The two tsunderes unexpectedly got together. Jiang Luo became a youth trainee in Yi Yunqing's team because of his youth and frivolity. Then there was the matter of writing a make-up report
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Dear, I read Chapter 123. I think there is something wrong with your layout, especially in the first chapter. Character dialogue and barrage should be listed separately. Chapters two and three are fine. The writing style is relatively novice, and the character's image creation, psychological activities and emotional changes are not detailed enough. For example, in the first three chapters, why Yi Yunqing pays attention to Jiang Luo? They obviously met for less than a day and only exchanged a few words. I don't think they generally have any good feelings, etc. If it was love at first sight or Yi Yunqing had already known Jiang Luo and fell in love with him, then there should be foreshadowing. There are also problems with typos and punctuation pauses. I think you can check whether there are typos or inappropriate word order after writing. The above is my personal opinion. Mutual encouragement!
Dear, I read Chapter 123. I think there is something wrong with your layout, especially in the first chapter. Character dialogue and barrage should be listed separately. Chapters two and three are fine. The writing style is relatively novice, and the character's image creation, psychological activities and emotional changes are not detailed enough. For example, in the first three chapters, why Yi Yunqing pays attention to Jiang Luo? They obviously met for less than a day and only exchanged a few words. I don't think they generally have any good feelings, etc. If it was love at first sight or Yi Yunqing had already known Jiang Luo and fell in love with him, then there should be foreshadowing. There are also problems with typos and punctuation pauses. I think you can check whether there are typos or inappropriate word order after writing. The above is my personal opinion. Mutual encouragement!