The world-weary and self-abandoned Gong Yanci vs. The naive and ignorant lotus flower demon flower plant——Nurturing lovers and healing lovers
Yan Ci: Did you raise a wife for yourself?
Huazhi: I want to save my lover!
Huazhi is an innocent and ignorant lotus demon. When she met Yan Ci in her incarnation, she wanted to follow Yan Ci and learn about human rules.
The stern words of mortals who died tragically in three lifetimes met the illiterate and ignorant lotus demon Huazhi.
In a moment of soft-heartedness, the poisoned Yan Ci decided to teach the illiterate demon for a while in the last year of his life.
Suddenly, Yan Ci was distracted by being told that he was the emperor of the immortal world. Hua Zhi was envious and thought that he was close to a great god. Unexpectedly, Yan Ci severely denied it: "I am not an emperor, and I don't want to be an emperor!"
However, after spending many days together, Hua Zhi's heart moved and she climbed into bed to express her love, but was rejected ruthlessly.
Small Theater: Late one night, Hua Zhi secretly climbed onto Yan Ci's bed, but was kicked off by him.
Yan Ci looked at the flowers and plants on the ground:? ? ?
Huazhi looked at Yan Ci on the bed:? ? ?
Finally, Yan Ci returned from rebirth and watched helplessly as Hua Zhi followed the emperor who looked exactly like him without even looking at him. Yan Ci became anxious and climbed onto Hua Zhi's bed, but was kicked out of bed by Hua Zhi. Yan Ci asked in disbelief: "Is it because I'm not an emperor?"
Intention: Love the common people and the world.
Reader comments
Teacher, I have finished reading these six chapters, and then I will give you some suggestions~
1. It is best to write some supporting characters at the beginning of the novel. Slowly transition from the description of the protagonist to the scene about the supporting characters to lay the groundwork. This will make it easier for the following plot to unfold and make people more interested in reading. Moreover, supporting characters are also important to highlight an idea or theme of your entire article. Of course, if there is no such thing, just pretend I didn't say it. It can also serve as a sense of humor.
2. The interaction between the protagonists is a bit bland and not very eye-catching. It's good to make this joke when we meet, but the teacher's writing is very short and bland, and it doesn't hit the public's point of enjoyment. Naturally, there is no desire to continue reading. The teacher can also write some humorous plots. For example, Yan Ci told Hua Zhi to stay here for me. I think the teacher can add a scene where Yan Ci draws a circle around Hua Zhi with a sword to scare him and prevent him from coming out (this is just my brain, Hua Zhi is cute)
3. The character of the protagonist is not established at the beginning. If you just read these six chapters, I think it is a bit difficult to summarize Gong Shou's character. It is mainly about language, expression and so on. There are no very distinctive characteristics. This is especially obvious for Yan Ci.
The above are some of my suggestions. They are purely my own opinions, not criticism. I hope the author can consider them based on his own situation. Also, the flower plants written by Xiaozhou are really cute. I want to rua [spread flowers]
Xiao Huazhi is worried about Yan Cizhong (holding handkerchief [Rainbow Fart]
I like this tough-mouthed plant()
Coming! ! ! Throwing thunder first [dog head holding rose in mouth] I like this one so much! ! !
Teacher, I have finished reading these six chapters, and then I will give you some suggestions~ 1. It is best to write some supporting characters at the beginning of the novel. Slowly transition from the description of the protagonist to the scene about the supporting characters to lay the groundwork. This will make it easier for the following plot to unfold and make people more interested in reading. Moreover, supporting characters are also important to highlight an idea or theme of your entire article. Of course, if there is no such thing, just pretend I didn't say it. It can also serve as a sense of humor. 2. The interaction between the protagonists is a bit bland and not very eye-catching. It's good to make this joke when we meet, but the teacher's writing is very short and bland, and it doesn't hit the public's point of enjoyment. Naturally, there is no desire to continue reading. The teacher can also write some humorous plots. For example, Yan Ci told Hua Zhi to stay here for me. I think the teacher can add a scene where Yan Ci draws a circle around Hua Zhi with a sword to scare him and prevent him from coming out (this is just my brain, Hua Zhi is cute) 3. The character of the protagonist is not established at the beginning. If you just read these six chapters, I think it is a bit difficult to summarize Gong Shou's character. It is mainly about language, expression and so on. There are no very distinctive characteristics. This is especially obvious for Yan Ci. The above are some of my suggestions. They are purely my own opinions, not criticism. I hope the author can consider them based on his own situation. Also, the flower plants written by Xiaozhou are really cute. I want to rua [spread flowers]
Xiao Huazhi is worried about Yan Cizhong (holding handkerchief [Rainbow Fart]
I like this tough-mouthed plant()
Coming! ! ! Throwing thunder first [dog head holding rose in mouth] I like this one so much! ! !