Go for Longevity

I hastily read it, Chapter 5, I'll give you a review first, I'm in a bit of a hurry (code words), I'll read the subsequent parts slowly. Let me tell you some good points first. The plot is smooth and I personally find it very attractive for me to read on. And the plot concept is very good. You travel to the underworld, encounter strong men and fight, and then affect the protagonist. It starts perfectly. Segmentation is also good. Comfortable to read. Then there are some shortcomings that I feel: 1. The early stage was a bit delayed, that is, there were too many people in front of the protagonist. I think it was good to rush through it and quickly enter the plot of the protagonist (but this is a matter of taste and wisdom) 2. The first three chapters as a whole explained the insights of a person who died in the underworld. The protagonist has a sense of presence in addition to the previous one. (But maybe you are the one who foreshadowed it.) 3. This is the second chapter. It's too long. I just finished the early fight in 1,000 words. This is what I personally think of fighting. Come on! Also: The above are my personal suggestions. It doesn't mean that you must follow my wishes. If you think I am wrong, please ignore it. Also, hope you persist.

I read it again and some of it is personal advice. Hope it helps. Writing a book is also a way to learn. Come on!

After thinking about it, I still feel that I need to say something. Overall, the first three chapters are okay, but after the end, it seems a bit embarrassing. How should I put it? Let's change the serious style into a funny style. There is a big problem with the description, and I hope it can be corrected! Come on!

The writing is quite good. When I saw the name Wu Bai, I wanted to laugh. The writing and plot are very good. Come on.

The fighting scenes are very well written. It can be seen that the writing is very careful. Unlike me, I just juggle the number of words and aim for perfect attendance.