I Have a Small Map

The creativity is okay, the writing is average, and the logic is nonsense. The biggest poisonous point is that the author takes on the role of the protagonist from his own God's perspective (the author writes the protagonist in his own way of thinking), rather than the logical way of thinking of ordinary (normal) people. Another point is that the data collapses. Summary evaluation: This book has three endings, a high probability of eunuch, a bad ending, and a low probability of an ordinary ending. The overall evaluation of the book: average to below. Suggestions: Think about the data first (straighten up those numerical concepts and understand them. When deciding on a larger or unclear numerical value, you can search it online, at least you have to have a concept). Then there is writing style, generally There is nothing much to say, just practice more. This is how most authors get through. Then comes the core issue [Logic]. Although I haven't read many chapters, I have seen a lot of illogical and even inconsistent content (it is recommended to read some books on logic). In addition, the author may not have noticed the logical conflict: at the beginning, he said how dangerous it is outside, and then the protagonist ran far away (some I won't complain about it), it was fine, and I was in danger at the Ghost-clawed Monkey (the protagonist still made it himself, without upgrading the stealth. This is also a contradiction, and it dissuaded many readers). He survived by relying on the settings temporarily added by the author. Since the protagonist can run that far without encountering danger, why can't others? Don't talk about first-level stealth, is it useful? I won't complain about other aspects such as food... Some personal thoughts and suggestions: Implement the outline [It is dangerous outside, ordinary people will die if they go out] The best world will be a horror world, with all kinds of monsters and monsters outside, and the village has special protection: land, mountain gods, evil gods, ancestors (ancestors) protection, etc. This way, the growth of the protagonist can be reasonably suppressed, and there is no need to set so many points for acquiring and upgrading skills. Press A normal ratio is fine (remember: the higher the value, the easier it is to make mistakes and the value to collapse), such as: a reward for every meter alive (a skill selection opportunity for the first time/selecting a life-saving skill for the protagonist), then 10 meters, 100 meters, kilometers, etc., And the same goes for upgrades (a 10x probability is considered relatively stable). Having said that, after thinking about this system setting in the early stage, it is easy to collapse in the later stage. In addition, the author has a very good setting, that is, the surrounding scenes often change (this can be used to add settings and plots) The core point is the unknown and horror (danger). There are too many horrors lurking outside the village, and they are peeping here. Focus on highlighting the terror outside and the ultra-high mortality rate. The protagonist's exploration at every distance is a struggle with terror (in the early stage: practice hard on life-saving skills and explore [light up the map], during the mid-term exploration: kill the weak enemies, and escape and mark the strong ones) (This setting is good for writing supernatural articles)

When I read your article, it said that the consumption of exploration points has doubled a hundred times. When I saw this, I wanted to ask the author, did your math physical education teacher teach you? 😆 The formula for doubling one hundred times is 100×2. Double is 100 × 3 or (100 × 2) + 100,..., And the formula for doubling it one hundred times should be 100 × 101 or (100 × 100) + 100, and the result is 1010. So I want to ask, doubling 100 is 100×2, doubling it is still 100×2? 🤔 So, when writing, don't just use simple and crude multiplication calculations. (100X100=10000) The method of doubling calculation is different from ordinary multiplication. The original value should be added. This is the complete doubling algorithm. Actually, it should be 99 times more. Rather than simply and crudely taking it for granted that it is a 100 times increase.

It can only be said that the novel has a strong novice vibe... Sometimes exaggerated descriptions, rather rigid pretending to be 13, and sometimes ignoring the settings and repeating some common settings.

Not bad, not bad. This is the author's third book. I feel good about it. I hope the author will keep up the good work! ! ! ! !

I really don't understand the comments in the book review area. Anyway, I think this book is much better than those that are cookie-cutter and you can tell what to write in the second chapter after reading the first chapter. Come on, author!

The writing is pretty good, keep up the good work

After reading more than 20 chapters, I want to ask the author if there is no outline. I always feel that you are about to become a eunuch. The exploration value set is too unreasonable. Suddenly it is 100 million. This 100 million is not of much use. I must stop writing novels about eunuchs. Comment by an eleven-year-old bookworm

The author, a newbie, is a bit overly concerned about numbers. It costs 100 million to upgrade a skill in the early stage. How to write later, I hope the author can revise the numbers.

I didn't sleep well last night and kept thinking about the map. I got up and lay down several times. I know what the author meant is a bit tricky. But I imagined an awesome space package + exploration + collection all night. Open your hand and it's about two square meters. Collect the earth and rocks under your feet and run up. When you have as many exploration points as there are tons of earth and rocks, or double. When you have as many earth and rocks as the moon, it can be said to represent the moon's destruction. When you are as big as the earth, you are invincible! I saw that the speed of the giant bird is over five million kilometers per hour; the distance from the traffic light to the Bird's Nest is hundreds of billions of kilometers, that is, hundreds of millions of kilometers, and the distance from the Bird's Nest to the sect is also hundreds of millions of kilometers (tens of billions of people have traveled and teleported, almost tens of billions, anyway, the map is big). Even if the two side lengths are multiplied, what is the following? Sorry, the number of primary school education is too large to calculate!

This setting is good, let's see how the writing goes first

1 Point of exploration value requires an exploration range with a side length of 1 meter............. Why is it so awkward... Ignore it... Just go one meter away... When you started being hunted by the Zhou family, it increased by 200 million points in half a year? If one step is half a meter, it is 400 million steps. In 30 days, 10 million steps a day? Not to mention that the protagonist is still in the state of stealth and deceleration. Do you know how many steps you can take in one second like this? If 86,400 seconds in a day is calculated as 100,000, one second is 100 steps, or should we calculate it as one step and half a meter, one second is 50 meters......... One hundred meters is 2 seconds? In other words, the protagonist can achieve this point by staying up 24 hours a day and sneaking over mountains and ridges at 5 times the speed of Bolt Dash... If you drive, this is 180 miles... And this speed is only 1/3 of the usual speed... In this case, the protagonist is not walking at ordinary times, but flying at subsonic speed... Well, this is a fantasy story about traveling through other worlds, which is quite cool... If you don't go into details, you can see... Emmmmm... Not bad

Everything else is fine, just a little bit. Why do you criticize the system? Can you survive in this world solely because of the support of the system? Do you blame the system just because you were careless? Anyway, if I put myself in my shoes, I wouldn't dare to curse at that time. What if the system disappears? How dare you?

I am really going to laugh to death from you, the author. Are you a tease invited by the monkey? Was your math taught by a physical education teacher? The units of measurement are written in a mess, but the setting is really innovative. But look at yourself, it was fine at the beginning, but if the male protagonist walked for more than a month and it would be a few days before he walked "two thousand kilometers", I can't bear it. Upgrading the skill to a level will increase it a hundred times to "100 million", but I can't bear it! ! ! But what the hell is this about the male protagonist behind you saying "Xuantie Tribe is not far from Luming Tribe"? What the hell is "walking more than 2,000 kilometers in two days"? When encountering a monkey fight, he said, "I just left the Luming tribe for a few days." What the hell is that? Have you ever thought about how big the map is? Is it enough to upgrade the map exploration points with this number of skills? It's just like a child graffitiing, scribbling as he pleases. Not only does it not stand up to scrutiny? It doesn't even stand up to rough scrutiny. Brother, my girl is not good at math and I can feel something is wrong. Brother, why did you have the confidence to write it down? Other people say that as long as it feels good, that's right, but if you really want to continue like this, it will really become a fast-food novel, the kind that sinks into the sea without making waves. I hope the author can pay more attention to it yourself! Also, I just looked through the comments and saw that a certain Dongxue netizen was right. The IQ setting of this book is really hilarious. I felt so speechless at first, but then I laughed out loud.

This author, are you sure you have played the game? You have to use base 100 to upgrade a level. You will never be able to reach the full level after playing this kind of game until you die. Not to mention the 100-base system, no one dares to play with the 2-base system.

Finally rotten. In the past, I could read the novices without thinking, but the style of this book has changed, and I am too lazy to comment. Today I took a look and it was an unfinished building. . . . It's so comfortable

Forcibly lowering the protagonist's IQ is all poison 🙂

I don't know what I read about Shen Nong, but I just read Chapter 9. In the previous chapter, it was written that the protagonist left the novice village, and later met a monkey who could break through level 1 stealth and almost killed the protagonist! How can the protagonist save his life if he doesn't upgrade this thing? But the appraisal skill was directly upgraded to level 3. In Chapter 9, in order to identify a plant, the appraisal book was directly upgraded to level 4 (it takes 100 million exploration points to upgrade to it). Stealth only reached level 2?

The data setting is too exaggerated, so I abandoned it.

Open a trumpet, leave the starting point, or close the book

If the martial spirit requires the supernatural power level to be sealed, then where did the martial spirit come from in the beginning? The skills and other skills can be said to be the accumulation of experience, and the essence and blood of monsters can be plundered. Did the seal of the martial spirit fall from the sky?

There are too many poison points, and the difference between level up is a hundred times. If you don't level up first and then level up, it's 8.

It's better to be cautious about the protagonist's settings. The skill upgrade restrictions (stealth, 100-fold improvement) are a bit problematic.

First of all, the setting of this work is very novel. In the current Internet era where system and rebirth articles are everywhere, this book takes the protagonist and travels to the background of the game. The golden finger for opening the mini map is very novel. It is full of rewards for defeating monsters and upgrading. At the same time, it unfolds the main line of farming. It will become more and more exciting in the later period. I wish Chai Daguanren's work a great success

It's best not to collapse the writing. If the value is too large, the number will be 100,000,000,000, and so on. The jump will be too large and difficult to control.

Damn it, if you really want the eunuch, just say so and end it hastily, 🪖 You need strength.

At the beginning, I thought the game was the same as the Novice Village, with missions, but then it was in the real world. Then you started poorly; when it comes to how the initial seal of the Wuhun Seal came about, there should be another way; your map has to say that it is 1 square meter. Doesn't the protagonist have to circle around to open the map? If you don't believe me, draw it on a map and see if it's wider than 1 square meter with thin strokes. There are other world maps that are much larger than the world map. Look on it to see if you can see the village-level roads. No matter how big the protagonist's map is, you can't see it even if you zoom in. How do you find the road? You can only explore in circles. How big can the protagonist see from a map? You have to go up a year to see one point and another; if you look for the nearest road to a roadside supermarket in San Francisco, USA on the world map, it is a road, not an airplane route. You can see it on the map, not to mention country roads. Let me see how long it takes you to use it. Is this still a high-definition satellite map, not a fog, not a map of another world? ? ? Give me 3 reasons! ! !

Why is the villain the legitimate son of the Zhou family who was killed by the protagonist, and the legitimate son of the Lin family was also written as a loser by you and died. The protagonist never thought of saving him, but directly said that he would definitely die. Will the person the protagonist Halo wants to save die? Haha, Lin Fanghua, the concubine of the Lin family, is a bastard who has become the head of the family. The protagonist also helps her solve her troubles in every possible way. Author, you resist the direct descendants so much, write all the direct descendants to death, and promote the concubine, the three views are not correct, and it is very poisonous!

This ending caught me off guard 😅

Alas, 142 went directly to the finale of the last chapter, and I couldn't stand the book anymore. If this book was written 3 years ago, it would still be good.

I, I don't know what to say, the author should practice for a few more years.