Xiawu Xingkong

After reading the whole article, I feel that the author does not look like a new writer at all. At least he is relatively proficient in action description and layout. Already collected and invested, to be honest with everyone, I am more optimistic about this author. But it's just relatively optimistic. As an author, perhaps my writing is not as good as others, but as a bookworm of more than 10 years, I can see that there are many problems in the work. But first of all, there is no doubt that the level of this work exceeds 90% of new authors. As far as the first few chapters are concerned, it is very worth reading. There are almost no mistakes in writing, but to be honest, the highlights are not great. First, even if the world 300 years from now has experienced a disaster, it will still take 200 years to rebuild after the disaster. No matter what, we should not go back to the living standards of 300 years ago. Since the time span is such a long time span, I think we should add some science fiction descriptions to the ordinary life background, instead of just adding modern life to it. (This is not to say that I am being arrogant. After all, it was the year 2100 when the disaster occurred, right?) Secondly, the protagonist was also an ordinary person in his previous life, so why is his character so transcendent? I think there should be more psychological description of the protagonist, and it would be better to point out the points where the protagonist's heart changes. Because my editor once told me that it is best to point out the protagonist's goal at the beginning of the novel, that is, the obsession in his heart. This will not only give the author a tenacious mentality and an explanation, but also give the readers a motivation to read on.         ，，，，，                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   - It is the love for Xiao Xun'er in his heart and the obsession to rescue the master from the Soul Palace. It is these that can support him all the way. Third, the background of the story is quite old-fashioned, and the things described in the first 10 chapters are all things that have been written countless times by seniors, which makes it seem boring to readers.                                                                                                                                                                                   "                                                                                                                                                                                                                   . . . No more. My level is limited, so I can only ask these few questions for the time being. But other than that, the author's level is indeed good, and the 20,000-word signing statement is also very favored by the editor. Let's work hard together.                ！

Recommend the book "God's Attack from Heaven" to test the poison. A person has three souls, A prisoner of war, a doctor, an ancient god … "The daughter is yours, and the wife is mine." "This is unscientific." "Ah! It's over, it's over, I can't tell the difference." … "The son is yours, and the wife is mine!" "This is unscientific." "Ah! It's over, it's over, I can't tell the difference anymore." …. "Don't make any noise! It's all Lao Wang's!" Fantasy novel

Nice! The writing of this novel is sophisticated, the characters are outstanding, the foreshadowing is perfect, the main line is clear, and there is a faint aura of apotheosis. Come on, the author is great. Collected. "Leisure Mission Life in the World of Martial Arts". Please click and collect it and give me some suggestions.