Personal Scanning Records (Abandoned Documents)

1 回 Echo[infinite] Freeze SupermanDanmei (BL)1.7M WordsCompleted 95.8kFavorites79.3kClicks/ch199.3kNutrition

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I read in the newspaper that the character design of the main character in the storyline is embarrassing, the emotional line is too deliberate, the identity of the boss is very casual, and the speed from being exposed to being arrested is very fast and low. The word "monster with murderous intent" appears too many times. It can be seen that the author wants to create a character. Obviously, the author does not have the strength to write this character, and the villain character is too simple. Oh and also, the protagonist's subsequent efforts to save the villain are disgusting. Is the character of the protagonist in the first dungeon the same as in the later ones?

2 再 If You Don't Win the Championship, You Will Inherit Hundreds of Billions of Wealth. Tianyu ZhaohuiDanmei (BL)1.6M WordsCompleted 56.4kFavorites71.6kClicks/ch168.1kNutrition

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The training game was well written, so I insisted on reading it. But I really don't like the handling of Xiao Xuechen's life experience, or the family relationship aspect. It seems reasonable for my uncle to raise my baby after my parents died, but I always feel that this is no different from surrogacy, except that the difference between using a stranger's womb and that of my biological sister is that. So I was also very tired of the plot where the uncle kept preventing the protagonist from skiing from the beginning. In order to highlight the relationship between nephew and uncle, the author subsequently spent a lot of words writing about the uncle's concern that the interaction between the protagonist and the two nominal fathers was boring. Because I always feel that this is glorified surrogacy... The author needs a child to be the protagonist, so the plot arranges for the protagonist's parents to die early, which is really awkward. When I was following the serialization, I happened to catch up on the running accounts of my nephew's exchanges, so I abandoned the article. After half a year, I finished reading the main text and finished reading the game. Overall, the game can be scored at 9.5 Points, and the nephew line is deducted by 4 points. In competitive writing, I just want to see the protagonist push his limits.

4 艾 Abby's Easter Egg Zhen LiziRomance536k WordsCompleted 74.9kFavorites180.8kClicks/ch102kNutrition

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Although the article is relatively early, there is no obligation to tolerate it. The audition story Solitaire made me sick to my stomach. First of all, the plot doesn't stand up. How did the heroine smooth out the relationship and get a private room? Why did the heroine go to jail? Why did the heroine appear just when Diaosi No. 2 Was about to be fucked by the prison guard? Why does the plot have to weaken the heroine's physical strength? The advancement of the plot relies purely on running accounts, which does not reflect the strength of the heroine at all. Also, when the prison guard molested the heroine, why was the heroine so sure that giving the film a Band-Aid would make No. 2 Soft-hearted and "save" her? What, it all depends on the halo of the heroine, right? Then he kept giving charm to the loser No. 2, What kind of black-backed cub/so handsome... There was also a description of the expression the heroine made before the audition, and then the man in the assault suit thought it was lethal and didn't care... Later, there was also a description of the heroine's cute wink after observing the female characters No. 3 And 4... What on earth was she cute about... In the first chapter, the heroine even killed a person alone, but as a result, she started to reduce her combat effectiveness when entering the main text, and kept staring at the heroine, right? Does this count as tricking readers into killing them... [Rolls eyes]

8 满 A Max-Level Commander Rescues People Online [Hologram] Crazy DogRomance471k WordsCompleted 523Favorites230Clicks/ch1.3kNutrition

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This one is even more disgusting and can be called vicious. The author can't wait to package the heroine as a gift and send it to the bed of any male character who can be named, and then seize the heroine to play the role himself. Although she is a full-level commander, one-on-one battles with the male protagonist rely on plug-ins; although the female protagonist has made investigating the cause of her brother's death a daily routine, she was exhausted after meeting the male protagonist. She fell naked in the bathroom while on a business trip and was rescued by the male protagonist. The female protagonist did not feel guilty. Why are you so embarrassed? But it turns out that you are embarrassed to be wearing a suspender when you play the role of an anchor. You, the author, have really worked hard for the male protagonist. You want to make the male protagonist not obscene and the female protagonist be virtuous. [Rolls eyes] What about the brother who arranges for the wife to be kidnapped later? Can't you write about childhood sweethearts? Can't we write about the mutual sympathy between masters who fell in love with each other at first sight? Oh, actually the author just wanted an excuse to satisfy her sexual fetish. In the game, you can say that it is for the mastermind behind the scenes, but outside the game, the scene where the three of them ride a motorcycle together, with the heroine sitting in the middle, is really weird. The female protagonist's chest is pressed against the male protagonist's good brother's back, and her hair rubs against the male protagonist's chin. The two of them are in a different mood, but the female protagonist is completely unaware... Where is the shame of facing various female anchors changing clothes for live broadcast? [Rolling eyes][Rolling eyes][Rolling eyes][Rolling eyes][Rolling eyes] Are these things related to the main plot? There is a threshold for being a protagonist these days, okay, I'm really convinced...