Ran Weiya: My mother has two eyes, a nose, and a mouth. My mother's hair is very long. She often sweeps it on my face when I sleep. My mother's voice is very nice. I don't know what she is talking about most of the time. My mother is very popular. Every night There are many things that come to my house to look for her in the city, and sometimes those things will come to see me, but I don't like my mother's friends. They always like to touch my head. Last time, an uncle's hand almost scratched my face. My mother didn't care about that uncle and laughed happily. My mother also works very hard. She always goes out in the middle of the night and comes back in the morning, but that's okay. There are always a lot of things to sleep with when my mother is here. I don't like those slimy things, but my mother said that I will often be with them in the future, so I can only do this. My mother is very skillful. She used to make a bead for me out of bones, but she doesn't cook often because her cooking is so amazing...
The teacher commented: My mother has two eyes, a nose, and a mouth... This sentence is completely redundant. Have you ever seen whose mother has extra eyes? You said you don't know what your mother is talking about? ? You are very popular. The person who came to find your mother is not a thing. You can't write it like that. People are not things. Why did that uncle scratch your face? ? Don't think too much about it, kid, a lot of things sleep with you? ? And the dishes can never be described as miraculous... Rewrite.