Magical Blacksmith Shop

Personal opinion: The writing is quite good and the language is quite pertinent. Although there are some places that need to match the plot, some brainless elements are added. But compared to the content posted by many trolls, it is already considered elegant. It is worth learning from those who are impetuous.

I tried my best, but I still gave up. The first part was good, but the second part felt too different from the relaxed rhythm at the beginning. When I saw what the male protagonist did to the Tiandao Sect, I was speechless. I didn't have enough strength. Where did I have the confidence? In the chapter where the sect leader was taken away, I really couldn't stand it anymore, so I skipped to the end and gave up.

As a 12-year-old bookworm, I couldn't help myself and came over to complain. The front is not bad, it has a sense of familiarity with the "Gourmet Supplier" system. It's a pity that in the future, if you don't work hard, you have to wander around. I feel broken. I think this kind of article should be kept in the store, and occasionally go shopping to expand your horizons and map, and stop there. From blacksmithing, I see all kinds of things, and upgrade with peace of mind. From a small blacksmith, I slowly become famous, to become famous all over the world, and then to the top again. This is the mainstream and the focus. Reach the top with authority in the industry. It is no longer popular for system writers to forcefully slap people in the face. Tsundere and pretentiousness are the mainstream. Systematic writing is now more auxiliary. The protagonist keeps learning, practicing, and making progress. This is the right way. The system should be more like a mentor. I feel like I'm ruined by spending all day doing fantasy without doing my job. I hope the author will consider the plot issues carefully. Stop using such old routines, dragging first-rate creativity into second-rate plots, and then developing into third-rate routines through desperate means.

The transformation from human to immortality is due to military merit. The transformation from immortality to golden immortality is probably due to the merits of this reform? What happens after that? Is it a larger-scale battle between immortals and Buddhas to gain war wealth and accumulate forging experience? Or is there some kind of big crisis in the immortal mansion that requires the protagonist to increase the favorability of his father-in-law? This is not to say that such a plot is not good to watch. For example (without advertising, the popularity of this book is not needed), the plot of "The Strongest Gene" next door keeps reversing and reversing. Readers will applaud after each chapter, but when a big stage passes, they find that Jing has talked about some ways to solve the problem, and the character of the protagonist has not been shaped at all. , In retrospect, I will only feel that the protagonist has no other characteristics besides being smart, but "smart" applies to almost everyone with a brain. If Zhang Ye does not solve this crisis, there must be other Li Ye and Wang Ye who solve it. It is difficult for such a protagonist to impress readers, and it is easy to be confused with the plots in other novels. It is better to write something that only Zhang Ye can do, do well, and surprise readers. It is best to combine it with the unique setting of this book. Forging + alchemy can create an automatic alchemy cauldron. What about forging + formation? Is it possible to build a home monitoring security system that can automatically identify ourselves and the enemy, and show no mercy to the enemy and even seize and bury corpses? Just under the previous settings, artificial intelligence Jarvis and the like were mass-produced in minutes. What about forging + communication? At least get a liaison device to save Su Jin from getting married. The protagonist doesn't know it yet, and in the end he has to confront the heroine's power. It's like Qin Yu and Jiang Li in "Star Change"... There are also forging + entertainment, forging + mecha, and forging + Internet (Hey (⊙o⊙) it seems like something strange has gotten in). In short, it is slightly better than leaving the system aside to write a workplace drama in Tianjie. Of course, if there are other arrangements for the author's outline, forget it, it's just a suggestion. Don't criticize if you don't like it, forget it, it's okay if you want to criticize, I won't care anyway, I wish this book will get better and better. It has the same development potential as "The Library of Heaven's Path", at least in terms of name and setting, right? !

Cultivators can treat ordinary people as ants, but can such people also cultivate? If you practice the law without cultivating your mind, you will die from three disasters and five calamities without a burial place.

Give up decisively. Too stupid, serious signs of plagiarism

It's so poisonous... I'm about to vomit blood, red warning

Let's brainstorm together and come up with some suggestions for the author. Be open-minded!

For me personally, the first three chapters encourage me to quit.

By Chapter 61, I can't stand it anymore. The creativity is okay, the protagonist is not cool at all, there are many bugs in the whole text, and the description of the heroine and supporting characters is extremely weak and brainless.

After reading a little bit, I saw a harem trend and decisively gave up.

After reading three chapters, I really can't stand it anymore. The author is just mindless and unhappy.

It is extremely poisonous, I have been poisoned to death, and I will burn the paper if necessary.

Sure enough! We time-travelers without a system are really trash! There are thousands of system gods, They are all created by the great gods of China, Throw away everything that is useful or useless, A good man has traveled through time, My wife is separated and I still have to laugh, Traveling through the waste body for ten years, I turned over when I heard the jingle, Work hard to complete the task, Otherwise, Jiji will have to fall off. Don't bully my young man into being poor; In ten years I will rule the roost, If you don't believe me, just wait and see. I promise to climb to the top to show you!

Three golden chapters? No, I was persuaded to quit after just one chapter 😫😓

Many comments in the comments said that this book is good. Come and take a look. Well, it's good. After reading Chapter 19, let's read the book review again... Also, is it fun to read a book without complaining? Or something like a brain protein? Especially that sentence, you can do it, you can do it, it's amazing, 🐮bi, I don't know if you are studying or working!

Author, can you act like a normal person? I was persuaded to quit after four chapters. How can such a fool go out and cause trouble now?

The whole article is unreasonable and outrageous.

Three golden chapters, I despise them and leave.

This is not a time travel story, right? How do you know the system in a world without technology? Heifer flies on a plane

How did Dugu Ce improve his IQ to the late stage of foundation building 😰

The third one is poisonous. If you don't have any cultivation level, go to Hard Steel Monk. That's not how you seek death. You can't assassinate if you can't do it openly. There is no logic in the beginning and you give up. It's really poisonous.

I read the comments and was curious about how ugly it was. I read Chapter 2 and it's true.

The opening chapter is a disgusting routine of showing off and slapping someone in the face, bad review

Is it possible to cultivate to the inner sect without any xinxing? There is no logic in the setting. A plot against the protagonist pops up for no reason, just like the protagonist exterminates his three tribes. It is rubbish to deliberately create conflicts.

Typical retarded pretentious slap in the face text

This is a rubbish book. I am really convinced. What kind of author can write this book?

Only after reading Chapter 94 did I realize that the protagonist's name is Zhang Ye, not Zhang Zhi…

Every book is a eunuch, and Enemy of the Mysterious World is not finished yet

Why is everyone talking about poison? The author's thinking is clear, the logic is normal, there are no wrong sentences, and there are no typos. Well written