Fairyland Gungun

The beginning is very grand, and the pits dug are not bad, but the later stages must be controlled well, otherwise it will be easy to mess up.

The beginning is very grand, and the pits dug are not bad, but the later stages must be controlled well, otherwise it will be easy to mess up.

It's rare to see a fairy tale novel that suits my taste, so I couldn't help but leave a comment. I hope the author can forgive me for any rudeness. This book is really good, and the storyline is also cleverly set up. A girl who was killed by a bookshelf travels to the world of immortality. Such a setting can attract readers' attention. The collision of modern thoughts and the consciousness of the immortal world is enough to burst out many wonderful ideas, and the author does not disappoint. The ingenious conception, suspenseful plot, and nuanced Character portrayal, these are the advantages of this book, but the purpose of my comment this time is not to write about the advantages of this book, because the advantages are obvious, so I won't go into details about this. I want to make some suggestions to the author, and I don't know whether they are appropriate or not. I hope the author doesn't mind. The starting point of my suggestions is because I like this book so much and want to make this book more perfect. First, try to write things that are related to the main plot, and don't waste too much time on side details. For example, the incident of Baicai's murder should be explained, but it should not be too many words. Otherwise, it will dilute the protagonist. All plots should still be written around Chu Xingmo. Omit other things as much as you can, and don't be greedy for more when you can write less; secondly, since Chu Xingmo came from time travel, it should be more or less connected with modern knowledge. Otherwise, this time travel will not have much meaning. It is better to just write about how smart this girl is! Therefore, my personal suggestion is to briefly explain what Chu Xingmo did in the past, and then use modern thinking to deal with some thorny issues in the world of immortals. This will make it easier for readers to find a sense of involvement. Of course, the above two suggestions are just my personal opinions and may not be correct. The author can just decide what to do. In short, I have collected them and will read them every day. I hope the author will write well. Come on!