Fairyland Live

The writing is okay, but the style is not, too conflicting and far-fetched. If it is unreasonable, there will be no sense of involvement. Putting aside the irrationality with the outside world, the irrationality with the inside is far-fetched enough. Readers with some experience will not be able to stand it after the first chapter. It was a life-and-death duel at the beginning, and I had no idea what it was about. After the fight, I didn't immediately explain the background. An office worker in a suit, but not the infinitely terrifying Zheng Zha. Zheng Zha's first time travel was not that awesome. Even if the protagonist was given a cliched special forces background, it would be better than being super awesome without explaining anything at all. It's okay if it's poisonous, you can still test the poison. But this kind of inconsistent overnight dinner will make readers feel sick and force them to leave. There is a comment about why it is not popular, and he is right. I will not say more about what he said. Nowadays, there are not many novice readers who read books. The novices have all become adults, and at least they have double-digit bookshelf. When reading a book, you should look directly at the writing style, that is, how you feel and how engaging you are. Now that you have a recommendation, let's revise it carefully and not make major revisions. Novices should not write about time-travel and direct conflict scenes. In fact, it is the most difficult to write. Don't think that the cliché of slowly explaining time-travel is uninteresting, but the fact that it can become a routine means that it is a successful experience and is worth learning from. The works of many great masters are laid out in this way. Everyone wants to create conflict and surprise at the beginning, but not many masters do this? The risk at the beginning was too great, and if something went wrong it would be fatal. I originally wanted to leave after reading it, but then I saw the author thanking readers for their comments in the comments, so I wanted to leave a few words. Nothing else, just change the opening of this book and you can survive. Just add and change the beginning. There must be time to relax after the time travel. The time travel should not be exposed immediately. The background of the time travel should not be revealed, which will increase the attraction and sense of involvement. Of course, being discovered is also interesting, but the author has to decide which way is more interesting. The choice of this book is obviously wrong. A middle-aged soldier in a novice village knows that time travel cannot bring pleasure, so it is a failure. Add a background identity to the protagonist, a white-collar person who has potential but cannot be directly converted into force! What to do? Games are fine. If white-collar workers have time and money, they can install virtual reality games. If the protagonist often plays virtual games, he will have the means in the book, and the time on earth before time travel can be extended by several decades. With the advent of advanced technology, big bugs in suits can be covered up. Sicheng Butiao, how dare you, a white-collar worker with a protruding disc in the waist of your work chair all year round, say that? Suits have become super-technical things, and the materials have special functions. It would be unreasonable not to add red and blue buffs to the protagonist to become a super god. Also, ordinary white-collar knowledge of the earth does not have much advantage over the fairy world. If you change it to a super era, you can speak out boldly. Having so much experience in virtual fairy tales and fantasy games is definitely a huge knowledge advantage. Okay, it's too long and it's not easy to make. If the author sees it, leave a message. If you think you want to hear it, I'll say it again.

Thank you for your support, I will try my best to provide you with better plots, thank you.

Thank you for your support, I will try my best to provide you with better plots, thank you.

Let's recruit the characters in this book here. I will set them as important supporting roles, supporting roles, or supporting roles according to the situation. The format is as follows: Name: Number of layers: Cultivation: (roughly, will change according to the situation) Demonic Cow Talent: (optional) Affiliated forces: (East, West, North, South)

Thank you for your support, I will try my best to provide you with better plots, thank you.

Thank you for your support, I will try my best to provide you with better plots, thank you.

It seems pretty good so far, looking forward to the follow-up

The fighting scenes are so exciting, it's like being there.

The pace of the story is controlled very well

Chapters 65-70 looked confused.

What about live broadcast? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?

There is this word in the author's introduction: "counseled", which is probably influenced by the Internet. In fact, this word mostly means to be sincere, not to be afraid. It is recommended to use this word: 😠 To illiterate authors

Come on, the more you write, the better. The only drawback is that two movies a day are not enough to watch. I want to see Shao Weili as soon as possible!

Seeing now, it feels like chatting and trading in Wanjie instead of live streaming in Immortal Realm.

There are a lot of novels nowadays, so readers look for novels either through recommendations or lists, or by searching for keywords such as live broadcasts, such as systems, such as cultivating immortals, etc. I won't talk about the first two, let's talk about search. People who search are generally people who like to read this type of search. For example, I like live broadcasts and found your book. After looking at the results, there are very few live broadcasts. Then I must be disappointed and abandon the book decisively. This is also the reason for the poor results. Since you have this name, you have to write around it, otherwise you will not be able to retain people.

Waiting for updates, die-hard fans will come to report

The author is very good. Is this your first time writing a book? Doesn't look like a new author.

After reading the first few chapters, I thought that the problem children came from another world. It's a pity that the protagonist did not return to Izayoi nb.

I watched several live broadcasts but no one showed up.