Travel Through Time and Become a Super Cute Little Loli

I read ten chapters, emmmmm... How should I put it? I hope that every book in Qidian has a scoring mechanism so that I won't waste my precious time.

Some are not very realistic, such as underage signing, learning to drive, etc.

Why do I feel like I am reading a composition I wrote when I was in elementary school?

There are too many games and too little life. It's boring to win dozens of games in a row.

Wow, I just saw the plot of Little Gangster, it is really poisonous. However, I can only read it without thinking. I hope the author will update it as soon as possible.

After reading two or three pages, I couldn't stand it anymore. I always felt like it was written by a primary school student! !

In fact, the author's writing is quite interesting I also think the style is quite good It's just that your update is a bit too different Looking forward to the author's update

The game process is not written in detail, and there is not much interaction with fans. The character dialogue feels very stiff, but the overall plot is not bad. . .

A twelve-year-old girl talks and acts like a little adult. The people around me are not weird at all

1. What is your main line? Is she a reborn loli anchor or something? 2. You are a fifth-year elementary school student. You think you are Conan, the dead elementary school student, and you still play detective. 3. The gold finger is opened too high, and it is estimated that it will collapse later.

Is this a sandbox novel? It's a bit fun...

The author has updated, keep up the good work 👍

Is it true that Bianwen authors who don't have a starting point in the system can't write? I want to beat people up.

It's beautiful, I hope the author doesn't want eunuchs

With more than a dozen chapters, I will share my feelings after reading it and some suggestions for the author: This book impressed me in three ways. First, the water chapter. I won't go into details here. Many authors have done this, including me, so this point can be ignored. 2. The two words that appear most often in this book are "direct". They appear too frequently, almost dozens of times in each chapter. . . It is recommended that the author change it and try to reduce the frequency of it, otherwise it will look uncomfortable. 3. Many of the sentences in this book don't make sense, giving me a strong feeling of awkwardness as if I were reading a primary school composition. I know that writing is not easy. It is not easy for the author to write more than 170 chapters. At least he wrote more than me. However, I still suggest that the author should make changes to make them smoother if he can, and read more about what others have written to sort out his ideas, at least not to have too many paragraphs that are not smooth. Writing is a process of thinking and perfecting "dreams". If you want your dream to become beautiful, you must try your best to perfect each chapter, otherwise your dream will turn into a nightmare! This is just a few words of wisdom to the author. After reading more than ten chapters of this book, I really can't stand it anymore. I'm afraid I won't know how to write a novel if I continue reading it! 😂 Author, you deserve recognition for your hard work, but your writing skills really need to be improved! I hope you can see it and work hard to improve your writing skills. Whose writing skills didn't slowly improve from a rookie? Although I am still a newbie, but, really, I think my writing skills can beat you by eight blocks at the moment. . . Don't repeat too many adjectives such as "direct". Finally, pay attention to making each chapter of the story as smooth as possible. Secondly, it can echo with the chapters written later. Write the real story! I believe you can do it, Oli! ! ! 🤭