The male protagonist is a famous pharmacist in city A. He is willing to die for the female protagonist even though he knows that the female protagonist poisoned him. However, the female protagonist regards the male protagonist as a bully.
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Okay, come on, kid
Okay, come on, kid
The connection doesn't feel very good. I just need to improve the connection part. It feels a bit ordinary at the beginning. I think it would be better if I could learn from other novels and revise it. The language feels a bit straightforward and monotonous.
Personally, I feel that the dual perspective is a bit difficult to understand. You can write about the identity of the heroine at the beginning, leaving doubts about the direction of the story. There are more plot directions.
The writing is quite good, but I just need to save a few chapters before posting them. This way it will attract more viewers.
Then my suggestion is that it would be better to post it like this if there are more than ten w words.
It's good-looking, but some sentences feel a bit direct and not so smooth. In this case, I'm afraid you won't be able to write as much follow-up content. You can be a little more pretentious, but it's very attractive. I really want to continue reading. I look forward to updates.
Okay, come on, kid
Okay, come on, kid
The connection doesn't feel very good. I just need to improve the connection part. It feels a bit ordinary at the beginning. I think it would be better if I could learn from other novels and revise it. The language feels a bit straightforward and monotonous.
Personally, I feel that the dual perspective is a bit difficult to understand. You can write about the identity of the heroine at the beginning, leaving doubts about the direction of the story. There are more plot directions.
The writing is quite good, but I just need to save a few chapters before posting them. This way it will attract more viewers.
Then my suggestion is that it would be better to post it like this if there are more than ten w words.
It's good-looking, but some sentences feel a bit direct and not so smooth. In this case, I'm afraid you won't be able to write as much follow-up content. You can be a little more pretentious, but it's very attractive. I really want to continue reading. I look forward to updates.
Okay, come on, kid