After Reaching a Consensus with the Protagonist,

What are you doing in the last few chapters [question mark] Are you anxious to end it?

There are so many things I want to say. After reading this, I really feel sorry for the two of them, especially Xiao Xu. How could a child have such a hard life? Rather than being a star, I hope he can do a career that he likes more. Being the chief in the original world is really touching. [Crying] Because it is a full subscription, I want to say more, and there will be some spoilers later! The full text is bland when you read it. You can tell that the author is trying very hard to complete the story he wants to say. However, sometimes, some parts are not told very well. Some storylines can obviously be written with more conflict and arouse emotions, but it ends with a bland sentence, like only drinking soup without eating meat. There are also many unfluent and unreasonable things in some dialogues. On the other hand, if it can be revised, I believe it will be better. For example, the emotional line in the front changes too abruptly. I don't understand why I fell in love all of a sudden. It is not well written, but gives people a sense of chaos that I can't understand. In the middle period, Xiaoyan forces himself to be cold after falling in love, and then changes his attitude. The writing is also very abrupt, giving people a feeling of, ah, what the hell? It feels like I'm doing something (ah, I feel like I've been exhausted by Xiao Xu's slight sense of anger), and in some places, the connection is very stiff. For example, during the Cold War, it could be more conflicting. Xiao Xu is too indifferent no matter what. In the early stage, I was given an emotional doll with the anger stripped away. It shouldn't be like this. There are things about Xiao Xu that are more worth writing about. Correspondingly The same thing happened to Xiao Yan, and the arrangement of amnesia is unnecessary in my opinion... Because it has no impact on emotions and career, so it is very unnecessary to arrange this. Alas, it can be written as bloody, but unnecessary bloody writing will cause heart attack. The existence of the original protagonist Gong feels like it is unnecessary to background it. In fact, I think his scenes are okay No matter how hard you work, I think it will be very touching if Xiao Yan confronts him and teaches him a lesson. The venomous young master and the financial sponsor bow his head for love, and he is a pure and sensual male who is the former, chief and back star. He is a very touching character, but why does he seem a bit uncomfortable (in reflection) It is really miserable for Xiao Xu. He is always inexplicably hacked in his career, and he can be really hacked. Obviously Xiao Yan and He They are always there... I feel that this world is controlled by the audience, and capital is of no use, and Xiao Xu is inexplicably blamed for his original life (so powerless), and is forced to leave due to plot manipulation, and his amnesic face is scarred (hopefully healed). What's more, what I care about is that Xiao Xu's parents are actually still alive in the original world, and I'm quite cut off. I couldn't let go of this. I thought that Xiao Xu would wake up from the novel and return to the original world to meet Xiao Yan again (what a pity). It was really good emotionally, and I really liked the interaction. I still liked Xiao Xu and Xiao Yan after reading it, and the fact that the plot can control people is amazing. Sometimes it seems like you don't care, and the key points are all there. That's it. The arrangement is very special, because it seems that only one friend and Xiao Xu are being manipulated. The original work is really good at picking people. I think it can be improved on this point. Someone should find out about plot manipulation. Regarding Xiao Yan, I think it is too fragmented. Emotionally, words and actions are not right, but I believe you can do better [Come on]