the word. The protagonist starts the live broadcast immediately after accepting the system without thinking about it. The heroine throws herself into his arms too quickly. It would be too hasty to cultivate the relationship first. It is recommended to enrich the description to make the characters and world more three-dimensional. 7 points, no intention to continue reading.

It's a bit poisonous! Author, I think you didn't write the emotional drama well. Looking at it now, it's not too late. Otherwise, you will definitely lose 2/3 of your readers in the future. Believe me, in the future there will be fewer women, but of course it is not impossible. The suggestion is that the protagonist can teach them the magic book now, otherwise the audience will start too late, and the protagonist is not afraid of someone surpassing him. And soon, these two sets are definitely not enough. One more suggestion: The third set of exercises is recommended to be Qing Gong. It is best to have quick results, so as to stimulate the desire to observe and practice martial arts. The character of the protagonist should be changed, not too much. Just don't act like a pig to women. He should be humorous when he should be, and mature when he should be. Come on!

How to say it! The protagonist has no character at all!

The author's writing style combines vernacular, modern style and martial arts style. As a martial arts fan, I am still not used to it. However, this style is very graphic and suitable for newcomers to martial arts. Simple, crude and clear, with a little bit of martial arts style. It is recommended to enhance the flavor of martial arts later. Don't be too straightforward, just make it stand out.

The poison is no longer enough. Say goodbye.

Come on, the author, I see that the author has a lot of thoughts in his heart, and if he writes with spirit, this work will definitely become popular. I have followed and collected your works. I hope you can leave a message in my new game book "Building a World" when you have time. Please vote for it. Thank you...

Books of the same type have been around for 17 years. At that time, they were only a small hit, and then they never appeared again. Now, the author has picked them up. The author's writing thinking is still stuck in the past. The plot is somewhat innovative, but the writing style is so poor that it is embarrassing.

The live broadcast room of cultivating immortals is still good for practicing martial arts.

Well, the theme of martial arts plus live broadcast plus a routine similar to spiritual energy recovery. It's quite new. But there are a few questions_? ①I don't believe Guo Jia is not monitoring him. It's okay when he's not much different from ordinary people, but what happens when he reaches a high level? And imparting martial arts to ordinary people (I haven't seen it yet, but it should be possible. After all, it is a spiritual recovery with only the protagonist having no fun pretending to be cool). Once it reaches a certain level of popularity, it will be monitored, and it will definitely be restricted after Guo Jia verifies it! Xia uses force to break the ban. Guo Jia'an has a brocade spear, so he will definitely be restricted for safety. ②Second question, can you stop being so impatient and start giving away girls before Chapter 10 (don't say it's not the case, a girl you don't know is camping alone in the middle of the night, and there is a strange man with obvious strength next to you. Giving away girls is too obvious) I don't know how the author explains it later.