Copywriting of this article: Lin Su is a second-generation supermodel whose family owns supermarket chains in major cities across the country. Rich, beautiful, and happy family.
Until one day, when she went to her supermarket to buy things, she met a strange woman named Cheng Jiajia.
[This cannon fodder is really pitiful, so what if his family owns a chain supermarket. When the apocalypse comes, everything becomes cheaper. The heroine Cheng Jiajia.
[Take more things. If you don't take them now, you will make it easier for outsiders in the future.
[What a beautiful girl, but she is actually a cannon fodder. The dog author is not a human being! ! !
Knowing that I am actually living in a natural disaster apocalypse novel, and that the world will soon usher in various natural disasters. Lin Su's whole body was about to explode.
Bah, where does this shameless woman come from, she actually wants to take over her big supermarket.
Lin Su went home and escaped the inevitable disaster;
Barrage [Why is Susu cannon fodder going home at this time?
Lin Su flew across the country on his own plane and collected most of the inventory in all the supermarkets at home;
Barrage [Has Susu cannon fodder awakened? Oye...]
After Lin Su made a call, the family villa was reinforced like a turtle shell.
Barrage [This turtle shell is enough for a turtle, Su Su doesn't want to rely on the turtle shell to survive the end of the world...]
After the end of the world really came, Lin Su took his relatives and friends to stay in his villa and face the various disasters that followed.
At this time, the heroine Cheng Jiajia was still dreaming about how to receive the warehouse supplies from Lin Sujia Supermarket.
Reading Guide: 1. This article takes place on Green River Planet and has nothing to do with reality.
2. There is no special ability, and a space for everyone appears.
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Advance copy copy "Great Plant Recovery [Natural Disaster]"
There was a bumper harvest of crops in the fields.
The flowers grown at home are in full bloom.
The city, which is like a steel forest, is full of greenery.
The air filled with smog pollution is purified.
People are happy about the improvement of the environment and cheer for getting closer to nature.
But Xie Tao, a migrant worker who suddenly awakened to the space, felt cold all over when he looked at the green city.
Soon, her premonition came true.
First, a large amount of pollen fills the air, causing large-scale allergic respiratory diseases.
Then a large number of plant spores were dispersed by the wind, causing large-scale human parasitism.
Then there are the beautiful flowers and lush branches, which suddenly open their fangs.
Until the end, even the weeds underfoot can kill someone at any time.
Industrial civilization collapsed, and humans returned to slash-and-burn farming, struggling to survive surrounded by deep green forests.
Xie Tao can only work hard to survive with her family surrounded by green plants and welcome this great plant recovery.
Mission: Nothing comes for nothing
Reader comments
Touch the baby. Many children received too much shock when they were too young. In order to keep them alive, their instinct will secrete hormones to make them feel less sad. This path will form a habit and they will become calmer when they grow up. Some people will regard this calmness as indifference, but I don't think it is necessary to show pain to be painful. This calmness is proof that they have tried hard to survive, and will also help them save more people in dangerous times in the future.
I have been hit hard by this relationship with my father. Recently I have been stuck in a relationship that I urgently need to break away from. I still cannot learn to forgive for the time being. The communication with my father has become more and more limited since I was a child. It will be great when I can really come out of it...
I really want to watch the plot of Shura Field!
I really like this article, please keep it up!
Hello Cai Cai (what kind of trouble do you want to make by shouting people's names at this time==), I am Lan Ye from the review shop. I am really embarrassed that my order has been delayed until now. I'm sorry.
Let's get to the point.
First of all, the title and copywriting of this article clearly indicate the subject matter and cuteness of this article - Douhua Wen, which allows readers who like this genre to quickly find it. This article is marked as a heart-warming article, so there shouldn't be too many abuse points in the whole article.
But... I've already written fifty-four chapters of Kiss You, and there are still typos in the copy==
"Watch how the sinister master leads his little apprentice into his own trap step by step ╭(╯3╰)╮" In this sentence, first of all, the color you use is not particularly conspicuous, which makes it a little difficult to see. Secondly, the trap is not written like that==
From the perspective of character creation, Zheng Yunho in Cai Caiwen is a powerful attacker who is a bit cheeky most of the time. Since I don't like TVXQ very much, I went to Baidu to check Zheng Yunho's character. He is a team member of TVXQ. Long, the external feeling must be strong and polite, but in private, he should have another side, so you also showed this in the article, but his strong side was not described enough, so it makes people feel that the character image is slightly broken. Moreover, Nainai, your explanation of their identities in real life is a little strange. At first, you said that he was a college student, and later you said that he was a singer. So I wonder, as a singer, why does Jung Yunho have time to play Jian San online every day? I hope Cai Cai can add some explanations about their real life.
Kim Jae-joong, on the other hand, was shown as a arrogant person who is actually shy but seems pushy. I went to ferry him again on Lan Ye and found that everyone said that Kim Jae-joong is a cold-looking person with a warm heart. Cai Cai also showed this, but it did not reflect the strong side of his character [this is just a small flaw, I personally think this should be more interesting]. Since this article has no abuse points, family members and the like do not seem to have any influence at all. So far, no competitive opponents have appeared. It is estimated that this article will go smoothly and warmly.
However, such feelings are too superficial. This kind of everyday writing really doesn't make people want to continue reading. Lan Ye, I guess, this is probably one of the reasons why the number of clicks became less and less. So far, I have only seen one small conflict: Kim Jaejoong saw Jung Yunho walking with another girl, got jealous and ran away. But I think this plot is a bit blunt. As a singer, Jung Yunho will definitely have female fans, and Kim Jaejoong gives people a calm (cold?) Feeling. How could he get angry easily when he sees Jung Yunho talking to girls? I suggest you mix all kinds of small abuses together. For example, you first saw Jung Yunho having a happy conversation with a girl the day before, and then you heard him talking to a girl on the phone or accidentally saw an ambiguous text message from a girl. In this way, by adding up the layers, you can write a chapter of more conflicting abuse points! Lan Ye feels that if a relationship is so good that there is no major conflict, it will be difficult for people to leave an impression, and it will be difficult for people to feel that it is real. It is recommended that even if Cai Cai is a big abuser and doesn't play, she can still abuse Yiqing a little [evil face].
So, next I will start to list the shortcomings I found.
First, the encounter between the two of them at the beginning of the article is a bit confusing. Cai Cai, you have already stated in the previous article that the price of the coarse cloth is very high. This can indeed elicit Zheng Yunho's gratitude after Xiao Zai gave the coarse cloth to Zheng Yunho, but why did Xiao Zai give such a high-priced thing to Zheng Yunho, who was still a stranger? Level 40 shouldn't be considered a novice anymore. It's impossible not to know this thing that should be called common sense. Since the price of coarse cloth is very high, why didn't Xiaozai sell it themselves? It is suggested that Cai Cai change the beginning to Xiao Zai saving Zheng Yunhao but not accepting any material gifts from him, so Zheng Yunhao decided to join the gang and become his apprentice. Of course, if Cai Cai has a better idea, you can just ignore what I said above.
Second, the space transition in this article is too rigid. Every time Cai Caiyou changes scenes, the words "[Main City - Yangzhou]" will be listed as a prompt. However, this transition is really a bit empty. Although it is an online game, the change of location is definitely not something that can be easily done with the click of a mouse. I suggest that Cai Cai change it to: "Arrived in Yangzhou, one of the main cities of Sword 3, Zheng Yunhao controlled this character to fly all the way to the east of the nearby Zailai Town. The wasteland there is the most rough place in Yangzhou City." I think that integrating the change of location into the text instead of mentioning it alone will give people a more immersive feeling.
Third, in fact, the more than two thousand words in each chapter of Caicai You are really a bit short, but when I read it, I felt that it was longer than some three thousand words. The reason is because there are too many dialogues in this article, which is also the biggest flaw of this article. Basically, throughout the whole text are the fans' comments or their real-life conversations, giving people the feeling of a running account. Moreover, their real-life conversations are rarely interspersed with descriptions, which sometimes makes it unclear who is saying this, which greatly affects reading. It is recommended that Cai Cai describe more details, expressions, and movements of the speaker, and that the dialogue between the helpers can also be appropriately reduced.
Fourth, I suggest that Cai Cai use correct punctuation symbols such as "" when describing real-life conversations. Irregular use of punctuation symbols such as "" will confuse readers to a certain extent and make them unable to distinguish what you are describing. Forgive me for my obsessive-compulsive disorder==
As a fan who loves TVXQ, Cai Cai's article can almost perfectly express the character's characteristics. However, as an online game novel, I suggest Nai Cai carefully revise it based on the points I mentioned above. Finally, Nai Cai must insist on updating! It's been a few days since there has been an update, so keep up the good work!
Above.
By Typos King Review Shop, Lan Ye
Looking forward to the follow-up! Update soon!
In this chapter, it seems too unusual for the parents to add their surname when calling the goddess. Maybe the author didn't pay attention. Sweet meeting the parents, Kaisen
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Touch the baby. Many children received too much shock when they were too young. In order to keep them alive, their instinct will secrete hormones to make them feel less sad. This path will form a habit and they will become calmer when they grow up. Some people will regard this calmness as indifference, but I don't think it is necessary to show pain to be painful. This calmness is proof that they have tried hard to survive, and will also help them save more people in dangerous times in the future.
I have been hit hard by this relationship with my father. Recently I have been stuck in a relationship that I urgently need to break away from. I still cannot learn to forgive for the time being. The communication with my father has become more and more limited since I was a child. It will be great when I can really come out of it... I really want to watch the plot of Shura Field!
I really like this article, please keep it up!
Hello Cai Cai (what kind of trouble do you want to make by shouting people's names at this time==), I am Lan Ye from the review shop. I am really embarrassed that my order has been delayed until now. I'm sorry. Let's get to the point. First of all, the title and copywriting of this article clearly indicate the subject matter and cuteness of this article - Douhua Wen, which allows readers who like this genre to quickly find it. This article is marked as a heart-warming article, so there shouldn't be too many abuse points in the whole article. But... I've already written fifty-four chapters of Kiss You, and there are still typos in the copy== "Watch how the sinister master leads his little apprentice into his own trap step by step ╭(╯3╰)╮" In this sentence, first of all, the color you use is not particularly conspicuous, which makes it a little difficult to see. Secondly, the trap is not written like that== From the perspective of character creation, Zheng Yunho in Cai Caiwen is a powerful attacker who is a bit cheeky most of the time. Since I don't like TVXQ very much, I went to Baidu to check Zheng Yunho's character. He is a team member of TVXQ. Long, the external feeling must be strong and polite, but in private, he should have another side, so you also showed this in the article, but his strong side was not described enough, so it makes people feel that the character image is slightly broken. Moreover, Nainai, your explanation of their identities in real life is a little strange. At first, you said that he was a college student, and later you said that he was a singer. So I wonder, as a singer, why does Jung Yunho have time to play Jian San online every day? I hope Cai Cai can add some explanations about their real life. Kim Jae-joong, on the other hand, was shown as a arrogant person who is actually shy but seems pushy. I went to ferry him again on Lan Ye and found that everyone said that Kim Jae-joong is a cold-looking person with a warm heart. Cai Cai also showed this, but it did not reflect the strong side of his character [this is just a small flaw, I personally think this should be more interesting]. Since this article has no abuse points, family members and the like do not seem to have any influence at all. So far, no competitive opponents have appeared. It is estimated that this article will go smoothly and warmly. However, such feelings are too superficial. This kind of everyday writing really doesn't make people want to continue reading. Lan Ye, I guess, this is probably one of the reasons why the number of clicks became less and less. So far, I have only seen one small conflict: Kim Jaejoong saw Jung Yunho walking with another girl, got jealous and ran away. But I think this plot is a bit blunt. As a singer, Jung Yunho will definitely have female fans, and Kim Jaejoong gives people a calm (cold?) Feeling. How could he get angry easily when he sees Jung Yunho talking to girls? I suggest you mix all kinds of small abuses together. For example, you first saw Jung Yunho having a happy conversation with a girl the day before, and then you heard him talking to a girl on the phone or accidentally saw an ambiguous text message from a girl. In this way, by adding up the layers, you can write a chapter of more conflicting abuse points! Lan Ye feels that if a relationship is so good that there is no major conflict, it will be difficult for people to leave an impression, and it will be difficult for people to feel that it is real. It is recommended that even if Cai Cai is a big abuser and doesn't play, she can still abuse Yiqing a little [evil face]. So, next I will start to list the shortcomings I found. First, the encounter between the two of them at the beginning of the article is a bit confusing. Cai Cai, you have already stated in the previous article that the price of the coarse cloth is very high. This can indeed elicit Zheng Yunho's gratitude after Xiao Zai gave the coarse cloth to Zheng Yunho, but why did Xiao Zai give such a high-priced thing to Zheng Yunho, who was still a stranger? Level 40 shouldn't be considered a novice anymore. It's impossible not to know this thing that should be called common sense. Since the price of coarse cloth is very high, why didn't Xiaozai sell it themselves? It is suggested that Cai Cai change the beginning to Xiao Zai saving Zheng Yunhao but not accepting any material gifts from him, so Zheng Yunhao decided to join the gang and become his apprentice. Of course, if Cai Cai has a better idea, you can just ignore what I said above. Second, the space transition in this article is too rigid. Every time Cai Caiyou changes scenes, the words "[Main City - Yangzhou]" will be listed as a prompt. However, this transition is really a bit empty. Although it is an online game, the change of location is definitely not something that can be easily done with the click of a mouse. I suggest that Cai Cai change it to: "Arrived in Yangzhou, one of the main cities of Sword 3, Zheng Yunhao controlled this character to fly all the way to the east of the nearby Zailai Town. The wasteland there is the most rough place in Yangzhou City." I think that integrating the change of location into the text instead of mentioning it alone will give people a more immersive feeling. Third, in fact, the more than two thousand words in each chapter of Caicai You are really a bit short, but when I read it, I felt that it was longer than some three thousand words. The reason is because there are too many dialogues in this article, which is also the biggest flaw of this article. Basically, throughout the whole text are the fans' comments or their real-life conversations, giving people the feeling of a running account. Moreover, their real-life conversations are rarely interspersed with descriptions, which sometimes makes it unclear who is saying this, which greatly affects reading. It is recommended that Cai Cai describe more details, expressions, and movements of the speaker, and that the dialogue between the helpers can also be appropriately reduced. Fourth, I suggest that Cai Cai use correct punctuation symbols such as "" when describing real-life conversations. Irregular use of punctuation symbols such as "" will confuse readers to a certain extent and make them unable to distinguish what you are describing. Forgive me for my obsessive-compulsive disorder== As a fan who loves TVXQ, Cai Cai's article can almost perfectly express the character's characteristics. However, as an online game novel, I suggest Nai Cai carefully revise it based on the points I mentioned above. Finally, Nai Cai must insist on updating! It's been a few days since there has been an update, so keep up the good work! Above. By Typos King Review Shop, Lan Ye
Looking forward to the follow-up! Update soon!
In this chapter, it seems too unusual for the parents to add their surname when calling the goddess. Maybe the author didn't pay attention. Sweet meeting the parents, Kaisen