Candidates for the Underworld King: Collapse

I feel so happy. A senior reviewer at a roadside stall gave me a 70-point rating for this book. I am so happy! Don't stop me! I want to go to the house to reveal the tiles!

It has been recorded, so I will delete it for fear of future trouble.

Comment as you wish! Comments on typesetting: It is recommended to add a chapter sequence! Conducive to signing the contract! Comments on the content of the novel: First, the necessary conditions for the first chapter of the three golden chapters! Shaping the image of the protagonist is the second wedge. The so-called wedge is the wedge that supports the plot line of the entire book! For example, a series of examples where the protagonist is plotted and then embarks on a road of revenge! This is the introduction to the story line! Third, for the necessary conditions for the full text, a sense of substitution and characterization! Scene description! They are all essential. From the first three paragraphs of your first chapter, you can find many flaws, such as unnecessary descriptions! And a simple sentence can make it clear that the protagonist is on an off-road vehicle! Call it a brief! Unnecessary descriptions will make readers lose interest in reading! Because most readers come here for your plot! Of course, a sense of immersion is also essential! Use concise sentences to summarize the actions, expressions and thoughts of the protagonist! After reading the first chapter, I tried my best to read the first three chapters! I suggest you improve the characterization of the protagonist! When describing! No need to over-describe useless things! Like the epaulettes you started with! And then there's the environmental characterization! Your opening only mentions that the main character is in an SUV! But the environment outside the off-road vehicle is not described! Example: In the extremely silent night, a military off-road vehicle roared on the mountain road! Breaking the silence in the mountains! Strong high beam lights illuminate the road ahead! xxx was sitting in the passenger seat with a nervous expression! Look in the rearview mirror! There are two xxxx sitting in the back seat! It would be better to describe it like this! The environment was shaped, the off-road vehicle was also shaped, and the protagonist inside the vehicle was also written out! So much to say! I am more practical! Not saying any compliments! The above personal suggestions! As for whether to modify it or not, it's up to the author himself! Sakura wishes the author an early signing! 🌹

As I write this, I wonder how many people are still reading this. If you pass by here, please leave your fingerprint and punch in.

This achievement. The author was tired from writing, so he finished it and started a new book. There are only two pen names: Tea Bone Bone and Xiyi. If you see the same name and the same protagonist when searching on the Internet, it is a continuation of this book.

Did the lady cut it? No way.

Well, actually I never watch female videos. . . . However, let me share my thoughts after reading it. The suspenseful atmosphere of this book, Miss Sister, is quite good. The book is also good. I have collected it. Come on.

Come on, bones, as long as you persist, you will gain something. Another book I reviewed was signed yesterday for 250,000 yuan. You have to hold on. Always following you😊

Do you want to interrupt the rhythm? 😰😰😰

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