Sleepwalking in the Heavens

Personal reading evaluation, there are flaws, but it is not a conventional Singularity white text. It also has highlights. It is not a purely excellent work, but if you read it patiently, you will find a lot of different interests. If the visitor is willing, he can ignore some of the shortcomings and continue to look forward. Maybe... There will be some unexpected rewards.

The name has been changed. The original name was "The First Productive Productivity of Jianghu". Cover is in progress. I'm afraid some people don't know this book, so I'll tell you about it here.

At least have a eight of ten cards

I don't understand why the author voted for martial arts, but it's quite interesting. I hope the author doesn't give up and voted for it.

It's possible that no one has read my book, but I still want to say it. After I published Chapter 32, I haven't received any more clicks for several days. The list I was originally on was very embarrassing. Now that I haven't clicked on the update, I can only vote for myself in order to appear higher on the list.

Congratulations on the launch, first order support!

There will always be such a book. At first glance, it seems unremarkable, with slight flaws, but as long as you read it carefully, you will feel that there are dark flowers in the dark, suddenly enlightened, as if you have been enlightened, and like a winding path leading to a paradise... It has been collected and will not be spoiled, but the book is really good and worth reading. (Really recommended)

Congratulations on getting 250 recommendation votes hehehe

Sorry, I don't understand. So this is martial arts? You can find a single master.

I hope I can write it better next time. In fact, the beginning and setting are pretty good.

The author of the previous post read it and I deleted it... This is a reply to the author of the previous post: The idea of writing out the story in your heart is of course good, but it is very painful. For example, now, the outline is actually very important to a book. As for not needing an outline... For new authors, it can increase the interest in writing and reduce the boredom caused by boring plots, so that eunuchs... As for typos, try your best, and the impact is not as big as imagined... Congratulations to the author for his efforts to write a million words... Well, also because I died from the college entrance examination some time ago, the book list is of no use, but I can only hope that it will be a certain affirmation of the author...

This book does have its strengths and weaknesses. I will mention the shortcomings to the author and improve them in the next book. First, the author only describes the country's reaction through a boss and a subordinate. To be honest, it is better to give this boss a name. Secondly, regarding the handling of the character Zhang Xiaomei, I don't know if the author wanted to write that the heroine in the dream world is the same person as her, but the handling in the early stage was really not good. Even if the protagonist did not have any affection for her, I also felt that this girl was too strong, that is, she was not his girlfriend. I am a friend, but I like to be a girlfriend, and what I don't understand is why the protagonist asked Zhang Xiaomei to teach renting. This is a fair deal. I will give you a house, and you will pay the rent. If you don't pay the rent, you will leave. Is the protagonist's house so remote that no one can rent it? I feel that the author wanted to write about two people who have a good relationship, but it is very embarrassing to have a good relationship but not a relationship between boyfriend and girlfriend, especially the matter of pretending to be a boyfriend. It is handled well, but some people will find it difficult to accept such an old bloody plot. Third, regarding the description of the dream world, in the second world, to be honest, the role of the protagonist is really not big. I personally feel that it is just a Mary Sue halo. Everyone loves it and flowers bloom. It's nonsense that Li Shun has been obsessed with the protagonist for only a few days. Moreover, Li Shun's unification of the Central Plains will have nothing to do with the protagonist. I skipped reading about the nomadic envoy because the result was really embarrassing. To put it bluntly, it was It doesn't take any resourcefulness to blow up a meteorite and cause a torrent. It's really embarrassing. It feels like the author just wanted to write a touching scene but the description is not good enough. Especially decades later, he still misses a person he only chatted with for a few days. You might as well write that the protagonist left a lot of technology or ideas about water conservancy, agriculture, industry and commerce. Such valuable things are enough reasons for Li Shun to miss the protagonist, rather than relying on the author's embarrassing description. Third supplement, the third world of monsters is actually not very good. Except for a rabbit, the plot is really top-heavy. They meet at the beginning and then the protagonist learns the truth about the monsters. It takes too much ink. It only takes a few chapters. If you compare it with the previous descriptions, you will know how top-heavy it is. The summary is that the author is better at character creation, such as Li Shun, Zhang Erga and rabbits. To be honest, I really don't like the heroine. I haven't watched your devilish version of the Condor, for fear that your tsundere will be written as pampering. But the advancement of the plot and the ability to control it are not good. It is easy to describe too much in the front (but at the end it feels too bland and there is no plot of Gao Chao. I don't understand this aspect. I hope the author will pay attention to it. Fourth: The setting of the final boss I feel that the setting of this final boss is not good, it is too far away from the protagonist, the description is too unreal, and it feels a bit superfluous, especially in the Kung Fu dungeon where the author wants to write a complex time and space plot. To be honest, it is easy to lose control. What travels through the past determines the extraordinary beginning of the future.

I think the writing is pretty good, but I can't relate to the original plot.

Personally, I think that's why your book's performance is so poor. 1. The title of the book is not good, has no appeal, and is not relevant to the topic. 2. The introduction is not detailed and there are not enough points to buy. 3. The three golden chapters are not well written. It would be better to go straight to the topic. 4. There are reasons for writing style, but it cannot be improved all at once. 5. The most important thing is that you should not classify martial arts! Should go for sci-fi/time travel. 6. The copy should not be original. You can use the dream mode to write unlimited flow. Choose some popular copies to write. As long as you don't write too much, the results will be at least ten times better!

Don't rush, take your time, there may be something wrong with the system

Congratulations on the launch, first order support, thank you Shenlong!

Although I really want the author to make a big update, it is best to leave 5 to 10 chapters in the manuscript just in case of emergencies.

Why are there so many typos? Can't you just read it again and correct it? Every time I read it, I have to recognize which word it is, which is so laborious. . .

Are you sure the structure is designed?

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What about the new book? What about the new book? What about the new book? Hum╯^╰

What does Chapter 1 mean? Baffling? ?

Yes, many martial arts works exploded today

As mentioned, I read a little bit of the beginning, and I personally thought it was pretty smooth. I ordered two VIP chapters, the one about killing people in the dark night. It was okay, and I felt a bit like it. Maybe the beginning was a bit too wordy, and I didn't understand what story I wanted to tell. In addition, in the martial arts category, it may not be very suitable.

Duplicate

The author has watched The Movie King?

It will be on the shelves this Friday, and there should be another recommendation next week, maybe a strong recommendation, haha. Come on, save more manuscripts. Don't be like me, a salted fish, with high-speed rail station codes, 😭😭