Zhudao Academy

I read dozens of chapters of this book and didn't want to read anymore! Because the description of the protagonist is so poor! It always reveals a contradiction! At the same time, I want the protagonist to think of a saint! Has a bookish temperament! At the same time, I want to highlight my personality! This kind of contradiction will greatly affect the feeling of reading a book! Abandon books

Poison, Extreme Poison, I was poisoned to death before I even finished reading five chapters. Ten years of The Walking Dead. The first time I opened my mouth, I just pretended to be cool in a group of background people? But the first few lines still say "Ah! I want to continue to hide, and I need to understand the situation first before speaking." Just pretend to be cool? ! Really retarded

How should I put it, the birth of a saint, the big scene of someone tens of thousands of miles away, and the shocking act of speaking at the age of ten are all okay, and they also highlight the protagonist's style, but what the protagonist says after that. . . . What a bullshit. . These and other urban tone, am I reading urban literature? At least use literary or fresh language. What you write about is the coming of a saint into the world. It has the feel of an urban small TV (DS). If the saints all look like this, how can people learn and pass on the words of the saints. If your writing skills are really bad, you can use vernacular to transform it into classical Chinese, and the style should be stronger.

I rarely leave book reviews. This is a rare good book that I have encountered since the book shortage. I have also read the last chapter. I hope the author can stick to it. I have some ideas and I hope the author will adopt them. 1. The protagonist has left the novice village, and the current layout is still a bit small. The way of a saint can teach all things, and the mentality can be appropriately expanded, not limited to people 2. Saints from ancient times, protectors are indispensable. The appearance of protectors is also recognition of saints from other angles. It can be seen that there is only one true potential among the current protectors. It is recommended to add more potential protector disciples >Third, there cannot be too few disciples of sages and guardians, and there cannot be too few disciples of evangelists. Among the protagonist's disciples, the second-generation disciples are currently set to protect the Tao, and there are no evangelists. The prodigal sons of the third-generation disciples who have just started to return are in line with the nature of evangelists, but they feel that there are still too few evangelists The above immature suggestions, I hope it can give the author some help. It is easy to write a book about sages and sages. I hope the author can work hard!

When I saw the fourth chapter, I was shocked. The writing was not very rigorous. The plot style was like the old-fashioned show-off style of 2009. It was a self-pleasure work by the author.

It felt too exaggerated, with all kinds of pretense, including collecting ghosts, etc. I was also convinced. The ghosts are so active. I think it is a ghost novel. It is not a reading novel. I haven't leveled up many levels, but I want to fight monsters and collect pets. I feel very awkward. This novel really gives me a headache.

. . . . . . It's boring, the character of the main character is so fucking messy. . . Die. . . He

In a world where Confucianism and Taoism are paramount, the protagonist ignores etiquette and enforces pretentiousness, which is simply unbearable. Author, believe it or not, if the protagonist's performance in class on the first day is spread, it will definitely cause big trouble for the protagonist. The pretentious and slap-in-the-face routines in urban novels and fantasy novels are just courting death if used in a world dominated by Confucianism and Taoism!

Even the protagonist of Yangshen can't do it, so why do you boast that everyone in Haikou is like a dragon? Looking at all the protagonists in Qidianwai Station who are cultivators of immortality and truth, they can't do it, so why do you brag?

There are no monks in the yellow sand for thousands of miles, and the Confucian scholars are covered by the violent storm. The three religions were originally Taoist, so how could they be equally famous?

Is your practice based on Taoism or Confucianism?

When I came to enlightenment, I saw the ancient rivers and seas, and walked all over Cangya to visit Xuanmen. Xiang Dao occasionally wrote about the human world, one flute, one sword and one Kunlun.

True gods, true saints, and true immortals, and the path to Confucianism is to be a wise man. He has endless mysteries in his mind and rules half the civil and military world!

I was drawn in by Su's poem, and after reading Chapter 10, I felt that the writing style and behavior were far from the set world view. A scholar with a saint's fate, not to mention what he was like in his previous life, just a little bit of common sense, and he also knows that Confucianism values ​​etiquette and respects teachers, right? A 10-year-old kid who always contradicts his teacher, speaks loudly and curses at each other, wouldn't such a monster be beaten to death directly?

I feel pretty good after reading the introduction, but when I look at the content, it looks like shit, and I don't look like a scholar at all. The words used in the dialogue are inappropriate. For that kind of world and environment, a scholar's ​​words are all country slang, which is vulgar and doesn't look like a scholar at all. Don't talk about modern times, go and see the Confucianism and Taoism. Do you have such vulgar words as you? Still a scholar! Hehe

It was okay after reading dozens of chapters. The only thing is that the protagonist spent twenty years in his previous life living as a dog. Being able to inherit memories, thirty years have passed since his past life, and he still talks and acts like a child. Compare today's elementary school students and junior high school students, and you will find that your protagonist is no different from a fool.

It's over. I thought I could keep reading. I couldn't hold on for twenty chapters.

I couldn't help but jump in after reading more than 70 chapters. Then I read the author's previous works. In terms of the number of words, the author worked very hard and was very persistent. No matter what, these are all worthy of admiration. But, in terms of the language organization of the work, at the beginning the protagonist calls her mother. . . Well, this is an ancient oriental fantasy background. I understand that the author hopes that the article can be easy to understand and reach a wider audience, but can it be said to suit the locale? The title "Mom" is too dramatic. I understand that the author wants to continuously create small climaxes and conflicts to let the pig's feet overcome the slap in the face and create a better mood. However, you can't just copy it mechanically just for the sake of fun, speed up the pace, and have all kinds of conflicts. At least when I read more than 70 chapters, I personally felt that the entire worldview created by the author in the book was messy and even contained many contradictions and conflicts. After all, as a reader, what I see is following the pig's feet, following what the author presents to me, and feeling from it. Let's not talk about the supporting characters with pig's trotters. The supporting characters of the little brother are all forcibly reduced to intelligence. The pig's trotters are just used drugs to upgrade and cheat all the way. Goldfinger is indispensable, super hanging. If it weren't for the wrong background, it would be the ancient version of Tianliangwangpo (Cut the grass without eradicating the roots and the spring breeze will grow again, forget it, let Liu Shi/Black Tiger Gate be finished). Coupled with the typical novice writing style, counting here in detail suddenly reminds me of the ancient Mary Sue novels that I have stopped reading for a long time. Oh, now I suddenly realize that this is obviously the oriental fantasy Jack Su Xiaobai. Been taught a lesson. For beginners, urban themes are better, as are science fiction and light novels. You must have the skills of a tomato master, and be able to control fantasy and western fantasy, but it will not be eye-catching and fascinating. Avoid historical and ancient backgrounds, etc., And be sure to deal with the sense of inconsistency in language organization. No matter how plain the writing is, others can write it in a fascinating way, and their skills can always be seen in terms of writing style, technique, and meticulous processing. Recommendation: New to online writing, slightly middle school, (crossed out) low IQ (crossed out) good at self-esteem and good at substituting, junior braves should be able to adapt well. Bookworms who have been reading online for a long time, those who have picky tastes, those who follow party logic, those who pursue perfection, and those who are stupid, etc., Please enter with caution to avoid being so shocked that you cannot take care of yourself. If you want to find holes in the article to play the game of finding fault, and if the poison resistance is high enough, you are welcome to join the trap. This article will never let you down.

From the beginning of this book to reading more than 700 chapters, I mistakenly thought it was a fairy grass but turned out to be a poisonous weed. The character is a person who has lived in the modern society for 20 or 30 years in the previous life and is still cultured. In another world, the fate of a saint is lacking the slightest trace of a saint's heart. Then don't write about Confucianism, let alone papermaking and printing that benefits mankind. The setting of force is messy, including Confucian saints, Yang gods, and Taoists. The protagonist may have lost his wits. Since you say you are a saint, why do you know that Wang Mang is indecisive and always waiting for others to solve it? What the hell is this without practicing mind and character? Just one rhyme song called Tanghulu? Don't you live? Even if you write fictional history, you still want to be more sophisticated? Are you getting more and more angry as you look at the mess? You might as well write about a Taoist or a demon, but what about a saint? Jumping on the bandwagon? Why are you so anxious about writing a book? If you polish it carefully and write it slowly, maybe you can become a god in one book. The plot is too fast and I feel like a novice

There are no monks in the yellow sand for thousands of miles, and the Confucian scholars are covered by the violent storm. The Tao of the three religions is originally the first, so how can they sit on equal footing and share the same reputation? Fellow Taoist, you are polite!

Chapter 12, Zhou Can went home and called "Father, Mother, I'm back." His mother immediately realized that her son called him "Mom" and asked Zhou Can to call him "Mom" again? ? ? ? It's a drama in an instant. Author, you have some ideas, can you do it? Can mom and mother use it like this? One is a modern word and the other is an ancient word, which is totally different.

Why fight with the sword? Thousands of people point to it, and thousands of people seal it, you can ask the peaks of the rivers and lakes; three feet of autumn water is spotless, and it is unparalleled in the world. Oh, the author is still a fellow Taoist, collect it first!

We know that water is the fate of prosperity and adversity. It is vast and unpredictable. There are no waves, the sea covers the turbulent waves, and fish and dragons appear in the deep water without moving.

He who deceives gods and saints also deceives immortals, he deceives Confucians and Taoists as well as sages. There are thousands of deceptions in his mind, and he is nicknamed Su Lao Jie.

Let's talk about Confucianism. From a certain point of view, no, in the entire literary world on the Internet, there has never been an author whose readers understand Confucianism. I stand by this sentence, and if you don't accept it, come and argue!

There are no monks in the yellow sand for thousands of miles, and the Confucian scholars are covered by the violent storm. The Taoism of the three religions is the first, how can they be equally famous?

All the fame and fortune are gone, but the Bay-leaf Bodhi is free from dust. Having lived in the green mountains for a long time without white eyes, the birds in the nests and the beasts in the caves are tame at all times.

It comes from the spring stone hiding the dragon, and it will not appear without being exposed to the fire. Is Fengyun the Lord of Heaven? Nianzuo Xuan crown on the ninth level.

Those who are ruthless will hurt people's lives, and those who hurt people will not spare their lives!

The snow hides the night, the night hides the front, the frost swallows the sword and seals it