King of Time of Super Seminary

I just want to say that this book is really rubbish

Author, I have read everything you wrote and found some serious problems. 1. The three golden cards at the beginning, do you use them to write and play games? The topic of writing an article must be clear. From the beginning, it was just this kind of daily routine. I found it almost unattractive. 2. The protagonist has many and miscellaneous abilities from the beginning, but none of them is proficient. If you want to write the King of Time in Super Seminary, the most important thing is the ability of King of Time, which must be demonstrated from the beginning. Most of the people who come to read this book have read Kamen Rider. You have Sharingan and Chidori, and later Venom appeared. A hodgepodge! There are so many abilities that need to be highlighted, but I can't see the key points at all in your description. In this way, the protagonist has no deep impression in the readers' minds, just like a running account. The running accounts are all dry stuff after all. You are just filling in the water. If you don't reveal the main plot in the early stage and engage in these parallel imports, you won't be able to retain readers.

Why don't you want the protagonist to give Sharingan, Chidori, and symbiote every second of the day? If you want to write Shiwang, please at least respect the original setting, okay? What you wrote seems to be similar to what some Kamen Rider noobs wrote.

Three words of never-ending love, can we be more idealistic? You won't let go of any of the shortcomings of Chinese comics. Let's use an analogy. Aliens are going to invade the earth in a month. You are a frontline soldier. You don't think about how to survive. You miss women all day long. Do you feel outrageous? Do you have that strength? Are you capable? You just don't understand the power of the King of Time. Think about it carefully.

"The Universe of the Super Seminary" and "The Son of the Star of the Super Seminary" should not be too serious at the beginning, try to be approachable, and everything should be reasonable and not abrupt. I suggest you refer to the beginning of this book "The Universe of Super Theological Seminary". According to my observation, its beginning is the most suitable for you. But don't copy too much, just one-tenth of the similarities are enough. The beginning is mainly about the reason why the protagonist of this book has power. Try to make the modifications as perfect as possible to give people a smooth feeling.

Can you please not borrow Shi Wang's colleagues to write such a thing? The Super Seminary you wrote is not like the Super Seminary, and the King of Time is not like the King of Time. I am also drunk when you write a good fan novel into a counterattack by a diaosi. Don't think I am being slanderous. This is the fact. If you are just trying to satisfy your own pretentiousness, I have nothing to say.

Have you really watched Kamen Rider? I can't even figure out who rides what.

You will know after reading it.

You must have only watched the TV series King of Time, otherwise you would not have such a one-sided understanding of the knights. The King of Time is completely written as a loser and a licker, and the props will change when the knight uses the abilities of other knights. The time and space drive of King of Time cannot be swiped, and can only be used with the dial. Also, there is a little demon king behind you, which is very awkward to watch. Your emotional scenes are also very stiff, which makes people feel embarrassed. The plot is also very cliché, and the knight and super god you wrote in this book want the power of Naruto. Don't you think it is very conflicting? Tokio hasn't fully mastered his power yet, so why don't he go and practice lightning and sharingan.

Whatever I wrote, I wrote King of Time just like King of Time. He added all kinds of abilities, and they haven't changed a few times. Why don't you write an online game and show King of Time to deceive people? And judging from the plot, you only know a few knights. You probably haven't recognized all the 20 main knights, let alone the deputy knights and villain knights.

The lowly King of Time, even non-hosts can wear battle armor, ugh

It feels like the protagonist is licking a dog, licking Angel and Lena.

Brother, could you please read the original work before writing a fanfic? The character of your little brother Ming is very different from the original work. It is understandable that there is a difference between writing a fan and the original work, but you are completely different from the original work. Although this is your book, I can only give you some opinions at most. However, as a person who has fallen into the trap of Kamen Rider, I really can't stand your little brother Ming's character.

The protagonist is on the path of Toki-King, so he should directly become Toki-King at the second level, instead of being like Shogo Tokiwa in TV, who missed the opportunity to directly become Toki-King, and became the queen of Toki, but still suffered every day, and the whole knight's power was missing an old driver.

If there are only one or two comments saying that your writing is bad, maybe it's nothing. But if most of the comments say that your writing is poor, maybe you should really reflect on your writing.

What you wrote is completely random. Even if you want to change some settings as a fan, you can't change it in a messy way. Let's not say that the third level of the King of Time appears so casually. According to you, the third level is the final one, what about Enchanting and Tangwang. Those two can create the world, right?

Damn it, please don't insult Kamen Rider, okay? Have you watched too much Naruto? You still have the Sharingan and the vague writing at the beginning. Do you know what the situation is at the beginning?

To be honest, the combat power of Super Seminary is really not as expressive as that of Peng Mo, but I really don't see that the protagonist has the same will to become a king as Zhuang Wu. Moreover, Zhuang Wu became Peng Mo because Peng Mo is Zhuang Wu. Because Zhuang Wu in the future is Peng Mo, so Zhuang Wu, who was originally an ordinary person, was born to be a king. This is an endless cycle.

What are you writing about? King Toki will be beaten by Rena, and where is the protagonist's belief in being a Kamen Rider? Ge Xiaolun didn't understand at the time, but if the protagonist is born as a Kamen Rider, he shouldn't write like a fool.

The pig's feet will be eaten to death immediately.

After dozens of photos, the temperament of a loser has not changed at all, not even a little bit of the aura of a king, like a mentally retarded person who suddenly gained great power.

When the Emperor came, he was a loser

Why does every super god fanfic start with a diaosi? ? ? ? I really don't understand. After reading so many, only Lord of the Burning Sun can pursue it. The others are too rubbish, and the same goes for yours.

If I was in elementary school, I would continue to watch it, and maybe I would still find it very interesting. But now when I read some of the novels I read in elementary school, I think... What the hell, it's just shit. Yes, that's right, this one is also in that section

Then in Tokio 2, Pig's Foot's sadness and hatred can be understood by opening the Sharingan. In Tokio 2, you have to accept your own negative thoughts, right? Temporary negativity cannot succeed. In other words, Pig's Foot's personality has changed now? The King of TV Time is because he was able to save Gates and Tsukuyomi, otherwise he would probably have become a demon.

I saw the heroine, Yan, and went in to read it. I originally thought that Yan was a single female protagonist, so I had to finish reading it. After reading 9 chapters, I couldn't stand it anymore. You, I, have read so many books. This is the first time the heroine abandoned the book. Super Seminary, please be honest with this IP. Isn't it okay to continue writing it down? What about adding the Final Knight Emperor Cavalry? Why is it that Queen Keisha is not as good as them, or Karl is not as good as them? If you have ideas, why not make a fuss about Karl and Void. I believe many fans will like to read it.

Identification completed. The protagonist is Reina's dog.

Shit Shiwang The fight was not finished until the end. Neither the man in black nor Carl died. It's over. There isn't even a good ending. Just a little bit of diaosi is fine. The heroines include: Sanwang Kazuhiko.

Steal the car and then go out to do some heroic deeds?

ZI—O