Song Qingyuan traveled to an extremely strange world, where she had the same name and face as in the real world. But it seems like she shouldn't be alive...
Shen Zezhou recalled her appearance in all the time and space in the past. He missed her again and again, but it was clear that he was only one step away from saving her, and was only one step away from being perfect without any regrets. However, fate plays tricks on people, their fates are constantly entangled, and jokes follow them everywhere.
The silk threads are entangled layer by layer, and the clouds and lights flicker and fade. In this splendid but cold and spacious palace, she was wearing a white gauze skirt, her eyes lowered and her lips pursed, as quiet as a statue. He just stood at the door of the palace with his sword in his arms, smiling unceremoniously: "These threads are really distressing. It would be difficult to cut them without me!"
Looking back at dusk, a breeze blew by, the clouds and lanterns turned, the candles flickered, and the past disappeared. The two join hands to welcome the next tomorrow.
[This article is a big HE! !
Intention: Achieve oneself through mutual redemption
The cover is a little sloppy (I haven't figured out how to do it yet... Hh) Sorry
Intention: time travel, redemption
Reader comments
First of all, the author's imagination is very good. After reading 6 chapters, I can feel that the author's writing skills are quite good, he has a certain foundation, and the characters' behaviors and dialogues are very smooth. However, as a "well-read" novelist, I have a little suggestion. Whether you accept it or not depends entirely on the author himself.
The first is characterization. As the core character of the entire novel, the creation of the heroine is very important. As a clear but not stupid-looking female college student, her portrayal after the murder is a bit dull. Some physiological reactions such as tinnitus, vomiting, etc. Can be appropriately added to make her appear more "live". No matter how many lives she has had, or how complicated her love and hatred are, at least now she is just an ordinary girl. Panic and confusion are her normal reactions when she suddenly comes to a completely unfamiliar environment, and this can be used to increase the description of the character. For example, when she first discovers that the heroine has lost her memory, there is a strange feeling of loss and relief. This can increase the characterization and make the death of the subsequent characters more impactful. Atmospheric description is also a part of character creation. Snow naturally has a kind of oppression and silence. You can use the sudden increase in danger to create a tense hunting atmosphere, and you can also use the coldness brought by the delicate light snow to further heighten the sadness of the character's death. This is all a little experience accumulated by me, which can be greatly adopted by the author.
Second is the plot. In just 5 chapters, the journey from the appearance to the death seems a little too rushed, it is almost like a very fast version of the chase. Leaving a little time for the characters to adapt and explore the environment, and leaving a little chance for the readers to understand the characters can introduce your world view more naturally. At the beginning of the novel, maybe adding some memories or communication with the male protagonist before the heroine has time travel would make it seem more consistent? But this is pretty good.
Finally, there is my personal opinion, that is, multi-segmentation. Long paragraphs of text can bring a silent oppression to readers, and some people may feel uncomfortable with this. Breaking out some psychological descriptions and key lines into separate paragraphs can significantly reduce this pressure and make the reading experience more comfortable. Of course, I also agree with using this method to express the tension and urgency of the plot. You can decide how to segment it according to your own ideas.
There is still a little bit of my own miscellaneous thoughts and xp left. I actually like the confrontation between the heroine and herself in Chapter 4 and the question of "who am I?" In various past and present novels, whether one can be treated as a person with or without memory has always been an enduring question. The protagonist's exploration of who is me and what is not me has always been very attractive to me, so I am actually looking forward to seeing how the author will deal with this issue later. I also like the feeling of family affection between the heroine and Chen. Every time I see this kind of family affection, I feel better. Sometimes it even attracts me more than the main character.
In short, I look forward to the author continuing to write this article, and I am also very curious about the subsequent development of this article. Come on, madam!
First of all, the author's imagination is very good. After reading 6 chapters, I can feel that the author's writing skills are quite good, he has a certain foundation, and the characters' behaviors and dialogues are very smooth. However, as a "well-read" novelist, I have a little suggestion. Whether you accept it or not depends entirely on the author himself. The first is characterization. As the core character of the entire novel, the creation of the heroine is very important. As a clear but not stupid-looking female college student, her portrayal after the murder is a bit dull. Some physiological reactions such as tinnitus, vomiting, etc. Can be appropriately added to make her appear more "live". No matter how many lives she has had, or how complicated her love and hatred are, at least now she is just an ordinary girl. Panic and confusion are her normal reactions when she suddenly comes to a completely unfamiliar environment, and this can be used to increase the description of the character. For example, when she first discovers that the heroine has lost her memory, there is a strange feeling of loss and relief. This can increase the characterization and make the death of the subsequent characters more impactful. Atmospheric description is also a part of character creation. Snow naturally has a kind of oppression and silence. You can use the sudden increase in danger to create a tense hunting atmosphere, and you can also use the coldness brought by the delicate light snow to further heighten the sadness of the character's death. This is all a little experience accumulated by me, which can be greatly adopted by the author. Second is the plot. In just 5 chapters, the journey from the appearance to the death seems a little too rushed, it is almost like a very fast version of the chase. Leaving a little time for the characters to adapt and explore the environment, and leaving a little chance for the readers to understand the characters can introduce your world view more naturally. At the beginning of the novel, maybe adding some memories or communication with the male protagonist before the heroine has time travel would make it seem more consistent? But this is pretty good. Finally, there is my personal opinion, that is, multi-segmentation. Long paragraphs of text can bring a silent oppression to readers, and some people may feel uncomfortable with this. Breaking out some psychological descriptions and key lines into separate paragraphs can significantly reduce this pressure and make the reading experience more comfortable. Of course, I also agree with using this method to express the tension and urgency of the plot. You can decide how to segment it according to your own ideas. There is still a little bit of my own miscellaneous thoughts and xp left. I actually like the confrontation between the heroine and herself in Chapter 4 and the question of "who am I?" In various past and present novels, whether one can be treated as a person with or without memory has always been an enduring question. The protagonist's exploration of who is me and what is not me has always been very attractive to me, so I am actually looking forward to seeing how the author will deal with this issue later. I also like the feeling of family affection between the heroine and Chen. Every time I see this kind of family affection, I feel better. Sometimes it even attracts me more than the main character. In short, I look forward to the author continuing to write this article, and I am also very curious about the subsequent development of this article. Come on, madam!
Nice! ! Looking forward to a big update! ?????
Madam, do you want to update this?
"" Is a big thorn in the side of the author~