Traveling Through Another World with the Heroic Spirit

Come on! If you read this article 2 years from now, you will be ashamed! The character's personality needs to be improved, so don't be in a hurry to produce followers! Cultivate feelings first! As soon as I was summoned, it felt like I had been there for a long time.

The author can search for the Noble Phantasms of other heroic spirits, or look up the weapons in mythology. To defeat a demon, you need the Lock of Heaven. You must know that the Lock of Heaven is a Noble Phantasm against gods, and a stronger chain against demons. Gil's King's Treasure is set to be the prototype of all Noble Phantasms, so there should be no shortage of Noble Phantasms against demons. If you can't think of using the Holy Sword and Divine Spear against the Noble Phantasm of demons, you can use it. Combined with Gil's Omniscient and Omnipotent Star Liberation, it will be a strong one.

In fact, I personally feel that the front is better than the back. You are writing FGO, so the heroic spirits are the soul of this work. From my personal point of view, what I want to see is how the author's heroic spirits affect the other world, rather than seeing how the protagonist is super god, how to kill, how to be unparalleled... Without the heroic spirits, what is the difference between the author's work and countless time-travel novels in the starting point? If you obliterate your biggest attraction, what else is there to focus on?

I want to say, why is it necessary to use the command spell to release the Noble Phantasm? Very strange, the author's own setting?

It feels so bland, there is no passion at all when the servant opens the Noble Phantasm.

A bit ridiculous. The protagonist knows that in a different world, he actually asks Jin Shining to help in various ways without protecting his own absolute safety, putting the protagonist in danger. This is not how you seek death!

Well, the author doesn't need to worry about powerful heroic spirits. Moreover, I feel that your initial combat power is too high. In the later stage, the expansion will make the main line unable to be recovered, and the positioning is a bit confusing.

Apart from the fact that it has a system that makes people want to give up, it is still very good. I decided to collect it and keep it first.

I think the main character can be more handsome in appearance.

I've read two chapters and it feels pretty good, I'm looking forward to it

Please don't impose your own level settings. If you don't write the level, you should be able to write more words, and we will feel comfortable watching it. Otherwise, who would read it if the level is all over the eyes?

Are you playing house? It's pale and feeble.

Of course, there are still ways to solve it, such as farming as a lord, although I feel that farming stories are boring. . . Of course, it's up to you, the author, to decide how to write. If you really can't write about daily life, write about the heroine, and then hand out dog food, of course, think twice before handing out dog food. Although I personally don't mind being abused, I may still lose fans. . . Probably, I'm responsible for watching anyway.

If you really want to write a battle novel, you can refer to King of Bones, change the novel into a group drama, and then describe the strength of the protagonist group from the side. Of course, I am a reader, and I can only give you suggestions for the author. The final choice is in your hands.

Inexplicably, I think the cover is the default cover of Fei Lu. I am hopeless...