Overall good. The word count of 220,000 looks very relaxed and the writing is delicate. But I still feel that something is missing in the relationship-building process. It stands to reason that 200,000 words is enough when there is no big plot line, but the author over-exaggerates the expression in many places, the rhetorical density is too high, and many minor emotions and details are expanded into some major propositions. This kind of expression is brilliant if it appears in one or two places, but if it is too much, it will appear a bit redundant, and it will lead to expression > narrative, which to a certain extent compresses the space for plot and emotional foreshadowing. The emotional progression of the two protagonists therefore seems a bit hasty, and some key turns lack sufficient process support, making the establishment of the relationship slightly abrupt in the reading experience.
The sister fetishist feels more sorry for his sister during the reading process, and the article is relatively short. Other than that, there's nothing wrong with it. The writing is pretty good, and it's free. I'd love to read and write more!
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