Legend of Ming Ling

Not bad, very well written. I really envy people who can write such good articles.

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

The writing style is extraordinary, but if the segmentation can be more detailed, and the key dialogues and plots can be separated into separate paragraphs, it may be more effective.

The article is good, at least from the current point of view, I will save it first. But you wrote too much about the supporting characters in the first few chapters.

Some readers may not understand why the time traveler wants to destroy the protagonist, nor why the protagonist insists on beating the time traveler. I will explain it a little bit here. Let's talk about the protagonist Ren Poxiao and his brother who traveled through time. These two are twins, and of course they have a very good relationship. One is a genius (the protagonist), and the other is a born waste (his brother). One day, the protagonist and his brother suddenly transformed overnight, and their talents, temperament, and other aspects have improved several levels (from our perspective, it means that the soul has traveled through time), but from the perspective of the protagonist Come, he suspected that a certain powerful person had taken his brother's body, so he used various temptations and various methods to cut off the soul of that (powerful person:), in an attempt to rescue his real brother... This was the beginning of the battle between the protagonist and his brother, and the person who had traveled through time was not a good bird either. In fact, he wanted to kill the protagonist, which led to the pursuit in the first chapter. I didn't write about what happened to the protagonist and his brother earlier, but I will slowly write it out later in the form of memories.

You can send it out in a month. Save enough and save it before sending it out.

Respect👍 People who feel the same way, can't they write good books without traveling through time and being reborn?

Very well written. The foundation is very solid. But why do you feel that Ren Xingyu is so cruel and ruthless?