Diary of Life in Another World

That's rubbish. Let's go back and remake it.

I read the first ten chapters but I still don't understand.

The psychological description of the blockbuster has reached the point where it affects viewing, so it is best to sort it out. The description of the environment is clearer and cannot be imaged. Where did the colon go?

The content is pretty good, but the writing style is a little awkward and a bit slow.

Your dialogue layout is so messy, with inner monologues interspersed in between. Even if you have mentioned the difference between single and double quotation marks before, it still makes me dizzy.

Author, are some chapters blocked? Can't solve it?

The character setting is quite good, but unfortunately the plot is chaotic and unstructured. He has a very good physical body at the beginning, but he does not make reasonable use of the resources around him to run a store. He joins a mercenary group to pretend to be young, but does not give pig feet the opportunity to participate in adventures. He has a great alchemy talent, but does not have any decent creative inventions. His main occupation is a cook, but the author obviously does not know cooking skills, so the food is just mentioned in one sentence, and the daily writing is not good.