After reading it, the primary school Chinese teacher clapped his hands and applauded it for a good composition that fully explained the cause, process and result.
The second half of the meal is tasteless and would be a pity to throw away. It's not for the black eggs, I can't see a little bit of it. You have to explain the emotional line yourself. I can only say that you work diligently, but you don't have to. If you don't know how to write, write less. Also, I really feel uncomfortable with the way some authors break the fourth wall. That's the article, not your home. Don't just start chatting with readers. Every time I see it, I feel like I have been in the "demon world" for a long time and suddenly fell into the author's bedroom. It's very funny.
A small walk can be written in hundreds or thousands of words, but I can't read it in minutes or even seconds because I have a disease that will kill me if I don't follow the plot.