I couldn't find the book I wanted to read recently, so I had to write it myself.
If the writing is not good, please give me feedback.
The heroine is very strong and has super powers. This article is a slow read, so don't read if you don't like it.
Reader comments
☆I am not an onion for you to peel----Campus Chapter☆
This is the second time I have read Diandian's article. There seemed to be a school article "Dancer with Wings" before. It had very few words, but it mainly wrote about Latin dance, and it felt relatively green. Although "I'm Not an Onion for You to Peel" is marked as an urban chapter this time, it is still a campus chapter. The relationship between the two does not seem to be strong enough. There is no small ambiguity and no small passion, which makes people feel like it is tasteless. Take for example the first time you wrote about being kidnapped. I feel that it doesn't do much harm to the heroine, and it's not enough to make the heroine have a strong desire to transform. What is the relationship between the hero and the heroine should be explained. What role does Li Xiaoran play in the story? They are all written in a vague way, which makes people feel very vague and without a clear impression. There is a lot of dialogue description, but it cannot fully describe the characteristics of the mission. . . . . .
Of course, everything has two sides, and there will definitely be advantages and disadvantages. First of all, the title of the article is very unique, and it looks like a funny article at first glance; second, the large number of dialogues in the article incorporate a lot of Internet words, which has a certain sense of humor and is very fresh; third, some of the ideas in the article are very novel, such as the house numbers of the roommates, and the ordinary heroine going to the Shaolin Temple to learn martial arts, etc.
The author should always be clear about the center of his work, and some development around the center can set up small suspense in each chapter to attract readers. The road of writing is not difficult, but it is not easy either. Especially for small clear prose, it is necessary to show the author's writing skills, which requires the author's own reading and writing abilities. By browsing most of the urban romances on Jinjiang. Com, we can see that your clicks and collections are not high, but as a novice, you should think about why you write articles, is it for profit? Or is it for a dream or an attempt of yours? If you can take into account your original intention of writing an article, you will not be obsessed with how much you will earn today, or if your income has not increased.
I hope the author can be inspired by my comments and write better articles! I'm also looking forward to your urban chapter, and I'm looking forward to writing you a long review of the urban chapter.
Dear~ It's so scary, it's gone. I'll urge you to follow,
Well written, I look forward to your next plot!
The name is a bit weird... You shouldn't use the word "monster". If the heroine is a fox demon, you can use "monster fox", and "cat demon" can also be replaced with "monster cat"...
It's a bit stuck when using monsters~
Also, when writing the article, can Zuoqi not communicate too much with the heroine? I see it's a bit hard and there are some behaviors that occupy the word count~
Also, it is very hard to write in the first person. If possible, I suggest that the author use the third person! Also, you can describe more scenery and so on. The heroine has too many inner thoughts.
☆I am not an onion for you to peel----Campus Chapter☆ This is the second time I have read Diandian's article. There seemed to be a school article "Dancer with Wings" before. It had very few words, but it mainly wrote about Latin dance, and it felt relatively green. Although "I'm Not an Onion for You to Peel" is marked as an urban chapter this time, it is still a campus chapter. The relationship between the two does not seem to be strong enough. There is no small ambiguity and no small passion, which makes people feel like it is tasteless. Take for example the first time you wrote about being kidnapped. I feel that it doesn't do much harm to the heroine, and it's not enough to make the heroine have a strong desire to transform. What is the relationship between the hero and the heroine should be explained. What role does Li Xiaoran play in the story? They are all written in a vague way, which makes people feel very vague and without a clear impression. There is a lot of dialogue description, but it cannot fully describe the characteristics of the mission. . . . . . Of course, everything has two sides, and there will definitely be advantages and disadvantages. First of all, the title of the article is very unique, and it looks like a funny article at first glance; second, the large number of dialogues in the article incorporate a lot of Internet words, which has a certain sense of humor and is very fresh; third, some of the ideas in the article are very novel, such as the house numbers of the roommates, and the ordinary heroine going to the Shaolin Temple to learn martial arts, etc. The author should always be clear about the center of his work, and some development around the center can set up small suspense in each chapter to attract readers. The road of writing is not difficult, but it is not easy either. Especially for small clear prose, it is necessary to show the author's writing skills, which requires the author's own reading and writing abilities. By browsing most of the urban romances on Jinjiang. Com, we can see that your clicks and collections are not high, but as a novice, you should think about why you write articles, is it for profit? Or is it for a dream or an attempt of yours? If you can take into account your original intention of writing an article, you will not be obsessed with how much you will earn today, or if your income has not increased. I hope the author can be inspired by my comments and write better articles! I'm also looking forward to your urban chapter, and I'm looking forward to writing you a long review of the urban chapter.
Dear~ It's so scary, it's gone. I'll urge you to follow,
Well written, I look forward to your next plot!
The name is a bit weird... You shouldn't use the word "monster". If the heroine is a fox demon, you can use "monster fox", and "cat demon" can also be replaced with "monster cat"... It's a bit stuck when using monsters~ Also, when writing the article, can Zuoqi not communicate too much with the heroine? I see it's a bit hard and there are some behaviors that occupy the word count~ Also, it is very hard to write in the first person. If possible, I suggest that the author use the third person! Also, you can describe more scenery and so on. The heroine has too many inner thoughts.