Fuxian Asked

Cheers and tears, the Hua Qianlei combination will never give up

This will increase the protagonist's hatred value.

After reading the first two chapters, I feel that the protagonist is not the kind of person who only has hatred and no brains, which means that this article is not the kind of brainless and cool article. The word count is still short. I look forward to the author's follow-up performance. I hope that the villains and supporting characters will have online IQs in the future. Come on, author!

The plot of this book before entering the sect is basically fine, except for the bandit part which is far-fetched (the bandit is facing an immortal, and he expects the immortal to not know the person he is chasing, so he finds a young man's body to fool him, which is too risky, and he doesn't know when the protagonist will come back, so it would be more reasonable to write that the bandit leader and the protagonist go together). After entering the sect, the plot problems become bigger, as follows: The advantage of this plot is that grievances are complicated, and everyone has their own Xiao Jiujiu. This also makes the main line particularly troublesome. It is difficult to explain all aspects of cause and effect as the plot progresses. So this part gave me the feeling that the plot was a bit rushed and some of the logic was a bit confusing. I don't know if it was a pretense of mystery or if it really existed. For example, why did the former leader push the protagonist into muddy water? Knowing that all the disciples coveted treasures, he pushed a person who had been in contact with him under the eyes of everyone, and this person was something he admired; another example is that the protagonist has information about the former leader, most of them The targets of the division are all the treasures of the former boss. The plot should revolve around the protagonist's secret excavation, but the temptations of all forces are weak (except for the time when the Black Evil captured him). The protagonist's whereabouts are often out of control and no one pays attention to it. Furthermore, the character of the heroine is too weak. This is true for both Yun Lianxue and Caiyi. She fell in love early, has neither a strong personality nor a strong strength. Such a role is repetitive and useless, and the emotional line is unattractive. If Caiyi is given an undercover identity, no matter which force she is from, the relationship of enemy + lover will be more interesting than the relationship of a cultivation guide. There is also a bug: the protagonist's true energy turns yellow and cannot be felt by others. Although this setting is unique, it is a double-edged sword. When the elders around him with ulterior motives discover that he has mutated innate true energy and cannot feel it, this ability will definitely intensify their greed. It is recommended that he simply set it so that he has the ability to hide his true energy. It is normal at ordinary times. He hides himself and eats the tiger at critical times. It is recommended that the author tell the story more from the perspective of the protagonist and less from God's perspective, so as to increase the exploratory nature of the story and strengthen the protagonist's sense of crisis and urgency. A few final words: The writing, rhythm, and IQ of the characters in this book are very good, and it has the potential to be a big seller. However, as a new book for a newcomer, the previous content must be more refined, and strive to attract every reader who can spend money during the free period. It is a bit too much to say, and it is a bit nitpicking. If you understand that the author is biased, don't mind. If you stick to it, the results of this book will get better and better.

I have been entangled with the problem girl for so long, what kind of foreshadowing is there?

How can there be any intact eggs when the nest is overturned? This sect has such serious internal strife that it should have been destroyed long ago.

The author is my little brother, no one is allowed to bully him 🤓

Currently fully supported I want to talk about the background setting issue. If the world of cultivating immortals is always about the weak and the strong, intrigues and deceptions, betrayal becomes the theme and interest becomes the goal. Then just like the Guiyi Sect, it is impossible for the sect to exist for a long time. Even sects are unlikely to appear. This setting is unreasonable. Rules are the basis for the existence of a sect. The inheritance of a sect must have a core, and it cannot be lost in just one generation or two. People who cultivate immortality have a lifespan of hundreds. A core culture must be set for the sect to pass on. Otherwise, the whole background of cultivating immortals will seem too fake. Just like an enterprise, the reason why it can continue to develop is that it still makes profits. Let everyone work together and get what they need.

This article has ups and downs and is worth reading.

Hello, my name is Gu Tianle... I'm sorry that I went to the wrong set.

Hello, I'm Zha Zhahui... Emmmmm, I'm sorry that I walked into the wrong set.

This book is good and worth reading

Damn it, this beginning is so exciting. Come on, come on, I'll beat you up first and then talk 🤓🤓

This novel is well written and worth reading

The introduction is good, and it suits my taste. I haven't read Xianxia for several years. I'm fed up with the protagonists of fairy tales nowadays. This book goes against the routine and promotes positive energy. The introduction is good. I haven't read the content yet, so I'll leave a comment to support it. The title of the book has a certain dissuasive effect. When I first saw the title of the book, I was not prepared to read it. I thought it was another traditional book about cultivating immortals with killings. When I saw the introduction, my eyes lit up. I hope the author's writing is as eye-catching as the introduction.