Mobile Valkyrie

First of all, in terms of subject matter, the theme of girl mecha is very novel and good, and it is a highlight. Second, from the content point of view, the main plot should be the daily life of the girl and the mecha battle. However, judging from the performance of the first five chapters, there are too many daily routines and too little combat plot. Of course, if the author does it intentionally, the purpose is to pave the way for a subsequent war. However, too much daily life will cause the overall rhythm of the novel to be delayed and the focus will change, which requires the author's attention. Third, structurally speaking, the beginning of the novel is very innovative. This is the first time I have seen the beginning of the news broadcast. It is well received, but there are many problems. The first point: the background frame is unclear, and the year 2036 does not mean anything. The second point: The setting of the protagonist is unclear. Since the heroine has the important task of defending the earth, she should not be such a childish person. Such childish play will make readers think that she is very strong and can easily complete the task, but the result is not the case. The image that the author wanted to create, which is shameful and courageous, ended abruptly because she was rescued by others in the end. The conflict was not intense enough. Of course, the advantages of this book are also obvious: the subject matter is novel, relatively close to life, the postmodern is not particularly advanced and has a sense of substitution, etc. Let me give you some suggestions: 1: You can write more about the battle plot and describe it in detail to highlight the difficulty of the battle and at the same time highlight the heroine's character. 2: You can add a prologue to introduce the specific background framework of the story. 3: You can choose an imaginary country, such as changing its name to China? This perfectly avoids reality and allows readers to know what you mean. After all, we want to create a pink body, which I think is... A bit unrealistic. 4: As for the setting of the heroine, I still don't quite know what her identity is? Besides being the daughter of a designer, does she have any aura? Why are there fan groups? I hope the author can enrich the character design in more detail. After all, the protagonist is a daughter-in-law, so no amount of words is too much. Of course, these are all my humble opinions. I usually read less online articles, but more ancient classics. There may be some places that are not suitable for the needs of online articles. The author cannot blame me. There are also some parts that I may have read less (I only read the first five chapters, and I will continue to follow up when I have time). There are problems in what I said. There is no need to doubt yourself. Finally, I wish your book will be signed and put on the shelves as soon as possible. Happy New Year.

Author, you just turned a science fiction novel into a martial arts novel, a combination of the two? …… Disclose the author's update time

Hello readers! The slightly absurd world view is intentional on my part, because it doesn't feel very interesting to be serious, and it is to pave the way for the cyberpunk world later on. As for the style, I chose the setting of mecha and martial arts because I wanted to try this combination. You will see a diversified novel. You may not like it, but I will write it this way. This is the right of both parties. When it comes to saying that this novel of mine imitates someone, I will be blunt. At the beginning, I wanted to write something like "Pacific Rim". During the writing process, I also read "Ghost in the Shell", and I am also reading another novel "Knife in the Snow", so generally speaking, I will not deviate too far from these three masterpieces. I don't think I can write this kind of masterpiece, but at least everyone can experience some resonance and feel this love in my novel when they still have unfinished thoughts about it. Wish you all a happy reading! Officer Huang Today is 2:05 pm on April 10, 2019. I am at home on vacation waiting for the birth of my daughter. My dear mother is watching the stock market next to me. I am smoking a Chinese cigarette and writing this paragraph 😏

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I was attracted by the name. . . Vivian. . . . Poor God. . . . .

Come on, Vivian, I couldn't help shouting when I saw this.

The mecha currently being developed has suffered such extensive damage that it will be very difficult to recover.

Is it the abnormal Vivian? I was just reviewing hope Ling, and I took care of him first in the morning.

I have collected it. It's really beautiful. The quality of the big book is guaranteed. Please keep updating.

What an incredible imagination! Must give a thumbs up!

A good book must be fattened and then killed to be enjoyable. The author will update it soon!

The article is very clear, the plot is compact, and the touching parts will make you cry! The work of a great god

The author's imagination is very rich, making the plot unexpected and whet the reader's appetite.

What a great book, I can only say one word, don't say it a second time!

I kept watching and guessing, but I didn't guess right once! Am I too weak? Keep reading, hehe, it's the ones who can't guess that are interesting. It's infinitely better than those books where you know the plot just by reading the introduction.

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The writing is a bit slow, but I will never be a eunuch. I will update it every day, and I won't be verbose and waste money on hydrology. It is expected to be completed before one million words. Thank you all for reading and show your heart ❤