Little Fatty's Shuttle Ring

I just read a chapter, and the rhythm is good. There is only one thing I need to pay attention to. The dialogue needs to be framed, and quotation marks or other pairs of symbols can be added to improve the reading effect.

I don't know what to say, come and collect me.

It would be better to change the content of the previous chapters. It reads very awkwardly. I don't know if it's a punctuation problem or a problem with the writing style. It feels like a narrative, unable to be substituted. 😅

Writing will only get better and better, and the excitement will come later😁

Very poorly written. Can't stand a chapter

When Feng Yun came back, he started poisoning

Wider and wider, it looks good!

What the hell is there a w in Chapter 141?

Don't you want the dragon body anymore? You can use it to eat

Is the author also from Liaoning? Hahaha, I am also a fellow from Liaoning! Can you reply to me?

Why do all time-travel novels only travel through the world of novels and movies? ? Is the author lazy? .

What the hell is w? I also wanted to write an emotional drama, but I didn't even give it a name.

I've read more than a dozen chapters so far, and overall it's pretty good.

Congratulations on finishing this book. Is there anything you want to say? Millions of masterpieces

You are writing an essay! What about double quotes? And that's not how the composition is written! Take a good look at what others have written. It's really not possible to copy other people's novels and then write them yourself!

Forget it, I don't know how to put it, but the author is determined to have his own way anyway.

Rubbish novel, anyone who brings a girl back from a movie won't like to read it

If you don't sign a contract for one million dollars, what's the reason that keeps you going?

P City, Liaoning Province—Huludao is P, Liaoning Province

It is recommended to delete the content in parentheses like the first chapter. What you wrote not only fails to explain, but also makes people feel dumb and speechless. The segmentation is indeed not great, and it is still watchable, but sometimes when I am in a complicated mood, I just can't stand it if I want to watch it quickly. I won't comment on the plot. As for the above issues, just change them.