One Foot Long Sword

Jiu Yao came to visit with "Rebirth of the Son of Bajie" and sent the collection to him. Looking forward to a return visit! ! !

Although it is not satisfactory, overall, it is still very good, and the author is not easy. Finally, congratulations on the completion

After reading the first chapter, I couldn't stand it anymore. Ahem, since I'm here, let me share my humble opinion here. First of all, the author's punctuation made me anxious. This is the most basic writing issue, and there is nothing to talk about. Regarding the use of punctuation marks, it is difficult to say it, but it is easy to say it is simple. To put it simply, as long as the person writing the article can basically use the combination of commas, periods, colons and quotation marks correctly, there will basically be no big problem. Secondly, and most importantly, the author commits a common mistake among junior writers when writing - always telling the background of the story in one breath. The consequence of this is that it exposes the author's lack of ability to control the article, which directly lowers the grade of the novel. The background introduction that lacks plot support (just like the author introduces the origins of the four major families) gives people the feeling that this is not a novel, but a summary of the story. It is recommended that the author fully dismantle the background and then integrate it into the specific plot. Do not introduce the background forcefully and dryly just to introduce the background, so as not to make people read boringly and inconsistently. Keep up the good work. 😊