Crosstalk Tycoon

The book is very novel and unique. I support the author. Please keep it up and I will subscribe if it is on the shelves.

1: The current chapter is too flat. You should have a lot of pictures in your mind, but you haven't been able to describe it, so the picture feels very fragmented when you read it. The two dialogue lines look the same as those of Baishui. When the two of them go up, it's like reciting lines, and they just say it in one sentence. No tone, no interaction. In the two quarrels, the protagonist's character is a bit split. In the first one, he is a smart person, and in the second one, he feels like a stupid young man. Also, your OS is really exciting. 2: Plot arrangement. It doesn't matter that the plot is cliche, but it's a bit too forced. Luan Yutong and Tao'er seem to be specially wiping the protagonist's butt. They appear before the protagonist has anything to do, just like personal nannies. Brother, let's think about it carefully. It was Captain Luan both times. The first time he went too far and flashed directly to Tao'er's study, and the reply came shortly after leaving. This time and space are not logical. 3: On average, each paragraph has a "Tao". In fact, there is no need to describe the character speaking. It is good to use an action, state or tone of the character to replace his or her willingness to speak. My humble opinion: It's a bit too personal, and the characters don't have specific names. If it wasn't Tightrope, it would look like a mist. If the time point is not chosen well, this will require a lot of creativity on the part of the author, because you need a lot of new jokes to support the show, otherwise the system will have no sense of existence, but at the same time it will also make people look forward to it. This is the brief discussion, I hope you can stick to it.

One chapter a day is too little! Can the author make more updates?

Writing a book is both a hobby and a job. It's best if you can sign a contract. After all, you have to make a living. If you don't get good grades, I won't write. I understand you. Even if one day you feel you don't want to write anymore, as long as you continued to write seriously the day before, I will see wherever you write!

That's too ***, just concentrate on writing about Newton. . . . . 😁😁😁😁

Come on ↖(^ω^)↗, please update, keep at it