Secret Exploration Master

It's too slow to get into the topic. It's much better to start directly from Chapter 6 than now. Chapter 1 has no meaning at all. As a reader, I have lost patience since Chapter 2. I turned the page to Chapter 6 in a hurry, and then... There was no more, and there was no sense of expectation at all, okay? It is recommended that the author think more carefully. Too many descriptions of people and things that are not necessarily related to the theme will seriously wear down the readers' patience. Internet writing is fast food literature, and its characteristics determine that it must quickly enter the theme and leave a certain amount of suspense in order to retain readers. For example, when entering the deserted town, you can appropriately exaggerate the atmosphere. It seemed that there were people active just a moment ago, but why is there no one now? The first house we entered in the town clearly had unfinished crafts, right? Such and such, otherwise this book is bound to not be read by too many people. The above, well, that's it.

It's very perseverant, and the writing style is okay, but the sense of substitution is not strong. Don't underestimate this thing, it is very important, because it can arouse the curiosity of readers and attract them to continue reading. Maybe your story will be good in the later stage, but to be honest, if your first few pictures make the reader lose interest, will he go back and look at you?

After reading two chapters, every time I read the protagonist's name, I seemed to see the author scolding me. . .

Heizi suddenly became angry... Took out the house book! If Hugh had changed into Heizi, he took out the house book and slapped it hard on the table! It will be better, I came here after reading your post! Let's encourage each other!