Everything Starts with Getting the Skill Panel

After reading dozens of them, I thought it was strange. The author might be a newcomer. The dialogue was quite awkward. Ten years ago, no, about 15 years ago, this conversation method was very popular. Now there are only some short articles written for newcomers like this. The author tried very hard to write in an organized way, but how can I put it? There is a problem with the setting of the level system. It is supposed to be about killing monsters and upgrading. Then you can just explain what upgrades are needed, how to upgrade, and how strong you will become after the upgrade. You always have to emphasize how hard you work hard in cultivation. If you suck souls and upgrade, you can just kill monsters. This is not a farming article. There is also the world system. It is unreasonable to put a little bit of setting in each chapter. At least it is inappropriate at the starting point. It is best to explain it clearly in the three golden chapters. A little bit of toothpaste can easily make readers disgusted, and the author himself can easily confuse the setting in future writing. However, for a newcomer, the writing is quite good, there are no fundamental mistakes in principles, and it is good to practice. If it is published on other sites, maybe it will still achieve good results. 🙂 (for reference only)

Is the author a newbie? Come on! I would like to make a small comment. Every time the protagonist speaks the first word, there are too many modal particles. Ah, wow, eh, um, this will make the character too bluffing. Dad also loves um, and the villain appears. This is a mistake that many new authors like to make, and it greatly affects the reading experience! It's interesting to have modal words once or twice, but you can't have such surprises multiple times in a chapter. After all, if every character is like this, their respective images will no longer be distinct. Speaking of characters who love to bluff, I think of Amber from Sword of the Dawn with big eyes. She also loves wow. If you want to shape the protagonist into a similar character, the author can refer to Yuantong's technique. Although everyone has their own writing style, this does not affect the original reference, don't you think? Finally, come on💪I hope every author can have a work that becomes a god

The title of the book is so long. I'll help you recommend it elsewhere. I also wrote the wrong title.

You guarded such a good spot to spawn monsters at the beginning but didn't develop? ***

This book is an absolute hit. The protagonist is mentally retarded. He has cheats but can't use them well. He knows that he has poor qualifications but still runs around trying to die. No matter how awesome the cheats are, he is still a weakling.

Why does this book seem so contradictory? The plot and logic are good, but the character creation is such a mess. Every time I see many characters talking nonsense and being cute, and every one of them is like this, I feel like I am watching a fairy tale world or a children's book. The style of the characters is far from the background of the cultivation world and the human race, and is out of place, giving me a super weird feeling.

The protagonist can absorb the soul points of other people killed by him. Why not follow the master and level up quickly?

There is a question that I have never been able to figure out. What is the use of raising moves without mentioning realm? When you reach a high level, you have to change your moves. If you have a powerful father, why don't you improve your level and practice so many moves?

The protagonist carries burdens wherever he goes. It seems unreasonable to waste such good points even though he has them. After all, the protagonist is aware of the crisis. The author should deal with the main plot and not waste a good book.

He's almost ruined and still doesn't let his father brush it for him. According to this setting, he has to patch it in the future or he can't upgrade at all. That's why every system host is a waste of qualifications. The path is too narrow.

Too wordy, and his personality is like a...

Deleting the part about wanting to tell cheats can increase subscriptions a lot, but I think that part will dissuade a lot of people.

The setting is good, but the writing is not so good, just my personal opinion! Just one comment and the book will be deleted.

It feels super watery, a feeling that I can't stand...

So verbose! I'm too impatient to watch this!

With all due respect, after reading more than a dozen chapters, the protagonist's IQ has never been online. It's hard to continue watching. 886

Gone, gone. I can't stand it anymore. The protagonist's IQ is worrying.

Well, I would like to make some comments to the author, that is, whether the punctuation marks can be better divided into paragraphs. It is very uncomfortable to look at it like this.

Yes, I am also writing about exotic beasts, but not as good as yours. Keep up the good work.

Why isn't it updated?😆😆😆

A bit unlike a time traveler😅

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down😁

Dear author, I just want to ask you, how many times do you update a day?

I saw you on Tieba. I won't say anything anymore. I'll just collect it first and then talk about it.