A mysterious girl——Long Haoxue, returned to Japan with his half-brother and good friend Xue Wu, but she, the new Hyokui, had a close relationship with him.
Qingxue is very familiar with the main candidate of Rikkai University.
Having lived in the shadow of the family since childhood, with a mother who died young and no care from relatives, will such a person be happy?
Reader comments
The heroine is prone to cheating, and I really look forward to such a heroine becoming stronger and stronger.
Why can't I post it? Why can't I post it? I'm not calm...
Girl, I'm just a simple reader.
I'm just telling you what I think, and please forgive me if I'm offended.
I just saw what you said in Readers Have Something to Say, "I like to express what I want to express through dialogue." But you really didn't achieve this goal. Maybe you have a rough grasp of the situation in your mind, but as a reader, you really don't have the ability to think about it so powerfully...
First thought...
For example, we can look at how many "Xiaochenchen", how many "hahaha" and how many ellipses there are in this chapter...
Maybe when these words appear once or twice, no one reacts, but when they appear many times...
Do you think this is a simple "expression?"
Although I think writing is just for my own enjoyment and telling a story for everyone to hear. However, these dialogues seem a bit... [Don't Hit Me While Holding the Lid of the Pot] is tasteless. It neither introduces anything nor makes people understand anything from it. It is just too ordinary dialogue.
"Have you eaten?"
"Eat."
"Hahahahahaha."
"..... True."
This metaphor is a bit poisonous... [Continues to hold head]
I read from the beginning to the chapter you are writing now, maybe because there are too many dialogues, so I basically read a third of each chapter, and then I skimmed through it. [I have this problem with reading. I am impatient, not very careful, and read ten lines at a time.] I want to say that there is no event that particularly attracts readers, or——
By the way, I remembered that if you like the current style very much, why not study Japanese word games... For example, love games, such as the Queen of Darkness Gaiden I played this morning. This one has a lot of dialogue and psychological description, but it makes people want to understand this matter from beginning to end. I have to complain about your copywriting here, because it is really not good... If you can give a brief summary, will it help people understand what you are going to write about, instead of just making a wild statement... Hmm, I didn't think of this word... Anyway, that's it.
Second thought
When I look at the characterization, I think Chen Chen is quite good at it. In my opinion, she is a very boring, low-key, and calm girl. It's just that I'm often troubled by the word "helpless"... Haha.
I am a person who is incapable of accepting names [due to my personal constitution, from a distance]. When I saw these names, I was really a little confused... I am trying to recite them... But I remember Yiran... I like them very much. This is the Shenma principle——
Hey, maybe I really am the legendary supporting character Controller, Wangtian.
Third thought
There are many girls in JJ. Although everyone has their own preferences, everyone agrees on the writing style.
So, girl, please come on, make a fist.
Just my personal thoughts...
If you want to vomit, you can try a more powerful vomit...
If you want to narrate an event, consider borrowing the refreshing writing style of the girls in the romance group.
If you want to build a perfect world in your mind, you might as well study the QD style... It doesn't matter if there are too many words...
If you just want to write and play... Then that's fine, really, I'm not being sarcastic.
Who says that when writing, you have to write flawlessly and just be happy.
I don't know why I wrote this review, maybe because of this sentence.
"But thank you! You are the first one to comment on me. I don't have the confidence to write anymore..."
I want to say: "Since you like writing, keep writing... The words are written for yourself to read. If someone likes them can share them, that would be the best thing."
I wish you happiness.
The little fox is so cute. It's quite naughty~
In fact, I am looking forward to meeting my son and uncle.
The heroine is prone to cheating, and I really look forward to such a heroine becoming stronger and stronger.
Why can't I post it? Why can't I post it? I'm not calm... Girl, I'm just a simple reader. I'm just telling you what I think, and please forgive me if I'm offended. I just saw what you said in Readers Have Something to Say, "I like to express what I want to express through dialogue." But you really didn't achieve this goal. Maybe you have a rough grasp of the situation in your mind, but as a reader, you really don't have the ability to think about it so powerfully... First thought... For example, we can look at how many "Xiaochenchen", how many "hahaha" and how many ellipses there are in this chapter... Maybe when these words appear once or twice, no one reacts, but when they appear many times... Do you think this is a simple "expression?" Although I think writing is just for my own enjoyment and telling a story for everyone to hear. However, these dialogues seem a bit... [Don't Hit Me While Holding the Lid of the Pot] is tasteless. It neither introduces anything nor makes people understand anything from it. It is just too ordinary dialogue. "Have you eaten?" "Eat." "Hahahahahaha." "..... True." This metaphor is a bit poisonous... [Continues to hold head] I read from the beginning to the chapter you are writing now, maybe because there are too many dialogues, so I basically read a third of each chapter, and then I skimmed through it. [I have this problem with reading. I am impatient, not very careful, and read ten lines at a time.] I want to say that there is no event that particularly attracts readers, or—— By the way, I remembered that if you like the current style very much, why not study Japanese word games... For example, love games, such as the Queen of Darkness Gaiden I played this morning. This one has a lot of dialogue and psychological description, but it makes people want to understand this matter from beginning to end. I have to complain about your copywriting here, because it is really not good... If you can give a brief summary, will it help people understand what you are going to write about, instead of just making a wild statement... Hmm, I didn't think of this word... Anyway, that's it. Second thought When I look at the characterization, I think Chen Chen is quite good at it. In my opinion, she is a very boring, low-key, and calm girl. It's just that I'm often troubled by the word "helpless"... Haha. I am a person who is incapable of accepting names [due to my personal constitution, from a distance]. When I saw these names, I was really a little confused... I am trying to recite them... But I remember Yiran... I like them very much. This is the Shenma principle—— Hey, maybe I really am the legendary supporting character Controller, Wangtian. Third thought There are many girls in JJ. Although everyone has their own preferences, everyone agrees on the writing style. So, girl, please come on, make a fist. Just my personal thoughts... If you want to vomit, you can try a more powerful vomit... If you want to narrate an event, consider borrowing the refreshing writing style of the girls in the romance group. If you want to build a perfect world in your mind, you might as well study the QD style... It doesn't matter if there are too many words... If you just want to write and play... Then that's fine, really, I'm not being sarcastic. Who says that when writing, you have to write flawlessly and just be happy. I don't know why I wrote this review, maybe because of this sentence. "But thank you! You are the first one to comment on me. I don't have the confidence to write anymore..." I want to say: "Since you like writing, keep writing... The words are written for yourself to read. If someone likes them can share them, that would be the best thing." I wish you happiness.
The little fox is so cute. It's quite naughty~
In fact, I am looking forward to meeting my son and uncle.