A Not-So-Serious Fantasy

Your language is a bit stiff, and the connection of the plot is a bit unnatural, but the arrangement of the storyline is still good, and there are ideas for people to find out. It would be better if the first two problems could be corrected.

The author should work hard and work hard to update. The plot of this book is very attractive, with ups and downs. To be honest, there is even a little humor in some places, which adds a joyful and funny atmosphere to the book. I really like this book. Come on, work hard to update. I hope Dada will become a god soon! !

Come on, boss The characters in this book are very rich and the plot is very attractive. I am particularly curious about the plot development after that. Although it is a new book, the big book is very promising.

The book is quite interesting, it can be funny and funny, it is relatively relaxed and enjoyable, and the pace is quite good. It means the update is unstable, the kind of instability that readers will send blades to in the future.

First of all, praise the imagination, the story is also very good. There is a little more dialogue but it doesn't affect understanding. It can't be considered a completely formulaic article, the author has his own ideas. The key is that the author didn't intend to work hard, and it took so long to reach less than 40,000 words. My analysis is that I might want to stock up on manuscripts and wait for the contract to be signed. But I personally feel that the first book should gain some popularity. Of course, I may be wrong. If you have time, please give me some advice.

Big cheers for the author! (´･ω･`) This book is so beautiful! ٩(˃̶͈̀௰˂̶͈́)و

Well written, keep up the good work

Various snake skins, interesting😄

Big cheers for the author! Superb writing! Waiting for updates

It's very pretty~nice, I love it! !

Already collected, thank you brother

You can write well, brother👍👍🤝

Come on ✊✊✊

After roughly reading two or three chapters, I'm a little confused, but I can see that I want to write something humorous and interesting. The writing style is pretty good, but the artistic conception is a bit lacking in some places. It would be funnier if the description of the old grandpa started out in an awesome and upscale way, and then suddenly had a contrast. Maybe I didn't see the core and thought it was a bit confusing. I don't know what the connection is with the girl who appeared at the beginning, but it seems that the layout is quite large. Okay, that's pretty much it. I'll have to see more when I have the chance to see more in the future, but it's hard to say now.

The book is very good, please support the author (ง •̀_•́)ง

The style is more interesting, and the beginning of the story is quite attractive. Come on

The introduction has character, I like it, but I don't know what others think, so let's tell the story! The story is not bad, but I was a little embarrassed to read it, and I didn't have the interest to continue reading. Although the characters were well drawn, it was of no use. No one continued to read... Did you see the foreshadowing? How can you attract people to continue reading? There are a lot of dialogues, but there are not many Coca-Cola points. There are still some places that can be mentioned in one go. The story is not bad and the plot is OK. Keep up the good work! Finally, I hope it will be more refined. I comment very seriously. (The above is purely my personal opinion. Don't worry about it. If you don't like it, don't comment. If you don't like it? If you don't like it, you have the ability to comment back. The book is on my home page. Goodbye.)

Come on, author

Big cheers for the author! Each one has... So funny!