First Reload

I couldn't help it... I have been reading books for so many years, and you are the first one I have seen that the small copy was not finished until it was put on the shelf. The author's writing is good and the logic is very correct, but it is too watery. I skipped the part about training mechas, which greatly affects the reading experience. I hope the author can realize this. If everyone is talking about the problem, then there must be something wrong. I hope the author pays attention to it 🙏

When I reached chapter 50, I couldn't stand it anymore. There was too much nonsense and the description was overwhelming. It was chapter 50 and the first 24 hours of the story hadn't passed yet. There were at least 7 supporting characters with names, surnames, backgrounds, and subsequent roles. There are also supporting characters' backstories and future situations that should be explained slowly in the story. It's as clear as writing an outline for a fan. One person can take up two chapters on average. Come on, author. I'm withdrawing.

How many days did it take to write a game? I am convinced. Author, can you write it more concisely?

I want to talk about the relationship between the male characters and the female characters. In one sentence: it looks like a harem drama, but it is actually a pure love drama with a positive protagonist.

The writing is generally good, but one obvious shortcoming is that the background explanation is seriously delayed. Repeated mentions, such as "Qingyu" in the book, and the background of the Changsun family, give people a poor reading experience. The character is a bit like Tian Xingjian and the little boy in "Fake Hero". Book lovers who like fake heroes will probably like this book. I hope the author will continue to work hard and write better. I may wait for a while to watch it again, but I won't follow it up.

I think this book is very interesting. Anyway, here's a sentence: read it if you like it, or get out if you don't.

The literary talent is quite good, but it's too messy and feels a bit watery.

Too watery and too slow, the beginning is exciting, but the further you go, the less interesting it becomes.

It's wonderful. It would be nice if there were more updates. Come on.

This kind of powerful science fiction is actually classified into the military... The editor is very knowledgeable. If it weren't for the cover, I would have missed it.

Today, "Zhu Xian" is grandly released; today, "The First Heavy Equipment" is not grandly released. The author of "The First Heavy Equipment" is Han and Tang Fengyue, my long-lost brother. I first met the Han and Tang Dynasties in the readership group of "Special Years". As soon as I joined the group, I was bombarded with a series of questions: Have you read my book? How about it? What's the shining point? Wait, wait. I thought it was the author of "Special", so I expressed my opinion in a very silly way. Then, the righteous friends told me that he was not the author of this book, but the author of another book. The person who caused the problem was Fengyue of the Han and Tang Dynasties. Han and Tang Dynasties are very popular among the readers of "Special Years", and they are ridiculed and ridiculed as soon as they appear. The ridiculing words flew away like bullets. I watched his embarrassment with the attitude of watching the fun. Unexpectedly, he strolled around and let all kinds of bullets fly to his body and fell down automatically. In the Han and Tang dynasties, people were at ease and had smooth skin. I was in admiration across the screen: This guy is a beast 👍 I once contributed my face to a department of the Ministry of National Defense to experiment with new bulletproof vests, and I pride myself on being a shameless person. Only after meeting the Han and Tang Dynasties did I know what it means to have a better world. This guy has no moral integrity. Heroes always pay attention to heroes. This is the so-called sympathy for each other. Therefore, I naturally paid attention to the Han and Tang Dynasties and an author. Of course, I had to read his works. I can only find one of his books "The First Heavy Equipment" on Qidian (the other books he wrote are all 404 🤭). At that time, there were only a few dozen chapters, which was not enough to read. I had no choice but to download an app for pirated books. Unexpectedly, after entering the author's name, his books shone brightly in the pirated APP, and many readers were following each book. At first glance, the books in the Han and Tang dynasties looked like cucumbers freshly picked from the field, full of moisture; when I looked at the books in the Han and Tang dynasties again, they looked like cucumbers freshly picked from the fields, fresh and delicious. The books of Han and Tang Dynasties are organic cucumbers that are carefully cared for. They are full of water, delicious to eat, and rich in nutrients. When you open the book of Han and Tang, what comes to your face is his full sincerity and his love for life. It makes sense that he has many fans in pirated apps, and readers are very discerning. I don't quite understand the serious hydrology behavior of the Han and Tang Dynasties, so I asked him whether he wrote for dreams or for bread? His answer was both. Well! Well, there's nothing wrong with that. Perhaps for the sake of bread, the Han and Tang Dynasties could use long paragraphs to describe thighs and add elements that most readers like in the book; perhaps because of dreams, the Han and Tang dynasties constantly changed their themes, writing from farming to cities, from cities to military, and from earth to the Milky Way. NND, it's really written in the sky. "The First Heavy Equipment" is such a military novel written about heaven. It is not easy to write a book with this kind of subject matter. After all, with "Legend of the Galaxy Heroes" in front of it, it is too difficult to achieve that kind of attention or even surpass it. Han and Tang still wrote, and wrote "The First Reinstallation" with his love for literature. He knew that his results might not be good, and that his basic readers might be lost. He knew all the adverse results, but he still persisted because of his fascination with the stars and the sea, and because of his love for literature (Doctor, please give me a bottle of antiemetics, thank you!). Essentially speaking, I am the same type of person as Han and Tang, with high IQ, high EQ, kindness, passion, love of life, goals to strive for, a thorough understanding of the world, and principles (6789 words omitted here). I am the kind of person who is noble at heart but cynical and bohemian on the surface. I am just purer and more handsome than Han and Tang. Because they are the same kind of people, I understand Han and Tang's persistence in "First Heavy Equipment"; therefore, I am moved by Han and Tang. So, I want to cheer for my brother who is no longer the same as before, my half-brother. The Han and Tang Dynasties were also working hard to get their works into the readers' horizons and achieve better results, and they were fooling around. The Han and Tang Dynasties said that "The First Heavy Equipment" was on the shelves, and he updated 200 times that day; The Han and Tang Dynasties said that "The First Heavy Equipment" was silver, and he made women's clothing videos; The Han and Tang Dynasties said that "The First Heavy Equipment" had orders of over 10,000, and he ran naked on Chang'an Avenue;  … … … ... An author with a dream, an author who masters his writing ability to the point of perfection (again, again... A bottle of medicine for stopping, stopping, vomiting...), An author without moral integrity, an author who is amusing to the point of joy, his little dream, why don't we help him realize it with malice? 😏😏😏 Let us invite friends, turn on "auto subscription", let us crowdfund silver, and let us all happily run "First Heavy" together and build our own sea of ​​stars. (Actually, we were the ones doing the trouble, and afterward, we sat on the bench eating watermelon and watching Han and Tang Dynasty Women's Wear and Guo Ben😏😏😏) Think about it, this is a fun thing. Just in case, what if the Han and Tang Dynasties, with everyone's encouragement, became possessed by Wen Quxing and wrote "The First Heavy Equipment" into a classic like "The Three Kingdoms"; or his character exploded and wrote "The First Heavy Equipment" as Xingchen Baijie... This, more It's more than the ticket price 😄😄😄 To subscribe to this book, you only need to move your fingers. It only costs the money of a cigarette. If you move your fingers, the Han and Tang Dynasties may bring you infinite reverie and infinite joy. Think about it, how happy I am. In order to make the Han and Tang Dynasties run smoothly, and for such fun things, let us move our fingers together ✊ One, two, three! ———————————————— Today "The First Heavy Equipment" is on the shelves, and it coincides with the Mid-Autumn Festival. The storytellers of the brothers who have not seen each other since the Han and Tang Dynasties raised their glasses to wish brothers and sisters:                                   Happy Mid-Autumn Festival! Happy family! On a full moon night, raise your glass to the sky and look at the Han and Tang Dynasties in the distance, the wind and moon are boundless. At this moment, I should raise my glass to invite the moon. Cheers 🍻

I have just read dozens of chapters. The concept of the book is good, and the author's writing style is also good, but it feels too dragging. There is no climax after forty or fifty chapters. I hope the author can write the non-main plot concisely, otherwise the book will gradually lose its appeal.

Your support is the author's motivation for writing. Let's paddle together and cheer the author on 😡

Can the reward be increased...

After reading Chapter 182, let me summarize what I remember Hmm. The protagonist travels through time, shows off, fights, forces emotional scenes to sell his feelings, fights, and shows off. There are quite a few supporting characters, but none of them stand out. The background is quite clear. How can this narrative background endorsed from God's perspective be written in a thesis with dozens of chapters? Forced emotional drama. To put it bluntly, only those angry young people who have little experience and are too lazy to think will want this sentiment from you. Forget about selling feelings, the key is that the writing is not very good. There is no emotional foreshadowing, and you expect the reader to cry along. It's gone, keep up the good work When I first read the book review and others said you were watery, I thought it was just a more detailed description I didn't expect you were real water I really have you, pond.

Fengyue, you got 404 in your last book. Although I didn't insist on watching until the end, the reason is that I always felt that the plot was too dragging. Really, I don't know if others feel this way, but I still hope you will pay attention to this problem, and I hope your grades will get better and better!

I enjoyed reading the last book but I regret not being able to read more stories! Come on Han and Tang! Collect and invest soon!

When I saw this book for free, I really thought I had encountered a divine book at first. Who knew that the more I read, the more helpless I became. There were endless nonsense, too many descriptions of psychology and details, and I was very impatient. The opening battle actually lasted 200 chapters! Especially when I saw Tsuyoshi Miyamoto escaping, I felt angry. The author may have left a strong opponent for the protagonist for the sake of the subsequent plot, but have you ever thought that if Miyamoto Tsuyoshi is let go and he recovers from his injuries and reappears on the battlefield, how many of our ordinary soldiers will fall in his hands? To indulge the enemy on the battlefield is a crime in itself! Leaving an opponent for the protagonist itself is a sign of the author's lack of confidence. It's already the interstellar era, is there still a lack of opponents? Reading online books is enjoyable in itself, but the more I read, the more depressed and aggrieved I feel. It's better to read modern history. I have no choice but to abandon the book. Fortunately, I haven't fallen into the trap yet, but it's just a waste of one day.

I'll go, I'm speechless after writing more than a hundred chapters for one plot. Some nonsense doesn't need to be written in such detail. I'm really speechless. I still want to see Xiao Tang jump out of this planet. I guess I have to read forty or fifty chapters 😆😆😆

The author has too many ideas in his mind, and that's why it feels disorganized. There are too many things he wants to express, and people can't understand the key points. People who read this book will either like it very much or just reject it. I would like to give the author some suggestions. As for whether the author can read it or pay attention to it, it is not within my scope. Author, you are writing an online novel, not a composition. Too many lamentations will only make people feel that you are not writing a novel. If you feel that some things must be vented through a channel, can you post a single chapter? Don't just sigh for two-thirds of each chapter, and the remaining one-third is just scratching. I hope you respect the profession of the author.

This is a book that makes people more and more irritated the more they read it

I watched it on a limited-time basis and read 50 chapters. Why is the training so endless? ? ? ? Do you plan to write 500 chapters for the opening boss battle?

Is the author a keyboard warrior? Does a mecha need to press 30 buttons to block? Does your drift mean that you press thousands of keys per second?

The book is good, but there are too many explanations, accounting for more than 70% of the content. Readers are not meant to read the explanations. It is okay occasionally, but there are too many and the plot advances too slowly.

To be honest, I was attracted by the mecha and the ending at the beginning. The more I watched, the more and more something was wrong. I accepted the author's setting of the work, but the plot was too dragging. There are only over 600 chapters in the book, and there are more than 100 chapters of various miscellaneous stories. It is not finished until I start charging, and I reach the first planet in the future... The plot is draggy, the story is incoherent, and the chapters are divided into uncomfortable chapters. I can't stand it anymore.

I read Chapter 66 in one afternoon. It was not so good that I couldn't put down my phone and read it all the time. Instead, I started reading it like crazy. . I feel that there are too many places that are awkward to read, the kind where the author writes that he is very moved, and the readers look at it with indifference. . Some places could really be better if the atmosphere was enhanced, but the writing is insufficient and it is filled with crazy water. . OK, after talking about the shortcomings, let's talk about the advantages. It's a rare special forces mecha text (maybe I just started to be interested in it recently). The background can be said to be quite cleverly designed, and the characters are also okay. However, Goldfinger felt that the writing was a bit sloppy later on. . So much for now

Emmmmm After reading more than one hundred and seventy chapters, I found that I am still obsessed with this little bit of trouble... Farewell

I saw this book yesterday. I thought it was a magical book at the beginning. But after I got the golden finger, I had to train endlessly. The plot was too slow and I didn't want to give it up.

In order to conquer the stars and the sea, we are now recruiting the following supporting actors 1. The supporting character who is the main boss of the protagonist's hostile force has lines and a lot of playing time; the specific appearance time, lines and the forces to which he belongs will be arranged as reasonably as possible by the author according to the writing progress. (5 People) 2. Positive supporting roles that assist the protagonist, from junior pilot to senior pilot, and their positions will be assigned by the author as needed. (36 People) 3. Cannon fodder (no limit to the number of people) Please leave a message and write down the name of the supporting character you want, the name of the mecha, and the big boss according to the message time, first come first served (Dear, remember to reward and vote)

Hey, I've been chasing you here since Returning My Rivers and Mountains. From two chapters in one book to two chapters in one chapter in two books, it feels unsatisfactory! Why can't it explode?