[The shy academic master is attacked VS the unruly transfer student]
(Maybe Gong will have some tea)
(The ambiguous relationship between the top student and the top student)
"Did you hear that the transfer student is so handsome!!!
Ah, yes, yes, and he and Wen Lin Xueba are a good match! "
The two people not far away at this time
Wen Lin:…………
Shen Jinyan:…………
On the spring outing soon
"Alin, Alin——, come here and try the barbecue I gave you. How do you like it?"
"Well, it's pretty good. My face is so old, and I can still get dust on my face."
"Hey, then help me wipe it off."
Not far away, "Ah ah ah, look at how much they love each other. This is what I'm dreaming about tonight!"
Note: I have met each other before. I will slowly recall it later, and then cou~, sparking love.
Because it has to go through my second revision, it cannot be updated daily, so please be patient! Please give me your support and let me know if you have any good suggestions. Thank you!
Purpose: May all lovers in the world get married eventually
Reader comments
Even before I started reading, I discovered that a common mistake newcomers make is the layout. Sometimes you can add a few more paragraphs, and the main purpose is to make it look beautiful. Writing a novel cannot be like writing an essay without connecting the paragraphs together. If you want to know how to arrange the details in detail, you can just click on the novels written by the big guys and observe how they are arranged.
Keep writing to me, read it well
There is also the third paragraph on the first page. It is best not to put the character's dialogue in a natural paragraph. But the last sentence in your paragraph seems to be said by the male protagonist, but his father's words are already mentioned above, so the male protagonist's sentence should be changed to a natural paragraph.
After reading it till now, let me summarize my thoughts after reading it. Putting aside literary talent and plot, let's talk about the most basic issues first. The author has two relatively big problems, formatting and dialogue punctuation issues. These are the most basic. I suggest the author carefully observe how other good authors write. When talking about literary talent, my writing style is okay when describing the surroundings, just keep using it. As for the plot, the plot is average, has no highlights, and is not attractive. I hope the author can change it and write some plots with conflicts and highlights, so as to attract more readers.
Even before I started reading, I discovered that a common mistake newcomers make is the layout. Sometimes you can add a few more paragraphs, and the main purpose is to make it look beautiful. Writing a novel cannot be like writing an essay without connecting the paragraphs together. If you want to know how to arrange the details in detail, you can just click on the novels written by the big guys and observe how they are arranged.
Keep writing to me, read it well
There is also the third paragraph on the first page. It is best not to put the character's dialogue in a natural paragraph. But the last sentence in your paragraph seems to be said by the male protagonist, but his father's words are already mentioned above, so the male protagonist's sentence should be changed to a natural paragraph.
After reading it till now, let me summarize my thoughts after reading it. Putting aside literary talent and plot, let's talk about the most basic issues first. The author has two relatively big problems, formatting and dialogue punctuation issues. These are the most basic. I suggest the author carefully observe how other good authors write. When talking about literary talent, my writing style is okay when describing the surroundings, just keep using it. As for the plot, the plot is average, has no highlights, and is not attractive. I hope the author can change it and write some plots with conflicts and highlights, so as to attract more readers.