A Small Retreat

The writing is okay, but the beginning is more attractive than the beginning. I feel that it is not suitable for a supernatural suspense series, because you explain the ghosts and gods at the beginning, which will make people lose the shock and fear. Maybe fantasy and city are more suitable and easier to control.

The first chapter, the duel, directly states that the two of them used no magic and were like street gangsters. They beat each other until they were bruised and swollen, and broke things. The heroine took out a small notebook and wrote it down, and deducted it from their share. I think the rest is pretty good, especially when I read Chapter 5. The more I read, the better it gets.

The first time I watched a female video, I felt nothing special. With dozens of chapters, there is no outline, and it feels like it is slowly introducing gods, ghosts and monsters. I especially want to see how it goes in the mid-term and late stages. Oh, forget about short stories (under a million)

Seriously, your stuff is interesting and I like your ideas. But my ability to express myself is still poor.

I suggest the author change the cover. This cover doesn't seem suitable for this book.

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It reads much more smoothly now. Please vote for it and keep up the good work.

You have such a rich imagination, be sure to keep writing!

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I have never watched female videos, but I think you can still watch this one. Hope not to be disappointed! After all, I am very picky.

Poor writing style and poor vocabulary

Come on, writing is something you can practice